CitrusArms

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

Oh man, 5-man-team melee.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

I remember hearing once that reading good books can help you write better. Perhaps it's something I should do more of. I just got done with 1984 and Fahrenheit 451. I think I might read Dune, next...

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

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Burth's the only one asking, but I have no complaints about your writing either. You characterize decently well, with enough detail, strong verbs, and varied sentence structure to keep it interesting, and you clearly pay attention to your grammar, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling. You sometimes switch between past tense and present tense for no immediately obvious reason, which can be somewhat jolting, and you still use a bunch of passive verbs that could be changed into anything more interesting without too much difficulty. All in all, you're a good Casual writer. Fun to RP with and exhibiting competence, but perhaps in need of more editing to make sure everything's the best it could be.

@Lugubrious

That makes sense. They're all first drafts.

As for the tense switching... I think I use it as action vs. reaction? I don't notice tense all that much, myself. x:

Well, it's not that I don't notice it. More like... I dunno. *shrugs*

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

As long as everyone's asking, how's my writing?

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

Trinity Stratos

"Sasha." Trinity looked around cautiously, before lowering her hood. There was no way they'd get away with trying anything now, so close to the hotel with all her guild members in it. Though she was confident she had lost them for now.

"Not at the moment, but they tried again. I managed to evade them, but... too close." The minstrel shook.her head and glanced around again. "Let's go inside before we talk more." She began to move toward the hotel, intent on getting to the safety of inside.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

*eats Ravens foot*

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

*rolls slowly* Caaaaaaaaaits

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

*gnaws on Caits*

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

Trinity Stratos

Crocus Streets

Trinity made her way quietly through the streets, greeting faces she'd seen watching her perform and telling them hurriedly that she went in a different direction than she actually did. After a way of weaving through streets and side streets, she stops after ducking into a shop near the hotel. "I think that'll do..." The minstrel moves into the shop and approaches the clerk. "Excuse me, do you have a rear room I can hide in? I'm trying to avoid some folks. They could be right behind me."

The clerk considered it for a moment before nodding and sending Trinity into the back room. Not too long after, her three pursuers entered the shop, spreading out and looking around. Mr. Milan approached the clerk, beginning to question the man. At first, he's calm and polite, then a little aggressive. Before he can get physical, Kracko interjects, "Milan! That's enough. She's not here. Let's go before we draw attention."

If Trinity was here, Stephani had to let her escape. The guild was so strange lately... chasing someone, like this, was out of the question.

They left.

Trinity waited for a few people to wander into the store before leaving, thanking the clerk for his kindness. She had requipped herself with a cloak to conceal herself, moving not so quickly as to draw the attention of someone watching. It looked like something might be happening in the ranks of Nightshade Sylphium, she should consult with Penny.

Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

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Of course.

If anyone passed out I'd have them fast to a hospital.

I pounce on the weakness of sleep. I will use you as a pillow because it's comforting

@Caits

*naps with caits* Snuggles are the best. :3