@Birdboy I think it's good so far. You're doing a good job at describing situations and progressing the story along. No true suggestions to be honest... I think the atmosphere and pacing are exactly what you want them to be for the type of story.
Edit: I guess at this point it'd be a good idea to see if some of the people who haven't posted in awhile are still interested and, if they aren't, get more people to replace them to keep the story moving along?
@Raptra I would like to reveal that when someone writes a post involving getting up there. I also don't want you all to feel like I've got you on a specific path, though. Feel free to wander about and do things.