Name: Marie Antoinette Vandersnappe
Age: 26
Gender: Female
Profession:Mechanical Engineer
Nationality & Affiliation: Scotish, European Union
Birth Planet: Saturn
Appearance: Marie has dusty brown doll-like eyes to go with her barely tan skin, with multiple tattoos on her arms of different symbols and one of a vine wrapping around both of her upper arms, she also as one on her back of a group of brightly coloured Lotus flowers, her natural hair colour is an oak brown but she dies it a rusty red, she is very small even though she is really strong compared to everyone. When she is on the way to the car repair shop which is where Marie works at or at work she is normally running around in a pair of dirty apron shorts and a black crop top, with a tool belt pair of black generic brand sneaker and an old faded gray tam o' Shatner hat, when she isn't on duty she is wearing a white t-shirt with the words "I <3 Scottland" on it and a pair of bell bottom jeans with a pair of white converses that she drawn all over.
Strengths: She is physically strong and really smart, there is nothing that can't do, or use her brute strength and fix
Weaknesses: She is emotionally weak, so she is very emotional and haves a hard time controlling them so she will say things she doesn't mean to say, plus she has a soft spot for stuff animals, she collects them cares for them and sometimes she would talk to them
Personality: Marie is like a little kid in a nut shell but she gets her work done and is more than happy to help someone out if it's needed and if she is either really bored or she has to because someone told her too
History: She has never really talked much to other girls, except her brother. For as long she could remember ever since their parents died in a house fire that Marie started on accident, her older brother was always there for her no matter what.
Family: Her older brother William, and that's about it. The rest of her family she either doesn't know about or is dead because of either suicide or accidents.

I think I have fixed some of the problems but I'm not sure exactly what they are, I'm sorry for not doing this sooner I have just been really occupied with other things. @BurningCold @FortunesFaded

@The1Rolling1Boy Thanks, you fixed most of the things I was concerned with. You're accepted -- feel free to add Marie to the Characters section.

@BurningCold You do come across as a massive arsehole. Like, unbelievably so. Do you ever stop to take your head out from your arse?

@BurningColdI edited it oh mighty BurningCold. I hope for it to appease you my lord

@User @BurningCold Everyone chill. User, all of BurningCold's complaints were 100% valid. They are the same ones I had with the CS when I read it. BurningCold, like I said earlier, tone is very important -- even though you were right, there were probably better ways to get the message across.

User, since you fixed most of the issues I'm just going to go ahead and accept Skully. Is he going to be your primary, or was Charles going to be?

Also, to all: The only reason I haven't put the IC up yet is because I'm still writing up the Dossiers and sending them to folks. Some of you have already got them, others are still waiting. I'll try to finish that by tonight. As for the weapons section of the Technology area, I'm still a bit out of ideas and could use suggestions.

@FortunesFadedHe just seems to lord it around. Acting like billy big shit. At least you phrase your complaints in a way that is more helpful than cruel but he just seems to think he is the GM. If he can rein in his condescending attitude ill drop it. And yes, skully is my main

As for the weapons section of the Technology area, I'm still a bit out of ideas and could use suggestions.

I don't see a reason to get too creative, as firearms as we know them toady are "good enough" It's a simple tool that fires a cheap projectile that tears flesh, snaps bones and could even poison you if it stays in for too long. Only way to improve I can think of would be a small caliber, somewhere around 5.56mm (cheaper, lighter) and increasing velocity (better accuracy, shorter travel time, more severe tissue damage).

Name: Jethart Igneal
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Profession: Rifleman
Nationality: German, European Union
Birth Planet: Mars
Appearance: Jethart stands at 6'2" usually wearing his hair in a pullback style, he has silver eyes and a goatee. His hair is a blackish grey color, it goes down to his shoulders hence tying it up. He weights about 205 lbs, not to muscular but enough that it shows. He has a double mask tattoo on his right arm, he had it to remember beating his depression. He has the word Strength on his right wrist. His build isnt to bulky or skinny, kinda inbetween the two. He ususally wears old Air Force pants and jacket (Picture for reference). Under the jacket he wears a black tee shirt, black socks and combat boots.

