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@Rezod92: 1. You can play as all of them

2. Due to plot elements, Kingprotea is in a bit of a weird area right now.
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@1Charak2: Twins okay, and as we've discussed elsewhere, you'll be siding in for the Momotaro that's been missing for three weeks. We'll start getting retcons in order soon enough.
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Okay, I've been meaning to do this a LONG while ago, but my laptop "ran into a problem" and restarted itself and I've just been putting this off for too long. So, (hopefully) WITHOUT ADO:



I'm gonna wait for this one to get approval before moving on to my Servants.
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@Rezod92: Okay, time to dissect the form.

The primary problems stem from the abilities and history, and if I'm going to be honest, they just don't add up to me.

See, the Mystic Codes that your proposed Master has don't actually seem all that out-of-place compared to a lot of the Mystic Codes that already exist (see: Fiore's wheelchair/Doctor Octopus gear, literally anything made by Atlas, etc.;), and even then that isn't actually 'magitechy' in any way. Even then, the stuff that'd qualify under a contemporary definition of 'magitech' is, again, Atlas... And Atlas isn't exactly known for letting their tech out. I don't see the 'tech' part.

That actually leads to my next point, though: due to the nature of the world that the RP takes place in, this entire backstory cannot function as it stands. The city is a multinational coalition and involves the Mage's Association, and there's a non-insignificant amount of overlap between magecraft and technology ALREADY present in the city.

Also, the MA isn't actually that neurotic about science and technology crossing; once again I will point to Atlas, but even Chaldea in /GO makes liberal use of magecraft combined with the knowledge and specialization of modern physicists and engineers. Aside from that, the utilization of technology and magecraft can also be seen in /Extra (though Spiritron hacking is WEIRD and, again, Atlas-related) but it's not like Enforcers were sent out to deal with the ones responsible. The MA is stuck-up and haughty, not fundamentalist.

In short: rejected; I'm happy to help refine the idea, but as it stands, it's a no-go.
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Hmmmm....Okay. I understand. I can edit this out, and I would love to have some of your input to help in ironing this out. What do you propose?
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Sure, all right. Where to start...

For starters, cut out all that stuff about 'heresy' and 'taboo'. Again, if you were doing something the MA didn't approve of, you'd have Enforcers at your neck, and Enforcers do not fuck around.

As for more usable advice... The integration of magecraft and technology is itself not unusable, just that creating something that we could outright call 'magitech' is not something that should be possible. To that end, I'd recommend re-examining the ways in which the two could be used together and concepts from magecraft integrated into technology (or vice versa). The MA can (and probably still will be) stuck-up and elitist about it, which sorta stays in line with the original concept, but that stuff was going to have to be reworked anyways.
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So, in other words, you want me to:

A. Revise the history; Cut out the 'heresy' and 'taboo'.

B. Revise the abilities; Either keep it simple, come up with something entirely different or change it to something more tangible and would make sense in the setting.
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Well, yeah, that's essentially what my statements are boiling down to. Logically, if the abilities change, then the backstory as it is now would have have to follow suit, after all.

You're free to pitch any new ideas you have, too.
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The history part? That's an easy fix.

The abilities? ...I could just scrub the 'magitech' idea all together and just have the bracelets/gauntlets and anklets/shin-guards be magical family artifacts passed down from generation to generation. Would that work?
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Yeah, that works, though having it only have been a single generation makes that a bit odd. Could always take the 'reverse-engineering' angle if you want, but that works, too.
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Hmmm....

Alright, I think I got this. Give me a sec...
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Okay, the master sheet has edited a fair bit. Is this good?
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@Rezod92: Hmm...

'Soul' is a bit of an odd thing to place here; I think if you side that out for something else (maybe relate it to their bloodline's Magic Crest or something?) it should be fine.
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Edited again. How about now?
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@Rezod92: Fine now. Accepted.
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Awesome! Now, I can move on to the Servant. I'm gonna do one, cause I feel like I won't be able to maintain two very well.



Aaaaaand done. Waiting for approval.
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@Rezod92: Ah...

Hm. I suppose I forgot pseudo-Servants on the list of ones that are NG. That's a my bad on my part, but I didn't think anyone would try to sign up with one.

I'll go edit that bit in later, but uh... Yeah, sorry, Taiga is a no. They're just too weird given that the actual cast of SN is alive and well during the era this RP takes place during, so yeah.
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IS EVERY POST I MAKE CONSIDERED TOO WIERD HERE!?

For real though, that's a bummer. Alright, I'll come up with someone else.
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Servant sheet changed entirely. Will this one do?
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