[OOC] 《Convalescence - A New World 》

[iHxzardx]

Agreed I just cant stand whole post critique @CourierSix

[MatthiasAngel]

@CourierSix
1. Typos happen.

2. Oh okay, I see where you were going. I thought you had a standardized militia of some kind. Randomness seems more appropriate.

3. Awesome. I like having someone who's firmly established as a bad guy, especially a clever, devious one.

@iHxzardx

I contacted @CourierSix privately and mentioned that if I was being rude, I apologize and won't do it again. As for correcting everyone's posts, I've mostly being requesting changes in the display of the writing, not the actual writing, and at times have questioned facts and story elements, not entire posts (aside from Courier, whom in hindsight I really should have said to him in private). There really isn't anything wrong about a critique, as long as it doesn't directly insult the creator. It means someone is reading your writing and has enough interest in it to suggest (suggest, not demand or harass about) changes, in the interest of making it better. I'm not saying you're a bad writer or you're doing it wrong. I'm saying you could do it differently or better. If you don't like the changes, just reject them. Even if you were to shoot down an entire post of mine, at least I know you read it and have suggestions on how I could improve it.

Of course, if I actually did it to everyone on all of their posts, okay, I can understand that becoming obnoxious, but I haven't. Not even close. I went back through the OOC and checked.

In the future, though, I'll restrict comments about a single person to PMs.

[iHxzardx]

@MatthiasAngel Thank you for your consideration

[Vermillion]

*Vermillion ducks behind an old bed*

TAKE COVER!

TAKE COVER!


SHOTS FIRED!

[DeepestApology]

I'd like to make a small change to Tyler's appearance. He's going to be blonde haired from now on in order to match a cool pic I just found, if it isn't too much of an hassle.

, @Vermillion, should I update my character CS with what I found in Eatonville?

[Vermillion]

@DeepestApology

That's no problem.

And sure :)

[Gunther]

@CourierSix Excellent read. I knew when I read your bio for Raguel, I would not like him. You have done an excellent job at developing that image. I assume this is your intention. I like how he was able to read body language to discern the true leader. Well done. Observe the group and then act after all intelligence has been gathered.

On another note, I will not seek our your mistakes, even those quickest to point everyone's mistakes create them. If you want my advice about your writing, ask me and I will respond in a PM so that no one else may read them. That is unnecessary.

I enjoyed reading what you wrote. Keep it up. I would imagine Gregory Bainbridge, Joe Filion and company may one day come in conflict with Raguel Reid.

[MatthiasAngel]

Um...new post, someone?

[Vermillion]

I kinda wait for @Section to post, engage with the posts myself and @Gunther have made.

[MatthiasAngel]

Yeah, I'm waiting for different people to post. I could by now but I don't want the same three or four people to post back to back when we have seven people. Eight, since @Always hasn't posted in the Characters tab yet.

[MatthiasAngel]

By the way, @Always, where is Angel? Did you pick a neighborhood, or us she just kind of "in the wild?"

The map of neighborhoods is on OOC page 3 if you need a reference.

[Gunther]

I've been making daily posts into Joe's Journal. I started it five days ago and have made five posts. My first entry is April 3, 2016 and the most recent is April 16, 2016. He started in Buffalo, NY and began heading west with a caravan of people. One of the guys in the party is from California and they are trying to get out to CA. they have stopped in Cleveland, OH; Toledo, OH; Ft. Wayne, IN; Chicago, IL and are currently in Davenport, Iowa.

[Always]

@MatthiasAngel
SHIIIT I ALWAYS FORGET THAT!!!

SHI- I honestly have no clue... I'll have to think about this!

((Maybe the sun is affecting me 0-0 ))

[MatthiasAngel]

@Gunther How can they currently be in Davenport, Iowa and Detroit, Michigan at the same time?

[Treue]

@MatthiasAngel I think he means it's a journal of his travel across the country. In the latest journal entry they're in Davenport.

[MatthiasAngel]

@Treue Ohhh OK, the last entry is April 16th. They're making good time.

[Gunther]

No traffic + No cops on the interstates = "Making Good time!" ;)

But the power has gone out in Chicago already. Things might start to slow down. How do you get fuel from a gas station if the electricity is shut off? That will be a challenge eventually. for now, the pumps work.

[Treue]

@Gunther You just gotta open the tank and siphon it up, really.

[MatthiasAngel]

@Treue I mean, you could do it, sure. Just be prepared to wait around for a long long time, cuz that's a big fuel tank and you need a lot of fuel. Maybe start the siphon in the evening and have someone check on it overnight to make sure it's still going.

@Gunther Make sure that the tank takes standard gasoline. Some of them use diesel fuel, and that's gonna be thougher to find, though plausibly in better supply because it's not as popular.

EDIT: never mind, checked the journal.

[MatthiasAngel]

@iHxzardx @Always Would still like to know what neighborhood you're in, so I know if we'll chance an encounter.