I was more or less going for what they would do when they escaped the prison, as in the faction would still be around after the escape.
@Everyone
I think everyone should realize that the factions aren't going to stay intact once the prison break occurs. Edmund is going to warp as many people as he can out but you have to remember that is going to be all Player Characters and some choice NPCs. Anyone else who survives will have to be smart and clever and be able to brave the environment surrounding the Center without being caught or killed This means that the largest population of any faction coming out the Center is going to be about five at most, less more likely. There's not going to be enough left of Cross or SIGN or SOUL or the Amazons to keep a faction intact and while I would expect that the faction members that escape might try to keep there faction alive at the beginning if the group as a whole wants to survive it would have band together, not split apart.Weird Tales, once the prison break occurs Sam is welcome to try and keep Cross going but since currently its members consist of you and maybe Manuel you're going to have a very lonely RP separated from the group.
As for progressive I mean non left-wing politics, Sam is described as a traditionalist and his faction wouldn't allow liberals or communists in their ranks, that's what he is getting at.
RIP Harper... Sorry I'm Canadian.
Here is Jason Reed and the faction SIGN
Alright, firstly Malicious Form: Jason is not a computer program, despite his ability to interface with computers him being able to rewrite his own biology only has a very flimsy level of logic behind it, the fact that he would be able to alter himself to be resistant to the barriers is also rather ludicrous. I believe I explained this but the ability dampeners flood the Center with a harmless type of background radiation that has an adverse effect on metahumans by dampening the functionality of there abilities (fringe science I know) this means that if he altered himself to be unaffected by the barriers he'd effectively be altering the meta gene out of himself. Which I think would defeat the purpose.
I have trouble believing that an under eleven year old, no matter how brilliant would have a decent enough understanding of his family situation and the commercial world at large to create products and market them to companies. I would have an even harder time believing that an eleven year old could function without parents. I lived in a troubled home, I know you grow up fast but you don't become self sufficient over night. I can't believe that at eleven being able to function on his own he was also able to keep it a secret. A mother dying of illness would be a matter of public record and while I can see the dad moving away without notice it's not like an apartment is a segregated environment. You'd have your landlord checking up on the place, doing repairs, collecting the rent money and since Jason isn't old enough to have a bank account (and by your bio doesn't have his powers yet) he would have to be paying his rent in cash which I can't see a landlord accepting from a eleven year old boy without asking questions.
The fact that he could sell programs to the CIA and NASA and still be poor is quite frankly ridiculous. The CIA pays well. Like extremely well, if they don't there programmers get desperate and start selling the CIAs programs to rival governments. NASA is likewise not the only space program in existence and they need to keep things confidential so they pay there contractors well to ensure that they don't seek under the table deals with others. Also the CIA and NASA don't do business over the phone. They would be aware of the fact that Jason is like thirteen and if his programs are irrelevant enough (only explanation I can see) that the CIA isn't paying him enough to live off of then they are also able to be written by a lot of different programmers and the CIA now not needing Jason would report his situation to social services.
It is completely illogical for REEL to try to push Jason into cracking this super computer. If they're looking outside of there own group for a hacker to crack it, that means that within there network of hackers there is no one that can do it, or alternatively they don't want to risk getting caught. If this is so obviously outside of Jason's skill range they would go to someone better. Since everything is anonymous in those circles there is no reason to lie about or hide your skill level so they would have a starting point for looking for a more experienced hacker. It would also not make sense for them to go through the effort of obtaining photos of his home to threaten him with if up until this point he hasn't shown that he has the skill to crack this computer.
I don't know exactly what kind of super computer this was but for the most part systems with the kind of power and encryption you seem to be talking about are rarely networked or if they are it is for short periods of time. This is a precaution to prevent hacking. Also when these computers are networked they have complex security that aside from protecting the data also monitors when someone tries to access it and trace the access back to it's source. An alarm would go off the first instant someone tried to hack it. If he made so many failed attempt to hack the computer the police would have been at his door a long time ago. There is no way REEL would be able to recognize that he had used Datakinesis to crack the computer and thus no reason to call the cops. To any other computer user it would simply appear as an increasingly sophisticated and fast moving hacking software.
