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Back when dinosaurs ruled the Earth, I got started with writing online on the Spore forums. Man, those were the days. We're talking like 12 years ago 2010-ish!

I've been here on and off for almost as long, and have GM'd a bunch of different things to varying success.

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A few notes: per Vec's explanations off of here, the world is currently flat and infinite or close enough to infinite (think Minecraft). He said that's subject to change if gods want to work together to reshape it into a sphere, but I think we should keep it flat because it's funny.

Animals are essentially dispersed everywhere; these early humans are spread out pretty far too, but there is still a gradient where the ones close to Sarhush (let's just call this area where everyone started 'spawn', lol) at spawn will have received the gifts of his Mes, and the ones further away will have not. Those distant humans are very ooga-booga. The ones near spawn are more advanced already and that gap will likely increase as Sarhush keeps giving them more Mes in my posts to come.

Of course technology doesn't have to come from a Me or divine blessing and can spread naturally, but that takes some time. So for now there is sort of a gradient where the most advanced humans are (and will probably continue to be) the ones closest to spawn.

Feel free to do whatever you like with the humans anywhere. I'm just making this gradient so that people can do things with Neanderthal cavemen far from spawn if they want, or they can fast forward to civilization etc. by sticking closer to spawn.
@Vec I'm pretty sure the 'egg' that you mention for me is the same object as the 'pearl' dissolved into the sea?

I wrote that Sarhush approached the egg and tried to investigate, but then there was that Yzechr post where he jumped in to steal it first.

I don't have it totally worked out straight but I think there's some sort of inconsistency IC. @Cmmelody can perhaps clarify. There's no rush to push any edit onto that update because Frettzo and I are still working on that post together.
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It's no problem, I ended with Sarhush just walking towards the thing on purpose in case anybody else wanted to grab it first or contest him. Actually you taking it helps me a bit because now I can write something with Frettzo without having to wait on Vec to post about whatever the sphere is or was.


In those distant days, those ancient nights, afore the foundation of all things and the rise of the First City, it is said that the head of Sarhush was crowned only with wisdom. Even then in the earliest of times his ambitions and great vision were present; he looked upon the bleak waste-expanse of an unnamed world, his lip curled.

He stood, and then he spun, beholding the entirety of the creation that surrounded him. His sharp eyes pierced the mist, for he sees with a sight that is beyond the sight of men. He observed that chaos and formlessness abounded, draped over the shoulders of creation as a thick shroud, but the world yearned for more than that. There was an inner working within its depths, a structure and an ordering that longed to burst forth and gloriously manifest. Sarhush accepted the silent task of freeing that greatness; he began at once the work of cultivating this plane.

All great works must begin as a thought, and then with a name: so Sarhush called the world Ashuru. He proclaimed the name aloud, with no heed for the other beings about him. He had yet to truly notice them.

As the words parted from Sarhush's lips, there manifested a Me. In open moment did the go have an open hand, the palm outstretched towards the forbidding outline of the nearby forest--he knew instinctively that he did not like that place, and that if its corruption managed to fully manifest, he would have to see it destroyed--and in the next moment the first Me manifested. It took shape as a perfectly smooth disc of stone, contoured like the land and the sea around and streaked with the colors of this bleak landscape. It was a sort of model of Ashuru.

Sarhush did not know what to make of the thing; his fingers had hardly grasped the newly manifested Me before it fell from his hand. He knew it was important, so he shifted it to his left palm and clutched it tightly for safekeeping. Conceiving of such a Me was a form of exertion in its own ineffable way; though this was a toil of the hands, it nonetheless made Sarhush break a sweat. It was only then that he noticed a ripe and unpleasant odor. He sniffed at the Me of Ashuru, but there was no aroma permeating from it. He sniffed at the sea breeze, but it carried a different and less pungent sort of scent; he even stooped to smell the bleak black sand. Only then did he think to smell beneath his own arm, and he realized that the reek was that of his own sweat. He laughed and paid no more heed to the stink; there was too much important work for him to be concerned with washing it away.

At some point in his musings, one of the others had spoken to herself. He hadn't paid any heed as she'd said 'trident', but when she announced her intention to wander off, it caught Sarhush's attention.

“Join if you care, it matters little to me,” she called out. At least she had some initiative.

Sarhush did not especially care to leave the shore so soon, so he answered her, "When you have finished, return to us with your findings!"

Another one, Khthon, seemed to be scrutinizing the black sand much more closely than Sarhush had felt necessary.

Perhaps not all beings were in possession of such vision and purpose as Sarhush. Perhaps the others would need direction and command from him, lest they find themselves idle, or playing with sand, or wandering off to explore before the precise nature of their work had even been decided. He made note of this thought, but at that time he had not yet entirely understood the concept of kingship or accepted his mantle there, so it was not yet enough to manifest a second Me.

"I am Sarhush, and this world I have called Ashuru," the god boomed loud enough for the rest of them to hear, even the departing Adria. He always stood tall, but in that moment he straightened himself and stood even taller, chin held high. "We have much work set out before us, but first we must gather our bearings."

Sarhush's eye was caught by a small seashell by his foot, but he did not stoop down to inspect it any closer. Further down the shore was something that seemed much more important: the sphere of perfect smoothness. His gaze transfixed upon the object for a long moment. "What is that thing?" he asked aloud, not so loud or authoritative as he'd been a moment ago. He strode towards it with the mind to claim the orb in his right hand. Could it be like the Me that he held in his left?

