Sini

[Approved] Darth Embrus

Having read your review again @Ellri I felt the need to point out a few objections. Yes, Jorick's Embrus has a lot of force and warrior skills, but is that really a deal breaker? Having such skills is something I'd expect from a Darth character. It's when I feel as if a PC approaches invicibility or "OP-ness" my alarms go off. Granted, I've know Jorjor Binks for quite some time and my trust in him as an RPer might influence this. He kills his own chars more often than not if it helps the story. Brutal.

Usually takes at least a decade with a teacher who has mastered it to reach this level, if it is ever reached.

Guide to the Force, on advanced talents

So, even ignoring the other abilities, he has spent five decades studying the advanced techniques, at least as much again studying to become well-trained with five talents, and he’s spent the equivalent of a century or more to master five talents. All before reaching the age of fifty.

For comparison, Darth Theya Katherion, who has spent decades in exploring the nuances of the Force and the Dark Side, has mastered telekinesis and one or two closely linked sub-branches. While we haven’t defined whether it was an innate talent or not (we should fix things like that), the feeling we have of her is that it is not an innate talent. Darth Theya has about 120 years of life more than Darth Embrus, yet she is clearly vastly less powerful in the Force than you’ve made Embrus. See the issue.

We also compared with another character built in the same era and using much of the same material (Sundered Echo’s Darth Nyiss), and she was, with her lower age (59-65) even weaker, even though she too is older than Embrus.

By the age he is at, if he’s spent especially much of his time using that, perhaps in battle considering his Primary Sphere of Influence, he could perhaps have reached mastery in one technique, with near-mastery in something closely related.

@Ellri

I agree he put in a lot of powers/skills but there's a flaw in the criticism here. By your logic only longevitous beings will ever be Darths, something which is fundamentally untrue in Star Wars. Though not era-specific, Anakin was in his early twenties when he became Darth Vader. There are other examples, but this one was easiest. It's also stated in our own PG material that for the rank of Sith Lord the "guesstimate" is 40 years of age. Having Embrus be a Darth at age 45-46 isn't a stretch.

As described in the Sith Guide, there are a number of requirements for the Dark Council to grant someone the rank of Darth. While not all must be present, some are mandatory and most must be present.

• The Dark Council must see the need for a new Darth.
• Good relations with at least one member of the Dark Council
• No enemies on the Dark Council
• The Dark Council will not promote someone who cannot keep his/her enemies in check, either through careful manipulation, or elimination.

@Ellri

In regards to the points I retained above:

• The GMs decide that need, and given the dearth of Sith chars I'd say why not have a Darth? Looking at the source material it of course states that Darths are rare, but what is rare? Plausibly everyone in the PG could pick up a Darth character and we still can classify it as a 'rare' title because it's a setting of galactic proportions.
• Having good relations with one member of the council is fine, but that shouldn't exclude having enemies!
• This can not be a hard requirement. Having rivals and enemies is intrinsically part of Sith (and maybe even Imperial) society. It is not as if the Council has a thing like a 'veto'. I bet a lot of Darths would have enemies on the Dark Council. Personal advancement is often tied in with elimination of the one standing in your way.
• "Keeping enemies in check". Kinda seems like this is where all those fancy force powers and warrior skills could come in handy.

[Approved] Darth Embrus

Essential translation of Ellrisms: "Darth" is too fancy a title for this guy.

[On Hold] Caxal the Blackheart

Like Ellri I would like to see some more meat to the bio/interview. Elsewhere I see no glaring issues, but address the questions and feedback provided above regarding his skills in the Force and pilot seat, as well as some of his connections. If you mention associates you need to flesh them out a bit so they can be interacted with not just your character. When working out possible plots or contacts, these NPC associates might be an easy tie in for other players.

[Approved] Cora Vane, Swoop Racer

Looks great to me. Character's bio picked up speed toward the end. Get it? ;)

[Coruscant, 6 ATC 4] A House Divided II: A Little Wrong

Tychus Alastor, Senator for Alsakan. (still pending approval in character submission board)

Republic Senate files

Name: Tychus Alastor
Species: Human (Alsakani)
Homeworld: Alsakan
Age: 48 (born 42 BTC / 3695 BBY)
Gender: Male
Committee Membership:
Position: Alsakan Planetary Representative, Congressman or “Senator”
Role/specialisation: Agitator, leader of the Axis Caucus (Alsakan aligned worlds along the Perlemian Trade Route)
Current place of Service: Coruscant

Political Information Services Reports

_{Short description of the Senator.}

None too tall, none too wide. Tychus, in spite of his epicure lifestyle, is in shape and is aging rather well. He has a square-jawed, handsome face and affable smile. Together with his rugged charm, these can disarm many during a first meeting. Tychus is an energetic everyman, capable of both intricate and simple speech depending on what audience to cater to.

