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The biggest mistake you can make with a 3!

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I've updated Maya's back story to factor in the changes suggested, also made it so his parents are actually supportive of what's he doing now (Yay non-broken homes!).

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@Genkai OK yeah, I think that's where I was losing it, I didn't know if Correctors had any kind of interaction with normal users or not, so that does clear up a lot for me. I think I'm just going to have Maya be a patron of the DgtWld who focused on studying in the real world as opposed to the linked stuff I had in there before. Actually earn the spot and all. I'll keep the last paragraph as is though for now, and I'll make the changes tomorrow once I get back from my friend's house/work/sleep, likely in that order.

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Thanks for the support all. I was just feeling really depressed the entire drive back and hopefully, I've slept it all out of my system now. And I'll have to see Kingsman another time. I was waiting for her for so long they stopped selling tickets for it. Anyway, moving onto the feedback: @Genkai Yeah, I figured a story like that probably was asking too much. Honestly, I was just trying to get something down before I went off to work that night, but I know it was not my best work. Correctors do stand out among the DgtWld population right? Like if called into action in front of a...well let's say a normie, they can be seen right? I can flip it where he has an encounter with a Corrector early on, possibly getting assaulted by a virus or something, and that offers some sort of inspiration to try and make it into the Corrector ranks. Then he gets chosen on merit as opposed to for redemption. If you don't like the Corrector hazing angle either, I figure with the previous angle it would be a Corrector who has since retired anyway, so I can make the change a tribute instead.

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Well I got stood up, so I'll have a look at the feedback now.

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@vietmyke Fair enough. I have made the necessary update to the cannon and I await further feedback (but I won't get to it until tomorrow, going on my first date in like four years to see Kingsmen).

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@vietmyke Sounds reasonable. I was worried about making the cannons too OP in the beginning, so I definitely agree to the limit. The 11 bit was a joke, but I can definitely throw 7-10 up there. Saves something for the later stages for sure. Little bit more disappointed about the duel wielding ruling but I can see why. I didn't intend for the AoE to be that big, considering they are directed cannons, it was going to be more a cone effect akin to...well the best I can think of coming off the night shift at this hour is the QB vision system that Madden put in place for a few years. I'm open to dropping one of the cannons but I do so in the hopes that Atomik has the option to eliminate recoil by firing with both hands on the gun. Obviously if firing on the run, she may not have the presence of mind to do so and as such recoil would come into effect again, but having both her mitts on the weapon should allow for a more accurate shot.

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I guess I finally have my sheet up now Genkai (Top of Page 3) if you want to have a look through that.

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@AliceinRedHeels I'm glad I have to go ahead on the format steal :) It is very pretty. That's a good point on slacking. I just went with that first because I figured that was the only way I could think of to describe Maya. I'll update that right away. As for the guns, they are meant to be directed attacks at a certain target. I got the idea from a couple of reports I heard about the U.S. military experimenting with sound cannons to attack combatants in Afghanistan (as well as the episode of Brooklyn Nine-Nine where Diaz shoots Boyle with a larger scale model.) The dial settings I've incorporated into the guns can be used to spread that out into an area-of-effect cone shaped blast as well. Since there are capabilities on the guns that would affect teammates, it stands to reason that harmful waves would affect them as well, but given the relative familiarity with the Tokyo unit I would hope Atomik's reputation means her teammates are aware of where she is firing and when. There is some recoil with the guns, and definitely during her first year, Atomik would not have been able to handle them, but for steady firing she is fine. It's on bigger pulses (anything from 7-11) that the recoil is noticeable, but if she's firing a larger single pulse on that level it shouldn't come back to bite the team in audible manners. Just she'd be kinda out of commission for a few seconds. Also I've updated my CS with the new settings on the gun as well as the biography. Don't hesitate with the feedback there either.

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@Hella Cute I know right? I'm surprised no one else went for it right off. Once I started writing though I knew I was going to have the sonic guns XD. The Beat Cannons can definitely have physical capabilities. I just wanted to make sure I wasn't going too OP with the weapon's functions. But I have to figure it wouldn't be too hard for a sonic blast to have percussive powers on actual targets. I'll add that into the description.