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Maki Casanova said
Soooo I'm going to ask again, does anyone want/need some interaction with their PC? Kaiden is pretty free, and he needs to get out of flirting with ghosts.


Currently Roan's collapsed, bleeding out and unable to move so if I could, I would. Though likely there was a few people as well as a dog who ran out of the alley Roan ran down, so it's not unreasonable that could create a bit of a scene you can draw on?
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Currently Roan's collapsed, bleeding out and unable to move so if I could, I would. Though likely there was a few people as well as a dog who ran out of the alley Roan ran down, so it's not unreasonable that could create a bit of a scene you can draw on?


That would have to be a last resort for me, since I took a while to write up that post, and I don't have the energy to really write up another long wall of words. I'm going to wait a few more days, and then if no one decides to interact with him, I shall have Kaiden take notice and pursue of Roan.
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We're not expecting all that many posts from people during the hardest part of the christmas holidays. We'll only post ourselves in between our own RL stuff.
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Maki Casanova said
That would have to be a last resort for me, since I took a while to write up that post, and I don't have the energy to really write up another long wall of words. I'm going to wait a few more days, and then if no one decides to interact with him, I shall have Kaiden take notice and pursue of Roan.


Alright, and I think Ellri offered as well.
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Maki Casanova said
That would have to be a last resort for me, since I took a while to write up that post, and I don't have the energy to really write up another long wall of words. I'm going to wait a few more days, and then if no one decides to interact with him, I shall have Kaiden take notice and pursue of Roan.


Alright, and I think Ellri offered as well.
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Is this still open? The opening post says it is, but I wanted to check here first.
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It is. Feel free to write up a CS. If you have questions, ask them.

We'd really like someone to try playing with the Order of Idris around now, but don't take it as a demand. It isn't.
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If anyone's in doubt: The sheet Enalais posted up on last page has been approved.
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Why?
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Because we worked with him for a week in fixing it prior to his posting it up.
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Oh I read that as removed LOL sorry.
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heh. that explains your confusion.
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I see that you are still open to new applicants so I come to express my interest. I already have a character in mind though i have not read up on the Lore yet. I plan on the relic used having something to do with mutation and the character has been changed into a goblin-esque form since discovering the relic. Or maybe a ratman but I am making a CS like that for another RP so maybe so, maybe no. Still have yet to decide.

Also, hey Fallen. Long time no see.
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Hi, are you acsepting people?
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Closet Nerd said
I see that you are still open to new applicants so I come to express my interest. I already have a character in mind though i have not read up on the Lore yet. I plan on the relic used having something to do with mutation and the character has been changed into a goblin-esque form since discovering the relic. Or maybe a ratman but I am making a CS like that for another RP so maybe so, maybe no. Still have yet to decide.

Also, hey Fallen. Long time no see.


Hello, Nerd, how have you been? And yes, we're accepting CSes.

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Hi, are you acsepting people?


