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Hell, I knew it wouldn't work out. What if I move him to Blüdhaven? That way I'd still get Thomas and Batman can have as little contact as possible, hell he can even act as if Thomas is dead or whatever else the situation dictates. I'd have a city to test the waters in, and Bruce stays in Gotham and should Batman wish to go to Blüdhaven, I can focus on the Thomas Wayne side of Owlman so as not to interfere.

You'll probably say no to this too, but I thought a compromise might help. If it doesn't, I have some more character searching to do. Though I hope the compromise works.
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Gowi said
Captain Marvel


Would you mind a Black Adam?
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Would you mind a Black Adam?


Still trying to figure out what to do with Carol's Marvel, all the information is there in her CS but I'd be like Henry worried about commitment.
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What if Adam stayed in Khandaq while you sort out Carol. That way I can flesh Adam out while you do your thing.
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Player Name: DeathstrokeSW

Character: Black Adam/Teth-Adam

Power and Abilities:

DIVINE EMPOWERMENT: Granted powers by the wizard Shazam, Black Adam is fueled by six Egyptian gods making up the letters of the word SHAZAM.

Shu: for the stamina of Shu, Using Shu's virtually unlimited stamina, Black Adam can withstand and survive most types of extreme physical assaults. Additionally, he does not need to eat, sleep, or breathe His godly metabolism provides him with far greater than human potency in all physical activities. Sustained by the magical energies coursing through his body, Adam is immortal in the sense of aging.

Heru: for the swiftness of Heru. By channeling Heru's supernatural speed, he can move at a maximum of Mach 50 or 38,060.3525 miles per hour

Amon: Strength of Amon. Black Adam has a phenomenal level of super strength, able to easily bend steel, punch through walls, produce powerful shockwaves by clapping his hands, and lift massive objects

Zehuti: Black Adam has instant access to a vast level of scholarly knowledge, which allows him to know multiple languages. The wisdom of Zehuti also provides him with counsel and advice in times of need

Aton: Aton's power allows Black Adam to fly, fuels the magic lightning bolt that transforms Adam, further enhances Adam's superhuman physical abilities, and provides magical resistance against a massive amount of magic spells and attacks. Adam can use the lightning bolt as a weapon by dodging it and allowing it to strike an opponent or target

Mehen: This aspect is primarily psychological, and gives Black Adam superhuman amounts of inner strength from which to draw upon in times of hopelessness, and possibly great fighting skills. His strength of mind renders him resistant to telepathy and mind control

Affiliation (Justice League, HAMMER, X-Men, etc): None.

Alignment (Good/Evil/Walking the Line): Neutral.

Character Notes (Anything you would like to expand on [Established Rogues, NPCs, etc]): The lightning bolt that powers him is referred to as the Dread Lightning.

Khandaqi Lore:
Khandaq is a middle-eastern country located on the continent of Africa between Egypt and Jordan, and culturally is similar to Egypt
Its capital is a city called Shiruta, after Black Adam's Sister in this continuity.
The city is ruled by a dictator who lives in wealth while the people suffer. His name is Asim Muhunnad, but he goes by the pseudonym Ibac after Khandaq's greatest oppressor in the days of ancient Egypt.
Dialogue wise, the speech is very formal, and tense. They tend to draw out their words to attain the same meaning.
Two gangs carve the city into their playground, bribing the already corrupt police to look the other way. Their names are:
Snake pits: the druggies of the lot, they make a compound out of Cobra venom. They are led by Azim Al-Owal.

A terrorist organization called the Ghosts of Khandaq attacks the capital and regularly murders civilians.

The Khandaqi Secret Police kidnaps, tortures, and murders anyone that speaks against Azul. They often operate in broad daylight.

ON BLACK ADAM: while my chosen roster pic shows his new 52 outfit, I do not like the belt, and prefer to use his pre-new 52 belt, as well as ditching the cape and hood. Basically it is this belt but with the new 52 suit and no cape/hood

Background and Story So Far:

Black Adam was born Teth-Adam in the height of Ancient Egypt. He was the son of a farmer, and worked the fields along with his nephew, a boy named Aman born not long after Adam himself.

Growing up, Adam was protective of Aman, and often got into fights defending Aman from bullies. Adam especially hated the wealthy kids, for when he beat them in fist fights, he was whipped, either publically by the soldiers or privately by his father. But nonetheless, he continued to defend his nephew, displaying intense courage and fierce loyalty. These traits were well known of Adam, and they attracted the attention of a wizard.

The wizard's name was Shazam.

Adam still remembers that day with acute clarity. It had began as usual. He, now a man of 30 years, woke Aman, who was 27, and the pair went to the market. By then Teth-Adam's sister, Aman's mother, had died and the boy's father was at war. So it was left to Adam to care for Aman, who at the time was recovering from a broken leg.

At the market, the usual shopping was done, buying only goods that would last them until the month's end. But then a day that had began so normally ended in tragedy. Aman witnessed a murder, and limped away while the murderer chased him, managing to stab him in the gut. Aman reached Teth-Adam's house, but lay dying in his arms while the murderer beat at the door, trying to break it in. A look from above revealed that the murderer was a city official, one high on the command structure. It was then that Adam turned to Aman, trying to do what he could to save him. It was useless; the boy died in his arms. It was then that Shazam came to him, telling Teth-Adam that he could right the wrongs of the city, avenge his poor nephew. He told Adam that he was chosen to become the next champion. Teth-Adam accepted. The lightning bolt which transforms him shot down from the sky as he spoke the wizard's name.

