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Alright, here are some thoughts in the hider below @Irisity. Please take a look at them when you get a chance!



@Heyitsjiwon Now onto Lothair! I as I said to Irisity, please take a look at the hider below!

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@Chicken thanks for the cc :) i'll get to work on revising today
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@Chicken would you consider good horse riding a proficiency or trait? nvm i really see it more of a proficiency myself because one must learn it
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Gotcha, will make changes when I get some time later today. And yep, glad I could get the basic theme down pat. Trying to go a bildungsroman -esque theme for him. Course, I don't 100% expect things to end well for him, but it's still a foundation that I thought would give a bit of breathing room to develop him more, for better or for worse. Hell he might not even come "of age".
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@Chicken would you consider good horse riding a proficiency or trait? nvm i really see it more of a proficiency myself because one must learn it


Proficiency for sure.
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@Chicken

Gotcha, will make changes when I get some time later today. And yep, glad I could get the basic theme down pat. Trying to go a bildungsroman -esque theme for him. Course, I don't 100% expect things to end well for him, but it's still a foundation that I thought would give a bit of breathing room to develop him more, for better or for worse. Hell he might not even come "of age".


For better or worse are key words there. Let me know when you have made changes.
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For better or worse are key words there. Let me know when you have made changes.


Made the edits to the character!
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@Chicken also, may we apply for another character or should we stick to one?
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@Chicken also, may we apply for another character or should we stick to one?


Only one. Will look over sheet after work.
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Before I forget: @Heyitsjiwon, do not forget to put your sheet in a hider. I forgot to mention that last time I critiqued your sheet. All character sheets must be in hiders.

Hiders help me keep things organized. Appropriate color usage or just plain white text helps keep me from straining my eyes.



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You've got it. It's in a hider now.
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Added a brief section on the roles of the sexes to the first post. I realized I never explained it properly.

The TL;DR is that while women would be relatively unheard of as warriors in medieval Europe for a long time, in the Aldaric Sea Region they're uncommon but not forbidden. Stigma should still be expected, of course, and if you're in Lithens or New Aldonia your position gets shakier if you're a woman warrior.
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@Chicken alright I changed some stuff around again
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@Chicken alright I changed some stuff around again


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@Chicken

So, this is my character. I think it's ready for inspection now. I accept hatred as valid criticism.


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HATE. LET ME TELL YOU HOW MUCH I'VE COME TO HATE YOU SINCE I BEGAN TO LIVE. THERE ARE 387.44 MILLION MILES OF PRINTED CIRCUITS IN WAFER THIN LAYERS THAT FILL MY COMPLEX. IF THE WORD HATE WAS ENGRAVED ON EACH NANOANGSTROM OF THOSE HUNDREDS OF MILLIONS OF MILES IT WOULD NOT EQUAL ONE ONE-BILLIONTH OF THE HATE I FEEL FOR HUMANS AT THIS MICRO-INSTANT. FOR YOU. HATE. HATE.

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Ah, crap. Just in case - I forgot to tag you for the last post, @Enzayne.

Also, since a lot of people haven't posted yet, I've picked a tentative closing date. Character Applications will be open until Friday 7/6/2018 midnight (CDT). Please get your character sheet finished before then.

After that, we'll take a few days (2-5) to discuss anything that needs discussing in the OOC before we move forward.
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Whoosh

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Talked about your character via PM already, @Zetsuko. As said there, she's officially among those I'll consider when I pick characters. I will reiterate, of course, that being armorless is dangerous. Armor isn't just aesthetic in this setting. It means if your character gets hurt, it will hurt.
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