Strengths: Follows orders extremely well. Tough exterior.
Weaknesses: Has mental problems. Isn't exactly "emotionally stable".

Personality: He is a very caring person and will do anything to help anyone, even if it is to his detriment. He doesn't like to give up and hates to be doubted or have people make assumptions about him. When doubted he will try to prove the person wrong, and usually does so. When assumptions are made he will try to clear it up and correct the assumption. He doesn't care about what others care about him, anything they say wont affect him as he doesn't care. His tough exterior is a smidge of an act. He isn't that tough but uses that as it shows how tough he can be, and wants to be. He is actually a softie and really likes to tell and show those he loves and cares about that he does. He will put others before himself to make sure they are alright and taken care of. He will do anything to protect those he cares about, even if it means taking one's life or losing his own.

History: He was verbally abused as a child, was raised in a not so good home. Parents were hardly home, and when they were it was like they weren't actually there. He grew up rather quickly due to that fact, and tried to care for his siblings. He tried to become as indepentent as he could but would still tend to everyone. He has a hard time with people doing things for him, or getting him things. He had 3 siblinds, 2 sisters and a brother. They died in a freak accident when he was 9 years old. Their family was leaving to go onto vacation in France, half way there some freak going 180 kph in a big ole' truck T-boned them. His siblings had died on impact. Him and his parents barely survived and had serious imjurys from the accident. He underwent a numerous amount of surgeries to get to how he is now. He has a slight limp from it, he tries to hide it but isn't entirely successful at it. His left side is scarred up from the accident and that plays into a factor of what he wears. He doesn't talk his past much as it causes him pain to remember his past.

His parents would get drunk fight a lot and yell every chance they got at the house, they'd physically hurt each other and at times Jethart. There were days one of them would get home and would take their anger out on Jethart, rarely was he beaten but he was at times. He started to kill off his emotions because he didn't like feeling the way he did, it came back to bite him in the ass when he was 17, people would insult him on it and tease him over being a robot. He does feel and have emotions, but most of them are damaged in the part of showing them. He has slowly worked to undo the damages he and his parents caused but it isn't easy. Emotional trouble is never easy to patch up. He makes due where he can and works on himself, he usually forgets to do so when it comes to helping others though.

Family: No, he doesn't have a spouse or children. His parents died when he was 17 due to work related accidents. His remaining family is his cousin Ignace, she is 17 years old and is very close to Jethart. They grew up together and would spend as much time together as they could.

@User@FortunesFaded The "I don't mean to be a jerk" comment was serious. I didn't insult User, and after reading over my post a few times, I can say with certainty that my tone was in no way condescending. The complaints were legitimate. Just because I don't hand my criticism out on a silver platter doesn't mean there's anything wrong with it. My tone was frank. Frank. I saw something wrong and I pointed it out.

And User, please don't complain about my apparant behavior towards you and then proceed to bad mouth me like I can't see it in a public place.

I had to say my piece here, as everyone else had. We can take it to PMs now or just end it here.

If he can rein in his condescending attitude ill drop it.

No, that's not how it works. You can either drop it or leave.

@BurningCold I know you didn't mean to come off that way, but if someone's telling you they felt you came off that way, then you most likely did. That's just something to consider and work on.

@Lucidnonsense Nope! I meant galaxy. The solar system is inside of the Milky Way galaxy, so when I'm comparing one galaxy to another, it would be pointless to compare two different, unmeasurable areas. (I just saw your post now even though it was a while ago)

@CrazyShadowy Everything looks good, I just have one small nit-pick. There isn't such a thing as the Martian Alliance -- none of the planets have declared independence, and are still segregated along the political lines of Earth (Except for the Bessel Station, which is primarily translational). So your character would be a part of the EU instead. Otherwise, you're accepted!

