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@TokyoPewPewMaybe it's a bit redundant, but what about a Family Man ilk? Someone with kids, maybe a wife, maybe more family, that they both have to keep safe, and hide their dealings from.

Would you like us to apply here or PM you? Or something else?
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@JFK Great idea.

PM and public are both fine.
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If more people want their characters to be drug addicts, I can remove his vice. It's not necessary to his character but it might add some flavour if we don't have a bunch of submissions with chemical vices.
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@JFK The things I need to see before I can approve:

1. A title which meets the criteria outlined on the previous page. If "old man in a young man's game" is supposed to be it, it's missing anything resembling an inciting incident.
2. Two of your Ilks are basically epistemologically identical. Completely redundant. (Granted it's a good one, so just condense them and that's one thing done.)
3. I asked for justification re: unusual skillsets. Nothing wrong with the character being a handgun "enthusiast" but I need to know whether that means he's just an antiques collector, an avid shooter, or what. And if he's some kind of crack marksman then i need a convincing rundown on how he became one of those.

What you do provide i enjoyed. Sensible backstory, plausible niche within the criminal ecosystem, compelling motivations and dilemma at the heart of him. Just take another pass and this time give the app criteria a bit more scrutiny.
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@TokyoPewPewThanks for the feedback. I've revised it.

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@JFK Much better. A proofread, some formatting for readability, and you're ready to post once the thread goes live. Thanks! (Looking forward to his story—juicy!)
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This still have a space available? I've got an idea in mind already
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@themaybreeze Oh my god, Hi! :D
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Throwing my hat in the ring with my sheet now. Hope this is still open :D let me know what you think @TokyoPewPew



Good evening, Duck.

1. AI "assistance" is absolutely, 100% forbidden in my RPs.
2. You're a serial ghoster, having played an instrumental role in the deaths of both The Cursèd West and Redshift Blues.
3. A character who takes unnecessary risks, provokes the mob, and forgives the mistakes of his fellow criminals, all for the excitement and "chaos" of it all, is tonally a bad fit which will screw with this setting's plausibility and tone.

For these reasons I will not be accepting this application.

Best of luck finding your fit elsewhere.
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There's room for one (1) more.
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