_{Brief report on career, both within and outside politics.}

See bio for details.

• History and linguistics at Xenvaer University’s Arts and Philosphy faculty.
• ‘Sabattical’ working odd jobs and travelling
• Military Academy, graduated junior lieutentant
• Captain of a company – “the Arrowheads” later known as “Alastor’s Alsakans”
• Entered politics on Alsakan, promoted refugee relief after the Treaty of Coruscant
• Elected as Senatorial candidate, appointed by planetary procedure.

_{Detailed notes on political influence, associates and rivals.}

The group of senators Tychus Alastor heads are known as the ‘Axis Caucus’, because they are devoted to the interests of Alsakan and the Perlemian Trade Route. The Caucus ideals are rooted in the belief central government should meddle as little as possible in local affairs. As such they are deeply concerned with the Republic, while maintaining a regional focus and entertaining a ‘confederate’ point of view. Local independence should not be limited by general government.

Tychus consequently straddles a somewhat politically ambiguous position between the Core and Rim factions and has acquaintances, enemies and allies (such as the Pantoran Senator Eyri Pharliis) on either side of the aisle.

For instance, Tychus has been a long-time promoter of a strong military to counter the Imperial threat, but at the same time opposes stringent Republic meddling in local systems and governments. He is a strong proponent of force projection in the Northern Dependencies, and has expressed Alsakan willingness to do so itself should the Republic not be up to the challenge.

Furthermore, he agrees with the Rim faction that special attention should be given to the plight of refugees and migrants. However, Tychus sees these as an opportunity to expand Alsakan (and Republic) influence along the Perlemian Trade Route and newly charted Hydian Way.

_{Psychological evaluation of candidate.}

Hard-working and hard-boiled, grizzled, and a bit of thrill-seeker. Ironclad, he knows the system is rigged, and always had been. However, he wants more than just a decent cut of it. Tychus is dedicated to getting by and doing good for his people. He enjoys pushing people’s buttons. Tychus likes antagonising and badgering people, skills he puts to use in the political arena. Doesn't shy away from controverse. Life has been hard on him, and now he is in a position to influence the lives of others for the better he simultaneously finds himself enjoying his elevation. Tychus is able to take pleasure from the little things. Always a bon-vivant, he also developed a fondness for hooch.

_{List and description of known and suspected flaws. To be put into restricted database.}

Has trouble with authority and can affect a cavalier attitude. He is proud of his Alsakan heritage, sometimes to a fault. Has a tendency to drink. Accused of jingoism.
(more to be added as interesting for RP)

[Approved] Darth Embrus

'Go' from me. One more.

[ASOIAF]: Before the Dragons Danced

Made her younger and sent her to be perhaps be handmaiden to our heiress Targaryen.

Joanna Lannister

Name: Joanna Lannister, "Lion Cub of Casterly Rock"
Age: 15
House/Affilitation: House Lannister

Appearance:

Biography: Joanna Lannister in many ways hadn't expected to partake in the life she had - as born a woman and though first-child for the seat of Casterly Rock - she was behind inheritance to her brothers Tyland and Jason Lannister.

Thus while she was the eldest, she mostly partook in the different life of House Lannister - far from becoming a lady or handmaiden, she instead used her fame and fortune to train. Already born young and with a higher vitality than even her brothers Joanna played in the same games as her brothers. As her dreams too were to become like Rhaenys Targaryen, a warrior and a woman at that. This was aided by Joanna being born stronger and taller than most women.

Still life for Joanna wasn't sunshine, as numerous times she denied and refused any courtship that her father had engaged her in - so much so, that some rumored her of liking only women and other whispers. So much so, that when Joanna was five-and-ten old - she was given a choice of 'doing her duty' and stopping her foolish dreams or being warded elsewhere.

As such, Joanna was soon enough sent to King' Landing as a handmaiden for Rhaenyra Targaryen.

---

Alton Frey

Name: Alton 'Longjustice' Frey; Master of Laws

Age: 55

Appearance:

House/Affliation: Frey/Targaryen

Biography: Alton Frey happened to be one of many uncles from the House of Frey - having spent his earlier years helping his five brothers manage and run the Twins, writing up laws and rules that helped increase the livelihood of both those crossing their bridge and the smallfolk in their lands.