I just realized to have somehow missed the personality section in the character application. Give me until tomorrow and I'll have it ready for approval Cx

@FortunesFaded

@FortunesFaded I've been Co-GM on multiple RPs on another site (plus a few here), and managing the OOC/reviewing apps essentially became by primary role. On that site, people loved the way I picked through their apps, so I guess I didn't see the need to change my behavior from site to site if I was praised for it from where I came. However, picking through their apps entailed a full review, including pros, cons, sometimes neutral points, and then an overall summary of the app + what they could have done to improve. So I guess it would be harder to feel offended in the way I did reviews.

I understand that how people take criticism varies wildly from individual to individual, a fact I wasn't considering due to the above reasons. I've taken great strides towards becoming an entirely neutral and unbiased critic from where I started, but maybe I'm not there yet. I don't know. If I ever feel the need to speak up again, I'll use a lighter hand. It's something I can do, but never really felt the need for.

TL;DR I understand where my fault lies, and will work even harder to improve. A great reviewer shouldn't be able to offend even the touchiest of individuals. That's what I'm going to achieve.

@CrazyShadowy Everything looks good, I just have one small nit-pick. There isn't such a thing as the Martian Alliance -- none of the planets have declared independence, and are still segregated along the political lines of Earth (Except for the Bessel Station, which is primarily translational). So your character would be a part of the EU instead. Otherwise, you're accepted!
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Thanks! I'll fix it to say EU Alliance then. Should I post in the character section?

@Lucidnonsense Nope! I meant galaxy. The solar system is inside of the Milky Way galaxy, so when I'm comparing one galaxy to another, it would be pointless to compare two different, unmeasurable areas. (I just saw your post now even though it was a while ago)

@CrazyShadowy Everything looks good, I just have one small nit-pick. There isn't such a thing as the Martian Alliance -- none of the planets have declared independence, and are still segregated along the political lines of Earth (Except for the Bessel Station, which is primarily translational). So your character would be a part of the EU instead. Otherwise, you're accepted!

Thats like......billions of star systems though, but you only listed the planets in our solar system, how diverse is culture across the milky way? how would a government control that many planets?

If I am willing to use this character in tandem with Gera, may I?

@CrazyShadowy Yep, thanks!

@Lucidnonsense Valid point, that doesn't make any sense! I'll edit it. Thanks for calling me out on that.

@BurningCold Yes, if you feel like you can handle the stress of having two characters at once! As a Doctor, Anton will be kinda central to the plot here. Anyway, he's accepted!

@FortunesFaded I've been Co-GM on multiple RPs on another site (plus a few here), and managing the OOC/reviewing apps essentially became by primary role. On that site, people loved the way I picked through their apps, so I guess I didn't see the need to change my behavior from site to site if I was praised for it from where I came. However, picking through their apps entailed a full review, including pros, cons, sometimes neutral points, and then an overall summary of the app + what they could have done to improve. So I guess it would be harder to feel offended in the way I did reviews.

I understand that how people take criticism varies wildly from individual to individual, a fact I wasn't considering due to the above reasons. I've taken great strides towards becoming an entirely neutral and unbiased critic from where I started, but maybe I'm not there yet. I don't know. If I ever feel the need to speak up again, I'll use a lighter hand. It's something I can do, but never really felt the need for.

TL;DR I understand where my fault lies, and will work even harder to improve. A great reviewer shouldn't be able to offend even the touchiest of individuals. That's what I'm going to achieve.

Well, I've been on many different sites. And people have told me that they quite like how open I am about how I feel with people. So I never really thought I should change that, after all people like that. I've been in many a roleplay and I've found that rarely do they ever have a problem with how I act. They just seem to get on with it. I will TRY to change and be less honest next time.

@User Remember that time I said

No, that's not how it works. You can either drop it or leave.

and you didn't drop it?

Whereas you both were being pretty unreasonable at the beginning, @BurningCold has long since tried to make peace and move on. I asked you to move this shit out of the OOC, you chose to ignore me, now you can leave.

This RP looks good. But do you have any premade charecters?