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2 yrs ago
Current I do not "brainrot". I brainferment so my brain will become even smoother and even more potent than before in its smoothness.
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I live. I die. I live again!
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4 yrs ago
I was gone for a lot longer than I thought >.>"
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4 yrs ago
Sorry for my absence! A Volunteering position suddenly turned into a Volunteer Leadership position I was not expecting at all so things have been hectic.
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4 yrs ago
Look at you posers, having to bang dragons or sell your soul for magic when you could just play a lute for some. Anyways, here's Wonderwall. - Bards
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Havalock Orchily
The Gentleman Explorer




Humming himself a Yankee Doodle tune as he shaded in the final sketch of his improvised gas mask, Havalock's sharp ears perked up as he caught wind of a fairly distinctive accent asking someone about a book. Immediately he recognized it as belonging to one born into Stationary; a rare tone and accent as he believed them to be remarkably insular and encountering one of their sons or daughters in the wild was notably rare. Closing his journal, he swiftly and silently made his way towards the Stationari and what appeared to be a Dworf, overhearing their conversation. His heart skipped a beat as he recalled the Dworf who had originally crafted his precious Leenfind charger. With a polite tap on the shoulder, Havalock attempted to introduce himself into the conversation as gracefully as he could.

"Pardon me, but my name is Sir Havalock Orchily of Brand-House Orchily of Clothing. I couldn't help but overhear that you hail from the Fortress Pathfunder? Would you happen to know of the fate of one Fortress Skysem? If I remember correctly, their guidebook was called the 'Elder's Scrolls'; I ask for I wish to know the fate of the one who crafted my charger. Soon after he I was gifted this marvelous sporting good, he said he had to leave to defend his home and it has been many long years since I have heard from him again. Perhaps you could some how recognize him by his work? I was told by a previous employer that his work was of great quality and of some renown."

In a single motion, Havalock unslung his charger from his back and placed it in front of the Dworf with as much subtle and confident warmness as he could to ward off the inherent awkwardness of the situation before clearing his throat. In truth, he had a feeling that this Dworf was unlikely to know of another Dworf from a completely different Fortress, yet he often offered his sporting goods to others as a sign of peace and to give them something to which examine and (hopefully) expand his own knowledge of. Turning to the Stationari and giving a slight bow as a show of good manners, he extended a hand. Although he could clearly tell that the woman was from Stationary, he didn't recognize her outfit nor her weapons; at least by anything he could recall the last time he visited the department (which was admittedly a long time ago).

"Again, I must apologize for the abruptness of my introduction into this conversation, but I recognize your dialect and language as that of the Stationary Clans, yet I have yet to see any of your people dressed in a similar fashion. As for the Dworf, I do believe that his Fortress is that of a splinter group known as Fortress Deentdet, who split after a disagreement in dogma during their '3rd Era'. If memory serves me right, it was during a time of great crisis and turmoil as Nevergrow Wails were becoming more common but their strict adherence to the code was causing issues, especially when some of the decrees contradicted each other. Fortress Deentdet would reevaluate their holy Guidebooks and come into their 4th Era, where individual skill at arms was prized. Fortress Pathfunder traveled far from their home however and would come to settle in a section of Toys rich in LEGO and easy access to NERF sporting goods. They have a fairly militant, martial culture focused around individual heroism and valor."

Completely unaware of it himself, Havalock had begun espousing his travels and knowledge subconsciously, only realizing it mid-sentence and apologizing profusely for his ramblings.

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Havalock Orchily
The Gentleman Explorer




Havalock stood proud at the front of the ship, arms behind his back and gazing out into the sea of filth that laid before him. He had been aboard many ships, boats, dinghies and vessel, some considerably less water worthy than this one. One of the few achievements he had done to match his great grandfather was to sail across the frozen waters of Seafod when it had thawed out, even if he didn't have to fight off a dozen sea-beast in the process.

With a stoic apathy, he ignored to blundering of the fools attempting to apparently intoxicate themselves to the point they would fancy a swim in this sludge below. Havalock covered the lower half of his face with a scarf with a urinal cake sewn into a makeshift pocket at the front to produce a sort of rudimentary cloth gas mask. It worked just enough to prevent the worse the the stench from bombarding his olfactory senses. For all the horrendous smells and terrible sights he saw, Havalock never could get used to the fact of just ignoring it. Of all the peoples he has met over the years, the Kleaners were by far the most unknown to him, although not for a lack of trying. He simply preferred not to stay in their department any longer than he had to less he violently regurgitate his innards.

