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@Ebil Bunny Looks great! I'll start up the rp sometime today.
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Not really sure how to feel about that first post, seeing as it seems like you're controlling all our characters and telling us we're all doing the exact same thing, and thinking the exact same thing. If that's the case, I don't really like that, since we're all really different people, we would think different things, do different things, and arrive at different times. Personally, I feel it would be better if you made your own character and set it up with what your character is doing, then narrating what we are doing, especially since it breaks one of the basic RP rules.
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I kind of agree with Azure on this. See it this way, if you control what our characters are thinking or doing like the fact that they're arriving all at the same time at the school and how they feel while walking down the hallway, there's nothing left for us to do, you know ^^? That's our part of the game, to play our characters and write about how they're feeling or what they're thinking. Just a suggestion, but I do agree with Azure that maybe you should make your own character, especially if you felt like playing the RP with us on top of being the GM.
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Well feel free to give me ideas on how to change it
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Alright, we can definitely do that :). Here's some of my ideas, but Azure might have others or better ideas:

1- Like we mentioned before, maybe try to make a character? You don't have to write a long back story for it or whatever, just a basic character that can interact with us. If you do that, then all the part below can be told in the first person or third person about your own character! Like that, you don't write in a way that makes us feel like you're controlling our characters. So you end your RP post like this, with your own character arriving to the school and blabla, and the next post will be one of us, doing the same thing and writing our own arrival to school and how we're feeling about it. Below, I quoted the part where you really write like you're controlling our characters, maybe it will help you see what we're seeing.

The next morning you made your way to school. The mildew was still fresh on the ground, nothing had awoken yet to disturb it. It was school hours, you'd gotten here on time, even if it was only this once. Better to make a good first impression and make your teacher believe you'd actually try. Maybe she'd boost your grade just for coming here. As you made your way to the second floor, you felt odd. The halls were eerily quiet. No chatter, no drama, not even the sound of a man cleaning the halls. It really was early. Occasionally you'd hear the flip of a paper or the sip of coffee. The thought of caffeine was enticing.


2- The other idea is more drastic, but it is to erase everything and start anew. If you don't want to make a character, then you have to change at least the end of your post. If you like the idea of how you described 'our arrival' to school, then keep it, but change the pronouns. For example, talk about how the school has an eerie atmosphere. But write it in a neutral tone, and as a description of the school in general, not as a description of how our characters are thinking.

I don't know if I'm being really clear, maybe I'm rambling too much. Long story short, any part of your post that uses the pronoun 'you' as if you were talking about our characters, erase it or change it. Does that make sense?
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Agreed with what was said above, our only issue is that you posed the post to us as a "this is what your character did, and this is what they felt doing it" which could be different from everyone. Some of us might find the project a good thing, others a bad thing, some of us woke up in a good mood, some in a bad. Some people might want to be slightly late or slightly early- things happen. ^^
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Hows this
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Much better, in my opinion :)! I feel like I'm totally free to write how my character will be arriving at school, when and how he'll feel about it.

Thank you for changing it and being open to suggestions/help, I think it will help make this RP this much more enjoyable!
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Yes! @manapool1 Much better, thank you for that- it was a great intro, just needed a little adjustment for us players. I know you did that so we all could get to the right place and not end up in total different areas right the get go- but this way lets us be a little more creative. I was able to get my post up now ^^
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It's all good, looking at it again, I did realize I was a bit rigid with what I was letting you guys characterize your entrances.
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Rip
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Sorry for late reply, been busy with the holidays.
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Oh I understand. Just usually after 5 days I consider something dead
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Well you also have to think about the timing too. Most people are visiting family right now, so they won't be able to post. Just give it some time.
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Yeah, didn't occur to me until after I wrote it.
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Ok. I should fill out a character sheet. I'll do it tomorrow and get a post out.
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Is this done for? I know the holidays were busy but no activity what so ever.
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I am justing hitting a real brainfart, can't think of anything. I don't know about the others.
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You could probably play the part of the teacher and have him/her come in, maybe introduce themselves, and have everyone else go around and introduce themselves. Otherwise, Kyle would probably stay silent, due to him being shy, and a little nervous, being the only guy atm.
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Is @Elkhar still in this? We need one post from them for everyone to have posted at least once. Either way, perhaps you could do as Azure suggested and have the teacher speak more about the project, general rules, etc. And have them do some sort of "get to know you" exercise like a lot of teachers do on the first day of class.
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