Alton Frey was a deep man of honor and the law - taking things on some occasions literally. Holding both his brothers and their families to a high standard, in order to improve their lot in Westeros. Not to mention, with House Frey as large as always - rules and boundaries helped keep everyone from going after each other.

Sadly the relationship of Alton and his brothers wouldn't last - as the son of one, was caught pillaging one villager' hut during a drunken rampage. Instead of excusing and paying for his crime, Alton instead decreed they be hanged or 'take the black'. This ended up alienating him from House Frey in the end - since in their minds, he was considered a 'rat'.

Granted Alton' reply at such a situation was to call them all 'rats whom ate other rats'. Alton spent most of his time as always, travelling the lands as a hedge knight, and upholding justice. Keeping the King' Road clear of brigands and bandits - utilizing his longbow, often claiming to be 'the best bowman in the Seven Kingdoms'.

During one such incursions he encountered the 'Wise King' Jaeharys I Targaryen during one of his many visits in the Two Crowns Inn. Here he would befriend the wise and just King - five years later, he would once more meet the King, when he was asked to fill the post as Master of Laws. Due to in part the last one dying, and his growing reputation for upholding law and order in the Riverlands - a man of virtue and honor.

For the time being he has held the post for almost twenty-seven years.

@NecroKnight

Right, I'll first get on your Frey since that'll take the least time. I'm on board with the character but there are a few discrepancies.

• You first state he has five brothers, then switch that to two in the next paragraph.
• What power did he wield at all to decree anything? If he wasn't lord, what enabled him to be able to punish his nephew?

Moving on to Joanna.

• "Already born young" (paragraph two) --> aren't we all born young?
• I think it's very good to have her wilful and contrarian, but without the martial aspect. To me it would seem more setting appropriate to have her obsess over hunting, hawking or horses instead of playing at swords.
• I'm also a bit unconvinced regarding her 'punishment' for being stubborn. A position as royal handmaiden is prestigious and something most (or all) houses would find desirable. Sending her to Viserys' court hardly seems like a disciplinary matter. Sending her to the Silent Sisters though... but that would remove her from the RP.

I suggest you think her over a bit with these notes in mind.

[ASOIAF]: Before the Dragons Danced

<Snipped quote by Sini>

Surely they love the upjumped stewards being in charge..

I was going to make one of my sons squire somewhere in his past. Not sure if Oldtown would be a viable option?

Also I was just wondering what the situation is with the Kingsguard? Are you guys sticking to canon with who was in it at this time, or is it open to players at all? No worries if it isn't.

@Danvers

Sure thing. Ser Bryndon is a renowned knight. Unless you want to pair him with the heir: Ormund (but he's been travelling a lot in the past 5 years).

I think that regarding the Kingsguard there can be a few spots open for OCs.

[Approved] Tychus Alastor, Republic Senator for Alsakan

Republic Senate files

Name: Tychus Alastor
Species: Human (Alsakani)
Homeworld: Alsakan
Age: 48 (born 42 BTC / 3695 BBY)
Gender: Male
Committee Membership:

• TBA through RP
• Armed Services
• Foreign Relations: Migration & Immigration

Position: Alsakan Planetary Representative, Congressman or “Senator”
Role/specialisation: Agitator, leader of the Axis Caucus (Alsakan aligned worlds along the Perlemian Trade Route)
Current place of Service: Coruscant

Political Information Services Reports

_{Short description of the Senator.}

None too tall, none too wide. Tychus, in spite of his epicure lifestyle, is in shape and is aging rather well. He has a square-jawed, handsome face and affable smile. Together with his rugged charm, these can disarm many during a first meeting. Tychus is an energetic everyman, capable of both intricate and simple speech depending on what audience to cater to.

_{Brief report on career, both within and outside politics.}

See bio for details.

• History and linguistics at Xenvaer University’s Arts and Philosphy faculty.
• ‘Sabattical’ working odd jobs and travelling
• Military Academy, graduated junior lieutentant
• Captain of a company – “the Arrowheads” later known as “Alastor’s Alsakans”
• Entered politics on Alsakan, promoted refugee relief after the Treaty of Coruscant
• Elected as Senatorial candidate, appointed by planetary procedure.

_{Detailed notes on political influence, associates and rivals.}

The group of senators Tychus Alastor heads are known as the ‘Axis Caucus’, because they are devoted to the interests of Alsakan and the Perlemian Trade Route. The Caucus ideals are rooted in the belief central government should meddle as little as possible in local affairs. As such they are deeply concerned with the Republic, while maintaining a regional focus and entertaining a ‘confederate’ point of view. Local independence should not be limited by general government.

