See the PM I sent you ^^. I cleaned up the formatting for you a bit. It looks good to me. I really like the tone it conveys. The poisoner getting eaten really made me chuckled. Sounds like a mighty bda choice of food, on account of the poison and all!
That is a exellent start. Could you expand his back story a bit? GGive us a little more about him. How did he become a boom mage. Expand and detail it a bit. A little description to with the picture would be nice to.
I have PM'd you. I do not approve of people attacking me in my own RP over something so fundemental as Charachter critique. I consider it grandstanding and I've seen RP's get derailed by that kind of behavior. If you have such a obvious gripe with how GM runs his RP, I suggest taking it private in the future.