What the hell kind of phone does he have the can hold the entire operating system of a super computer never mind its library. My phone can only hold half the music from my iTunes. Those super computers are usually an entire room's worth of hard drives, and processors. Your phone has one of each. With his data related ability his phone would be the first thing confiscated in the center. The computers present in the Auction Room are segregated from the system and only have enough access to certain other computers to impress prospective buyers, they wouldn't want a tech meta getting into one of the zones where powers work with a device that is networked.
Finally and this is more my fault for not explaining well (and if anyone else has made this mistake I apologize) but metas don't normally end up with more than one owner. Having a meta isn't like a trophy for rich people, they're bought by black market arms dealers and foreign revolutionaries, hackers and scientists. They have a variety of fates but usually the people who buy them have a job in mind for them, if they do it they get to live, if they won't do it or can't they are either sold back to the Center at a loss or killed. If a meta is sold back to the Center they are considered a bad investment. While the Center still made a profit they don't want to get a reputation for selling defective metas so the bad investment will usually end up being dissected. If you're in the Center you've either been captured by Center agents or sold to them by a bounty hunter. You won't have had an owner previously.
Firstly, why is it that everyone has it out for tech users? It sort of seemed like it was just lumped in there like "Oh yeah and no one likes these guys especially that faction SOUL" with no apparent cause or reason behind it. I mean tech users would have natural disadvantage in the ring without tech to manipulate but I would think that would make people want to keep them around so they could score easy wins and privileges.
If the faction was created to help tech users survive in the Center why would they hold seats for non tech users? For that matter why would non tech users apply knowing that the faction was formed around the concept of protecting tech users?
This is more a suggestion than a note but since you seem so fond of the four letter all in caps names (which I would assume stand for something) I would suggest changing the name of this faction to STEM. It stands for Science Technology Engineering Mathematics. It's a term used in scientific communities.
I'm just going to put this here. See what happens.
I do really like the idea and I would assume from his title "The Messenger" that he's some sort of well messenger for everyone in the prison. Since his ability... well I don't know how to say it without everyone else claiming that there ability falls under the same category but since his ability is almost a part of him as a physical entity (not saying that very well, hope you understand what I mean) I think I could have it so the ability dampeners don't work in quite the same manor on it so he could serve as the Messenger for the prisoners by mimicking the messages of different people and bringing them to others. And in that way since he serves as a neutral party between all the factions he can stay factionless and stay safe.
That being said with a cast this size I can't let you have a second character. If I let you have one then I will be required to let everyone else have a second and while I know not everyone would want that if enough did the RP would get mighty crowded especially since it is still open for new participants. That being said I don't see any reason why this character should go to waste so I propose two options. Either you can have this character and abandon your other one (not the most desirable), or you can turn this guy over to me to be used as an NPC. Maybe later in the game once things settle down or we lose membership I'll allow secondary characters but for the moment one character each.
Oh, and Clovis will be joining SOUL.
What happened to that faction you were designing? Something based around strength abilities?
@Prince of Seraphs I edited my form to change the abilities and such. Please let me know if this works better for the story.
I like it and if I'm being honest it's nice to see someone enter a power that is not inherently destructive or combative. Kudos. Accepted. Now you can post it to the character tab.
@Everyone I do apologize if I'm coming off rather harsh, I'm just trying to be honest. If you feel I've judged your work with very little... tact then you're probably right. I'm not exactly a tactful guy and if at any point I say something that hurts you personally I do apologize and feel free to point it out. I think all of your are very good writers, whatever problems I might have with individual pieces of work or ideas you might come up with I do respect you as a fellow writer.