For five years he served everything the Wizard fought for: justice, peace, equality. But the rage within him would not quiet. As surely as power corrupts a king, so did the wizard's gift corrupt Adam. He began to carve Khandaq into his own personal nation. Shazam watched in horror from the Rock of Eternity as his former champion became a brutal warlord. Angry, the wizard tried to remove the gift of power from Teth-Adam, but in vain. Shazam learned that he could not rescind the gift of power once it has been given, a fact he would later take into consideration with Carol Danvers. Despaired as he was, the wizard tricked Adam, summoning him to the Rock of Eternity. Teth-Adam complied, but Shazam told him that his heart had grown black. Thus his name became Black Adam.

Shazam then confined him in his prison, where he remained in rage until he was freed by Doctor Sivana. Now a sworn enemy of the Wizard Shazam, Black Adam burst into a rage and nearly decimated the museum he now found himself in. Then he found that the wizard had chosen a new champion, and a woman. He had underestimated her at first, but later fled.

Then he made his way to Khandaq, where the corpse of his homeland lies. The sight of it crushed him into a depression. Since his arrival in Khandaq he has not summoned the Dread Lightning, wallowing in despair as Teth-Adam.

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Khandaq. Once a bright empire of ancient days, it now lies in ruins, save what little cities remain alive. At its capital is a barely thriving city, crushing under the yoke of its oppressive dictatorship, and barely living under a persistent crime rate. It is here that Teth-Adam walks, thinking, planning.

The world has changed much since the days of my rule. That which was once familiar is now a ruin, the people I once knew have turned to dust. Yet I have not aged one day, one minute, one second. I still look thirty years old, still feel my youth. Something must be done to restore my homeland, but what? It is not as if I could storm the residence of the dictator, and stage a coup d'état. It would merely replace one dictator for another and that cannot stand. If I have learned one thing in my imprisonment, it is that I had become what I hate most: a tyrant. My homeland calls to me, but I cannot let the Wizard's insult go unanswered. I shall have to deal with the new champion later. However, Khandaq is more important.

He walks, deep in thought, around a corner, bumping into a young man dressed rather garishly. He was a gangbanger, a member of one of one of several gangs plaguing the city. The young man turns, swearing loudly. He draws a gun, pointing it at Adam's face. When he speaks, it is with an exaggeration, playing at being a man.

"Do you wish an early death? I'm a dangerous man. I have rotted in prison with the Ghosts of Khandaq. Who are you?"

Adam breaks his inner thoughts and casts an eye at the hoodlum, unimpressed by the Kefiyyeh, the tattoos adorning his body. The comment on the terrorists attacking Khandaq intrigued him. An inkling of a plan formed in his head, and he spoke.

"Who am I? I am a man who has conquered Khandaq's enemies in centuries past. I have leveled battlefields. And you think you can scare me with a gun? I can summon lightning from the sky with a word." As he said this, the thug laughed.

"Fool. Only God may do so. Clearly you are not a god."

"Oh? Then let me demonstrate." Adam turned his eyes heavenward. "SHAZAM!"

The Dread Lightning filled the sky, arcing down to Teth-Adam. In his place stood Black Adam.

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My biggest criticism I could lend while I think on outlining my own post is the fact Khandaq is in the middle east, not Compton/Harlem; dialogue is different, culture is different-- lots of things to consider when crafting Khandaqi stories. Also what stories do you intend to tell with Black Adam solo?
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My biggest criticism I could lend while I think on outlining my own post is the fact Khandaq is in the middle east, not Compton/Harlem; dialogue is different, culture is different-- lots of things to consider when crafting Khandaqi stories. Also what stories do you intend to tell with Black Adam solo?


The dialogue needs work, yeah. I couldn't think of how to craft that clearly. And it's a focus on Black Adam retaking Khandaq. After that's done, if you're up for it, I'd like to do another Black Adam/Capt. Marvel story but more like a reluctant team up. Solo, I'd say it focuses on Felix Faust as an enemy, and meeting Isis for the first time.

Advice on Khandaqi dialogue?

EDIT: I REDID PARTS OF THE CS AND EXPANEDED ON KHANDAQI LORE. I ALSO REDID THE SAMPLE DIALOGUE. I EXPANDED ON BLACK ADAM'S ATTIRE. EDIT II: I'm focusing on Felix Faust, Khandaq And THE EGYPTIAN GODS AS SOLO BLACK ADAM STORIES.
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Fffffuck. Yeah. I hate to do this, but I'm dropping out.
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On the plus side, I can get posting with Batman...
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My apologies, but I fear I'm dropping out as well.

Not for lack of interest. Quite the opposite, just lack of time I'm afraid.
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So, I have no damn excuse to ignore this or any other Ultimate Comics game. I might have closed Ultimate DC for the moment due to all of the ‘dropping’ and other critical issues. (Don’t worry in some form it’ll be back, I assure you, I’m just re-evaluating it.) I signed up for characters and I will write them, I won’t quit on this. I love the Hyperverse games and I do NOT want to see them go away after they’ve given me so many conceptualized ideas and a lot of fun.

I will get a post with my characters done. In fact I’ll get to work on it right now.
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I may get back going with Spider-Man and Supes as well
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Would there be room here for a Nick Fury...I've got an itch to play him
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Uhh...

This dead?
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