Tychus consequently straddles a somewhat politically ambiguous position between the Core and Rim factions and has acquaintances, enemies and allies (such as the Pantoran Senator Eyri Pharliis) on either side of the aisle.

For instance, Tychus has been a long-time promoter of a strong military to counter the Imperial threat, but at the same time opposes stringent Republic meddling in local systems and governments. He is a strong proponent of force projection in the Northern Dependencies, and has expressed Alsakan willingness to do so itself should the Republic not be up to the challenge.

Staff members:

• Torka Suggs, an Artiodac, his manservant and bodyguard.
• Ulri, responsible for communications.

Furthermore, he agrees with the Rim faction that special attention should be given to the plight of refugees and migrants. However, Tychus sees these as an opportunity to expand Alsakan (and Republic) influence along the Perlemian Trade Route and newly charted Hydian Way.

_{Psychological evaluation of candidate.}

Hard-working and hard-boiled, grizzled, and a bit of thrill-seeker. Ironclad, he knows the system is rigged, and always had been. However, he wants more than just a decent cut of it. Tychus is dedicated to getting by and doing good for his people. He enjoys pushing people’s buttons. Tychus likes antagonising and badgering people, skills he puts to use in the political arena. Doesn't shy away from controverse. Life has been hard on him, and now he is in a position to influence the lives of others for the better he simultaneously finds himself enjoying his elevation. Tychus is able to take pleasure from the little things. Always a bon-vivant, he also developed a fondness for hooch.

_{List and description of known and suspected flaws. To be put into restricted database.}

Has trouble with authority and can affect a cavalier attitude. He is proud of his Alsakan heritage, sometimes to a fault. Has a tendency to drink. Accused of jingoism.
(more to be added as interesting for RP)

_{Major achievements and failures on record.}

• Served with distinction during the war, through triumph and tragedy. Failed to rise above the rank of Captain due to his antagonistic relation with several superiors.
• Hosted several events, either on Coruscant or Alsakan, regarding relief for refugees due to the war with specific focus on those displaced along the Perlemian Trade Route and Hydian Way.

Interview

_{Personal biography, as detailed by the subject for use in Republic archives. Acquired shortly after last achievement of note.}

“I was a Major at the time Alastor enrolled. A stubborn and insubordinate bastard. He practically lived in the brig as I recall. The man doesn’t hate easily, but when he does… boy.”
– Colonel Dal Intirro, who was Tychus Alastor’s CO during training and instruction.

"Tychus Alastor was one of the most decent men I ever encountered during the Great War. Most everyone else, I can safely say, was either a victim or a villain or quite often both. There's a cocksureness, an overconfidence about him that can make you bridle initially. I know I did, first laying eyes on him. This upstart peacock, fresh from the academy. I ain’t never gonna forget him shouting in that gravelly stentorian tone of his on our first contact: ‘Keep your intervals wide, your eyes open and your and your mate’s asses covered. Fucking move!’ First time I ever heard an officer talking sense. Yet over time you come to see him as a valuable ally and — dare I say it? — a friend.

At first glance, Captain Ty seems like a backwoods buckaroo, one of those good old boys swapping lies about the days gone by. The Cap’ was never shy for a smile, friendly on the surface… tough as nails underneath. He used to smack the fear out of the rookies. You can’t have them freeze up, y’know? No man left behind and all that.

Aye, Tychus Alastor was a most decent and honourable man, and he led with dignity and example. It all came from belief. Captain Ty believed in himself and believed in us. And from that grit came the strength that allowed him and us who followed him to survive everything else the Galaxy threw at us. Not sure how he kept on after the war though. Cap’ got dealt a bad hand. His was one of the greatest tragedies."
- Carm Kirk, a former Sergeant-Major in “the Arrowheads Company” also known as “Alastor’s Alsakans”.

“I tell you I was married once? She was a beaut. Had a kid. Said he was gifted, they said. My darling called it a great honour and wanted to let them Jedi teach him. I didn’t. But, you know how it goes with women. So, we compromised – heh – and let the Jedi train him. A year on and we got word. Kid died in some shuttle accident. Wife didn’t forgive herself. Still not sure that I did. She died come winter of some illness, but really ‘t was her grief that done it.”
– Reputedly Tychus when drunk on the night of his discharge.

