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Added a part where I describe his normal clothing, since I noticed that his picture only shows his face. Basically being a muscular man in an old but formal suit. Built it around his characteristic himself. Also, added fire magic to his class, since he is now using it.
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Just to be straight, the Achlys is not unique to Alexander. In principle, everyone could corrupt mana and turn it into Achlys. However, Alexander does it by instinct. Meaning he constantly does it subconsciously. Its kind of the opposite of Aether.
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Can you look at mine to see if there are anything needed to be changed? Thanks.
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So...three evil CSes to two good CSes?
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Shit I double posted when I meant to edit...

I wish there was a delete post button now I have to make a random comment here..

Uh...

I enjoy animus.

Nothing to see here. Move along. Mover along.
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Just to be straight, the Achlys is not unique to Alexander. In principle, everyone could corrupt mana and turn it into Achlys. However, Alexander does it by instinct. Meaning he constantly does it subconsciously. Its kind of the opposite of Aether.


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So I hate to say but I do want to talk a few things over with you before I approve it, first just to get out of the way: No Death Magic. Just any magic that says "And it dies" is just too overpowered for any kind of arena combat. Second, he doesn't really strike me as all that evil. He sounds like his family is evil, but he sounds kind and gentle. So even if he were to be helping his father that would still make him good with just a lawful patriotic duty to his family, I had my concerns when you said he was abhorrent of racism as a human especially. Don't get me wrong, racism is very very bad, but the fact of the matter is it's going to be there in a fantasy setting with so many different races to pick from, and while it may not take the form of humans hating other humans over skin tone, it will take the form over hating dwarves because they have a history of conflicting interests. The reason I go into this, it's a generically good trait to be an accepting person. So if you want him to be evil, I recommend giving him a more cynical and selfish attitude. Think "I'll help them later because they can be of use to me" or "My assistance comes at a cost." Alignment is a general blanket term, but if you call him truely lawful evil then a lot of people are going to be confused when you start going into the rp.

On the other hand, you using a corrupted form of Aether is entirely fine, it goes into some secret lore im sure you will like as someone playing a necromancer. You actually hit a bit of a hidden thing that I was dancing around when describing the dark elves, a source of magic that can corrupt it's user. That being said I'm going to make you a very vague offer that I promise is much more interesting than it sounds, would you like your character to have some cryptic voices in his head?

OH I ALMOST FORGOT. Necromancy is considered an affront to nature and is evil because of it, if you manage to find a dead body and resurrect it at the school, you will get yelled at by a teacher and potentially get detention. So. Actions and Consequences.

Can you look at mine to see if there are anything needed to be changed? Thanks.
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Ok so here everything works, you're neutral evil was the correct call as it means she is very cynical just by nature and lines up with her history. The only thing I dare to tell you to change is that you should probably just use the term Biomancy which is the magic to slowly or abruptly change living tissue and influence evolutionary changes. It would just be easier than having to explain it all the time y'know?

With that said, it checks out. Approved.

So...three evil CSes to two good CSes?


We're sure to get more coming in eventually, but if it makes you feel any better when you use the term evil in DnD it's not necessarily like they're all going to screw you over, like I said in Scarecrow's case, their character is more cynical this does mean that overall they will be prone to evil tendencies like a disregard to what the general populace considers to be decency and doing things like digging up corpses in an attempt to bring them back to life Frankenstein style. In
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@Spirit Already fixed, thanks for your effort
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Np Scary =b
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@Spirit, Oh, and thanks.
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@Spirit
In Isil's case, she'll be pretty friendly to start with.

Ah, and permission to move the CS to the Character tab now, Spirit?
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Yeah you can move her over. I know she's gonna be friendly on the outside I was just using her as an example for how to maintain an evil alignment without necessarily acting evil directly all the time lol
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Sorry man, I got sloppy. About half-way into the creation I remembered an awesome DnD story about a good necromancer. I liked that a lot more so I changed the History and Personality accordingly. Forgot to change his allignement though. Also, with Death Magic I was inching towards the Shyish magic from Warhammer. Though I understand that the name is a rather big, red flag. Changed it to Dark Magic (or Arts, hoping that is allowed). Also I took away Necromancy as a Chosen School as I'd imagine no teacher would actually give it. Still, he'd be willing to learn about these forbidden arts from books and he'll still experiment with it. I did change it to Summoning Magic (or Conjuration).

And I will take those cryptic voices! Sounds like great fun. Though I'll describe it as whispers in the bio. So they can become voices when the RP start.

EDIT: Also I took Chaotic good because I feel that he's obviously good but he doesn't adhere to the rules. He thinks it limits thinking and creativity to solve problems. In other words, he'll often skirt with the rules when he thinks its for the better.
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@Legion02, your CS is awesome. Want Shamir and Alex to be friends?
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Nicely edited, this fits much better and don't worry, just because it's a forbidden art doesn't mean necromancy isn't something that can be learned through applications of other magics. Or some forbidden tomes... As for the voices, I'll control those, and maybe describe some nightmares for him too. Trust me, if the rp gets long enough it may even turn into a full blown plot thread that would break the whole "isolated" part of the rp lol I don't want to explain it since I want to keep it cryptic, but we'll just leave it at it'll get pretty dark where those come from.

Dark arts are by all means allowed though since dark arts are a blanket term, destruction magic is considered a dark art even. It's typically magic that's unnatural such as bending the elements to your whim all the way to the extremes of turning people inside out. Naturally nobody has the authority to flat out kill anyone in this rp without prior permission.

Anyway, yeah well fixed, it's approved. Go ahead and move it to the characters section like it is now.

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First post is up! Thanks for joining me today everyone! @Letter Bee@Legion02@Rune_Alchemist@Scarescrow@Conscripts@Illusion

Remember anyone that wants to join, we're always accepting! Don't feel intimidated to ask to join us here in this rp! I'd love to have you with us.

Until Next time, Mages!
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Cool, cool.

I'll see about getting a post up later this evening~
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Great! Hopefully I can get my first post up soon. Currently, I'm busy with real life stuff, so if anyone wants to interact with my character before my first post, you can. Probably I'll compose one tonight or tomorrow afternoon
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@hagroden@Rune_Alchemist

Ok so this generally looks pretty alright, but I have to ask before I approve it since you claimed a direct connection to her character. You know of this character Rune? Like a friend? Or is it just a tie in to give you someone to call master? If she's consenting to having this connection in your character's history I'm fine with it I just want to know before I go approving anything.
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@hagroden@Rune_Alchemist

Ok so this generally looks pretty alright, but I have to ask before I approve it since you claimed a direct connection to her character. You know of this character Rune? Like a friend? Or is it just a tie in to give you someone to call master? If she's consenting to having this connection in your character's history I'm fine with it I just want to know before I go approving anything.


We actually went over all this stuff in the PMs, I made sure to get permission for everything etc.
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