[OOC] Fire Emblem - The Reclaimers of Peace

[Experiment 249]

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Since when is it illegal to fly around on a Wyvern?

@Prince of Seraphs

I guess when it's government owned property? I kinda just threw that in for flavor since his sister kinda stole a flying creature before, they don't trust him to not do the same... Totally removeable

[Lugubrious]

Kel is accepted. Feel free to begin.

[Experiment 249]

I don't mean to be needy and all, but am I going to get added to that big first post in the character's tab? I want to know my "Most likely to..." thing so bad hahaha

[Lugubrious]

I don't mean to be needy and all, but am I going to get added to that big first post in the character's tab? I want to know my "Most likely to..." thing so bad hahaha

@Experiment 249

Whoops, sorry. I'll add you immediately.

[Crimson Raven]

@Experiment 249 Hey Experiment, can I call you Sproing? =}

[Experiment 249]

Uh, why? If the reason is good enough I have nothing against it.

[Crimson Raven]

*jaw drops* you have never seen Lilo and Stitch?! *sigh* Oh well nevermind then...

Edit: Google your name.

[Experiment 249]

*jaw drops* you have never seen Lilo and Stitch?! *sigh* Oh well nevermind then...

Edit: Google your name.

@Crimson Raven

Somehow, I totally forgot about this. The only reason I know about it is because you're not the first person to mention that to me haha, I made the name because it was just my 3 favorite numbers and I needed it for an RP on a different site years ago. But yeah, go ahead man haha. That's basically a perfect reason to call me that!

EDIT: Finished second character, should definitely be one of those characters you meet in the enemy army if she's accepted

[Lady Seraphina]

History: A good chunk of Taene's life is faded out of his memory due to an ambush that was brought down on him in some forest while he was taking a break. He can only recall certain parts of his non-recent past such as being raised by his mother solely, some kind of death that really broke him apart that he doesn't know the details of, and being trained how to use his weapon properly which was one of the few basic skills he retained. As for the more recent years of his life, Taene got bundled into a small group of mercenaries as a "secret weapon" of sorts. He was put under the command of a girl far younger than him without his knowledge, who acts to motivate Taene to battle in specific ways while not letting him find out that it was a "chore" for her.

@Cinderella Man

I don't mean to be insulting or anything really I don't but it seems to me that Taene is sort of 2 dimensional. He doesn't remember his history because of some sort of unexplored attack. This seems more like an excuse not to write a history than anything else. Then his character traits include: calm, stoic, bored and lacks motivation. All those words are things I would use to describe someone who doesn't actually have a personality. The final decision belongs to @Lugubrious but this is my opinion.

On a completely unrelated note, where did you get your username from?

[Lugubrious]

@Cinderella Man Prince brings up some valid points. Since your character is still a work in progress, I won't get after it for now. It wouldn't hurt, however, to write down some of the history that Taene's forgotten, and to give him some traits, redeeming or no, beneath the exterior.

The only technical flaw you've got is the Rationale section. The Rationale is meant to explain why the character would want to join up with the Reclaimers. Basically, why he'd abandon his allies and turn coat in the middle of battle to join us. Doing so just because he doesn't know what he's doing anymore isn't very sensible reason. Now if it's part of Taene's character that he's unintelligent, the lack of depth and rationale would make more sense, but otherwise, it is not preferable.

[Cinderella Man]

@Lugubrious @Prince of Seraphs

I appreciate both of your criticisms, as they're quite helpful and the Rationale thing is helpful because I actually didn't know how to write that section out. But as for the talk about my history, you have to realize, Taene's still a work in progress. And not only a work in progress, but a work in progress that I started writing at 3AM while I was dead tired. Most of his forms' a placeholder which will be replaced later today.

Taene's personality will likely be fleshed out a bit further, now that I've actually gotten some sleep.

Edit: Also, if you were asking me, my username comes from the Eminem song of the same name which I believe is a reference to the movie.

[Lady Seraphina]

Also, if you were asking me, my username comes from the Eminem song of the same name which I believe is a reference to the movie.

@Cinderella Man

Was that this movie:

[Cinderella Man]

Yeah. As far as I'm aware, Eminem named the song "Cinderella Man" in reference to the movie. To me it's kind of come to mean someone that can do the impossible.

[Lady Seraphina]

I was in that movie.

[Experiment 249]

As an extra or a speaking role? Either way, better than anything I've done

[Lady Seraphina]

One of the three kids, and no I'm not going to tell you which one.

[Experiment 249]

Oh shit, didn't expect you to have a major role. (Not to sound rude, but not much can be assumed about a stranger on the internet)

[Lugubrious]

One of the three kids, and no I'm not going to tell you which one.

@Prince of Seraphs

Can I call you Patty from now on?

[Lady Seraphina]

Wrong one.

[Crimson Raven]

Good Grief
-Charlie Brown