Growing up on the Founding World of Alsakan, Tychus was steeped in history and legends of free-spirited individuals. Reflecting their views, the ancient Alsakani national epic, the Archaiad, described the Perlemian Trade Route as "an arrow sent into the possible". Consequently, they had sought a limited economic and political union when the Galactic Republic was formed, and for much of their history were inclined to see Coruscant as too powerful, resulting in the many Alsakan Conflicts. Just as his people were aristocratic in their values and enthusiastic for open spaces and local independence, so was Tychus. Tychus grew up on tales of younger sons seeking distance from authority: adventurers and glory-hounds establishing small colonies in the Inner Rim, and caring little for government bureaucracy or mass-produced goods beyond warships and blasters. These were stories he could very well relate to, being a younger son with a rebellious nature and a strained relationship with his parents.

His own family were the descendants of hunters, freelance pilots, and mining contractors who had built Alsakan's militias into a formidable fighting force. Despite accumulating wealth and power and thus penetrating the ranks of the aristocracy, Tychus's parents never forgot their frugal origins and tried to instill the values of personal discipline and order in their son. In his adolescence, Tychus had joined his uncle Govian on several hunting and trekking expeditions in the dangerous Ten Valleys, geographic relics of Alsakan’s primeval past. The Ten Valleys were also where Archais’ pivotal battle for Alsakan unification took place, further cementing Tychus’ admiration of his people’s history and identity. In addition, through Govian, Tychus learned the importance of triumphing over challenging odds and finding solutions to bring order to chaos.

For much of their early history, the Alsakani did not adopt Old Galactic Standard and continued to speak High Galactic. They were responsible for popularising the High Galactic alphabet as an alternative to Aurebesh, as part of Alsakan's efforts to portray itself as an alternate galactic capital. The High Galactic script was created after the Alsakani combined Tionese characters with others of their own invention, creating a distinctive new alphabet. Owing to Alsakan's values, High Galactic became a popular script among upper-class speakers of Galactic Basic, and its influence endured for millennia during and after the Alsakan Conflicts. Furthermore, the Alsakani experienced significant Tionese influence due to their prolonged occupation during the Tionese War (ca. 24,000 BBY). This occupation was even envisioned as having substantially influenced Alsakani culture and language, even going so far as to inculcate a myth that the Alsakani were a lost Tionese colony.

Tychus went on to study history and linguistics at Xenvaer University’s Arts and Philosphy faculty. Torn between an academic or literary career, Tychus spent a year travelling and working the odd job. This was when he met his future wife. He eventually wanted to pursue historical research, but instead of becoming an authority on Alsakan heritage, the prolonged war chose for him. He decided to ‘do his part’. His degree landed him in ‘officer school’, and consequently a position as lieutenant. Tychus ended his military career with the rank of captain, commanding a company known as “the Arrowheads”. By the time of the treaty they had ended up with the sobriquet of “Alastor’s Alsakans”. During the course of the conflict, personal tragedy struck: his son died in an accident while training to become a Jedi, and his wife perished from some illness.

After the war, Tychus discharged and went into politics. He was committed to alleviating the plight of refugees, particularly those tied to Alsakan colonisation efforts along the Perlemian. Possessing wits and charm made him an effective politician who knew how to shape an attractive narrative. Particularly his knowledge on his people’s past made him an appealing candidate on Alsakan itself. Tychus’ military service further burnished his reputation, while his personal history and sob-story won him the sympathy vote. He ran on a platform addressing the Republic’s failure to utterly defeat the Empire. In particular, he lamented the loss of the Outer Rim reaches of the Perlemian Trade Route – what the Alsakans referred to as “the Axis”. To this he appended malcontent concerning the loss of the newly charted northern Hydian Way and patchy Republic presence in the Northern Dependencies. Tychus strongly advocates taking control over the non-aligned worlds, consolidating Republic sway over the region.

[Denied] Ga-Se-Gar Madog, the Tiss'Shar Mandalorian

@Ruby

I've been in talks with Ellri and got the concept of a Force Sensitive Mandalorian approved beforehand, if that helps!

@jeroukoo

An untrained force-sensitive who knows how to use his powers like this? Seems like a stretch.

Why did you include 'Sith' in the name?

This sheet is very problematic to me. We do not want a Force Using space lizard leading the Mandalorians by way of Battle Medition (a Force Technique which cannot be learned on one's own, by the way). Additionally, Ellri only tentatively agreed on the proviso that your character would cease being a Mandalorian upon joining the ranks of the Jedi or Sith. Mandalorian Force Users in itself are a no-no. If anything, the concept as you have it now is likely to be a target for both Jedi and Sith - it's an abomination to be cut from the Galaxy.