Thanks for the detailed thoughts and feedback by the way, @Vec. It's fun to engage with someone about character ideas and sheets. I transferred it to the characters tab after another round of minor edits and revisions; the biggest one was the addition of this part,

"Sarhush is like the bellow of a forge; it is his desire to find and kindle such sparks into great forgefires, that upon the anvil of life can the world itself be wrought and shaped to a better form. Sarhush wants to observe and occasionally aid the great rulers of history, for under his tutelage they may erect great monuments. Their names will become legends, and through their prestige will Sarhush's own grow."

I also changed around his fluff titles near the top of the sheet to reflect that he's going to be handing out these Mes. Picked at the dialogue and description of the RP example a bit more too.


@Cyclone RE: Sharhush
Compelling concept. Three structural issues to resolve:

Firstly, Sarhush believes the strong naturally dominate, yet he blesses rulers. Every intervention proves his philosophy wrong—if they needed help, they weren't naturally strong. You could, instead, reframe blessings as tests: "I grant you one advantage; if you cannot turn it into lasting dominion, you were never worthy."

Secondly, Burning every tree and destroying all wilderness doesn't build civilization but causes famine and ecological collapse. Even brutal empires practiced resource management. Change "destroy nature" to "subjugate and exploit nature ruthlessly." This comes off with the same intensity and ruthlessness, but remains functional. After all, a god of Civilization who advocates destroying the natural resources civilization needs is self-contradictory. It's like a god of War who wants all weapons melted down.

Thirdly, right now Sarhush only opposes things (democracy, kindness, nature). Give him a positive vision, like monuments piercing the sky, dynasties spanning millennia, cities so magnificent mortals willingly serve. This makes him ambitious rather than merely spiteful.


I disagree on your takes regarding the first two points. Both had some consideration and deliberate intention on my part.

He is absolutely hypocritical and short-sighted. I want it to be a plotpoint where he causes some sort of famine and collapse by encouraging total destruction of nature. There are many examples of civilizations that did obliterate their environment and bring themselves to ruin (Easter island is the most famous example, but I've read a book called "Collapse" by Jared Diamond that covers a more pertinent example of some early Mayan city-states that did destroy their civilization and cause civilization-ending famines, droughts, and erosion after they did mass deforestation of their surroundings). This is highly in theme for Sarhush as a Mesopotamian-inspired deity too, as in that mythos the natural world is viewed as something fundamentally perverse and to be conquered.

As an aside, this tendency of his will likely prevent the creation of anything too drastic like a world-spanning empire and limit his influence to a multitude of smaller places. Of course I think there's room for actual character development where he eventually learns after he destroys a few civilizations this way and/or some other characters try to talk sense into him.

As in for the second point and him not obeying his own stated philosophy, declaring that "the strongest prevail and the unworthy fail" only really works in hindsight and it's by the same lens that he'd rationalize (the probably many) instances when he tries to prop up some nation but the effort is thwarted by another god blessing their rivals or enemies. But I think the roleplay example shows his nature well; often his "blessing" is not a literal blessing but more like approval. The point is that he'll give "advice" and tell mortals what to do, but it's not like he'd conquer places for for them or give them superhuman abilities etc. The closest he might come to that would be handing out the Mes for things like better weaponry or revolutionary military tactics, and even then I'm not sure he'll do that proactively so much as he would as an arms race with other gods that give out useful technologies or advantages to the ones that they like. It depends on how the IC goes. If technology and setting seem stagnant and we want to get out of the stone age/bronze age somewhere, it's easy enough to have that happen due to Sarrhush proactively handing out a few Mes.

Regarding the last point, I do agree with what you are saying. The story about building an Ashurbanipal-style monument to celebrate the destruction of a city was supposed to show that he valued something like attempts at permanence and legacy. I didn't intend for him to only be "anti-XYZ" and never proactively trying to promote things on his own, but I'll be more explicit and add a few lines stating as much if my intention didn't show.

@Cyclone I suspect your god and mine would make excellent foils for each other, haha.


Hey, hunting beasts is all good by Sarhush.

It'll be a confusing time for mortal rulers when the one smelly divine hobo appears out of nowhere to egg them on to murderous rampages and excess, and the other divine hobo likes to show up in disguise as a starving beggar to see if they're charitable or nice when nobody else is looking. There's no winning!
Here is a tentative submission Vec. I would not want to claim one of the limited slots if many more people that might be more active than myself are clamoring to get in, but if you judge there to be enough room, this would be my first choice of character.

Edit: I went back, changed some wording and fixed a nonsensical typo in the RP example, but most importantly added a paragraph about the Mes under Motivation. This is a somewhat important part of how I imagined him doing things, but I realized I'd neglected to even allude to it in the first iteration of the sheet.

Handing out Mes like candy is probably the primary thing I would have him do IC. I link to the wikipedia that lists out what some of the Mes were in actual mythology, but I'd take some liberties with how they appear here and confine them almost exclusively to technologies that can be weaponized, e.g. horse-drawn chariots, horseback riding, bronze metalcasting to make weapons, etc. Sarhush is not especially interested in trivialities like medicine or sanitation, but such technologies would indirectly pop up as a consequence of him repeatedly teaching rulers better ways to make weapons and conquer things! And of course that saves plenty of things for other gods to offer to mortals too.

By the virtue and power of me mostly Muttonhawk and BBeast, we have the finale of Xos' arc after something like 5 or 6 years. This collab itself was been written on and off for a span of some two years, but let none ever say that Mk. II is dead!

There's an epilogue that will get posted by one of the others later tonight, too.
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