Yes, we are just create a CS and let Ellri or another GM look it over.
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Name: Alexander 'Ace' Helsing
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Faction/Allegiance: Ace is feircly loyal to the merc organisation that took him in, despite how ideological they are. He would be loyal to any faction that could make it past even his original apearance
Relic Description: Its a silver knife with a bone handle that is covered in intriquite runes and knotwork. The knife gives him the reflexes of a Fox, but in return it makes it so that he ha s the ears and tail of a fox which savearly in any normal socialness.
Appearance: Coal black hair, with white streaks. One blue and one brown eyes. Vary pale skin, and razor sharp teeth. He has the ears and tail of a fox, which constitute from his relic.
Flaws: Neurotic, Autistic, unsociable, feircly loyal, suspicious.
Skills: He has an encyclopedic knowledge of old-world lore and survival skills.
Biography: Ace was born with different colored eyes and he was throghn into a n orphanage. He had to leave when he was sick, where he ran into the wilderness. In the willderness he fell into a frozen lake, whick caused his hair to change color due to the trauma. He was saved by an old wild woman, who nurtured him back to life with the use of the red and white medicinal' mushrooms that grew nearby and the knife. The knife was in an ice cave, under the watter and when she found him he had it clentched in his grasp. After he woke up it bonded with him and the tail grew and his ears migrated to the top of his head.
The woman was nice, but she still had selfish intent at heart. Once he was health she sold him into slavery as a freak and a servant to an acsentric noble family. After long servace the last heir to the nobals died and Ace was realised, he was 13. Then a mercenary compony found him, wandering about, and apon finding out about his condition they took him in. They believed in legends aboth relics, simuler to what are piping up today, and knew he could be useful.
Personality/motivation: Ace is complacently neurotic, and he is so loyal to his company that he will kill for it. His social inabilitys dont alow him to do much in the way of social interactions, but he tries his best to help everyone.
Relations: He is equally distrustful of everyone, except those who he tries.
Final Point - Secrets: (this point can be PM’d to one or all of the GMs if you want. If you want it secret from someone, specify that, please.)
Theme Song: The animal I have become
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22xander said
Name: Alexander 'Ace' HelsingAge: 16Gender: MaleFaction/Allegiance: Ace is feircly loyal to the merc organisation that took him in, despite how ideological they are.Relic Description: Its a silver sword with a bone handle that is covered in intriquite runes and knotwork. The knife gives him the reflexes of an angel, as well as the ability of flight.Appearance: Coal black hair, with white streaks. One blue and one brown eyes. Vary pale skin, and razor sharp teeth. He has pure raven black wings, which sprout out of his back.Flaws: Neurotic, Autistic, unsociable, feircly loyal, suspicious.Skills: He has an encyclopedic knowledge of old-world lore and survival skills.Biography: Ace was born an orphan and he was taken in by a mercenary organisation. [will expand]Personality/motivation: Ace is complacently neurotic, and he is so loyal to his company that he will kill for it. His social inabilitys dont alow him to do much in the way of social interactions, but he tries his best to help everyone.Relations: He is equally distrustful of everyone, except those who he tries.Final Point - Secrets: (this point can be PM’d to one or all of the GMs if you want. If you want it secret from someone, specify that, please.)Theme Song: The animal I have become


Even I think you're going to need, well, a great deal more. Take a look at everyone else's apps, and the IC- even our small posts are larger than that what you might find in other roleplays. Even with your to-be-expanded biography, I think it's one of the ones that's been used too often, and is, even for the shortened version, far too short. Another thing is that a Relic is a single specific item- you mentioned a silver sword and some knife. A Relic is some kind of generic item, such as gloves, or a ring, or even maybe a belt. It'd be very unusual for it to be an actual weapon.

And your appearance needs expanding, as well as... well, most everything. The roleplay needs more interaction- being unsocialable isn't an option, according to Ellri [One of the GMs] some time before now, since we need more interaction.

In addition, well, your Relic doesn't seem to have very many negative affects. It gives him wings, the ability of flight, sharp teeth, and superfast reflexes... and... what's the minus? What balances it out? Why does he have wings? Make some more connections. Your skills will also need to coincide with your current setting- if you're working for a mercenary guild, then you will know how to fight and hunt, much less general education. And again, being antisocial isn't an option- we need the characters to mix. And most all of the characters in the roleplay are unknown to anyone- we're all ghosts, on the edge of society. The only important NPCs you could be trying to assassinate are the higher ones, such as the Prince-turned-King.

You may just want to start over, if at all. We have higher standards here- not to say you're not good, but if you're more the level from The Last of Us, then I suggest not roleplaying here. We're more wordy and picky.
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Wilson did put it fairly well. Compared to all the other sheets, your sheet is very short.

Also, we're very fond of flaws here. The relics not only grant advantages, but tend to balance out through unexpected or unforseen side effects.

Right now, you cannot have an allegiance that isn't shared by another character. It would be preferred if it is to either Othea, Kalesia or the Order of Idris.

Appearance: unless there's a logical reason in the relic or his history for his having black hair streaked with white (an example of the latter would be major head trauma in the past), it would not be acceptable with such hair. The rest of his appearance also indicates that he would not possibly function in society.
Heterochromia is an interesting trait, but can put him at a disadvantage in society. In many medieval cultures, people were critical in ways they aren't in today's world. Anyone born different would have risked being set out in the woods to die simply for being different. They were often superstitious, so religion would have helped them excuse it.

as for the relic... is it a sword or a knife? you describe it as both, yet it has to be one or the other.

so final point: the CS could become good, but it needs expanding.
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All right, I figure that the main flaw of the the thing is his appearance. That sort of problem with scocioty would be the reason he isn't connected with major organizations. as for the relic it was orgonaly a knife that granted fox powers but that isn't new for me, allthogh I may have to go back to it...
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Could that be better, it's not to much but.. I mean I could give you a more inn depth a count of his stay at the manor, and how he snuck in to the library to read. Or how he wears a leather and silver collar which he keeps as a reminder of the good and the bad in the servace of the last of that noble household.
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