Turning on his the heels of his LLBean Men's Gore-Tex Cresta Leather Hiking Boots and marching back towards the common area of the vessel with a precise tap of each step, he brushed past the many other colorful cast of characters and crew with his chin up and a friendly smile. Entering what could generously be described as a common area and at worse a holding pen with tables and chairs, the noble set up shop. Producing a journal, a pair of booklets and his canteen from his REEBOW GEAR Military Tactical Backpack 3 Day Assault Pack Army Molle Bag Backpacks Rucksack 35L, he focused on recording his notes and thoughts thus far as well as attempting to transcribe a booklet given to him by a Kleaner that spoke of a great hero called "Stanley Steamer". Supposedly he could deep clean any surface he walked upon and blast away Smilers and filth alike with great jets of steam.

The journey thus far sailing on the Spillway has been... acceptable. I cannot expect levels of luxury aboard every vessel I board. I am in good health and without any outstanding health concerns. It would seem that the scar I received from the Fanged Blood Chameleon I encountered last week is healing well and without pain (although I am still regularly washing the area with a "liquid charcoal skin cleanser" from Pharmacy. I know not of its effectiveness but since adding some strong spirits into the mix, my worries of infection have dropped considerably). The contents of the package I have been charged with protecting is secure and I am refraining myself from asking too many questions of what is within both as a professional courtesy and personal honor.

I am reminded of my time sailing with Clan Brisket from the Meat Section of Grocery, when I had contracted their aid in delivering me across the Sea of Food. We had gotten lucky that day as it was just starting to thaw, allowing us easy (if not difficult) passage through the icy sheets while leaving the more sonorous creatures entombed below. We only were engaged with two notable creatures during that time at which time the clan's warriors ("Tenderizers") dispatched them with great haste and enthusiasm with a combination of thrown cleavers and spiked mallets, boosted with courageous battle cries.

I can only hope for pleasant winds from here on out, even though the ship uses an engine over sails or oars. Following this passage, I have drawn a diagram of how to create a workable facial filter by combining a scarf, scraps of cloth and a (fresh) urinal cake. True that there is great risk in acquiring one from a Restroom, they are often sold by those intrepid scavengers who regularly visit there. In addition, there are few other alternatives more cost effective than this should you spend prolong periods of time in environments with can overwhelm your senses.
@Paradoxial Tell me about it, its kind of nostalgic actually c:


(Clarifications: Velvet-born is the catch all term for Nobility in Clothing that is further subdivided into other types based on what that brand/house is most known for. Sports Masters of Clothing is the title granted to House Orchily, not Havalock himself. Chargers are Blastas, Clothing calls them Chargers because it sounds more formal and fancy.)
Holy shit, I never thought I'd see someone actually try to do a Walmart Apoc RP. Definitely throwing my hat into the ring for this! Haven't been on in a while but this seems like a good place to start up again.
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@Keyguyperson KEEEEYYYYYYYYY :D




@Nate1008 Going off of what @Aleranicus has said, here is a list of "have you tried" and similar things that might help you:

What do you plan on doing in the RP that will not only make it fun for everyone else but also for you? As it stands currently, people will not really want to interact with what is obviously a very hostile and treacherous hivemind meaning you will end up posting about yourself for a while as everyone is interacting with each other.


I believe you are trying to take inspiration from the likes of the Flood, the Tyranids and the Zerg but have you considered the option of not requiring to take all of them to create a "super parasite"? I know the word OP has been thrown around a lot, but that is honestly what it seems like you are trying to do, make an unbeatable creation that cannot be stopped and cannot be destroyed. Have you considered that the other players would not consider this nearly as amusing or interesting as you?


Have you considered any deeper history for your species? As it stands right now, it would seem that the government was astronomically inept at preventing what was basically a zombie outbreak to the point it has taken over a colony and a moon. No stable government would ever let this just slide but that also means you could have had a weak or ineffective government ignore or not dedicate enough resources to fixing the issue. In my own sheet, the Haradoni would have had enough resources to put down an outbreak of the Syndorian Virus but because they were terribly loosing a war, they decided to let it loose on themselves.


From personal experience, I would recommend against using precise numbers. As it stands on your NS right now they are only taking up space and not really giving any meaningful information. Same with the lists, they are just taking up space and could at least be put in hiders. On the topic of numbers, 718 people is a pitifully small force to the point that it is likely impossible to do any meaningful actions; I'm fairly certain the high school I went to had around 700 people.


I would suggest removing the infested naval vessels and coming up with some more of your own with pictures. To a lot of poeple just saying you "take over other player's stuff" is both lazy and bad writing. In addition your navy's weapons do not seem to be intimidating or even practical at all. I understand that you're trying to use the Tyranid hiveships as a basis, but your writing does not make it seem impressive. How about firing boney spikes and fleshy mass, you use bioplasma, rapid fire spore cannons that fire a super dense bone-like spike that mimics conventional kinetic munitions or even living creatures who can latch on to ships (if not stopped by shields) and start to dig into them.

Also the fact that you can take over another player's hyperdread is really off putting. Even if you don't plan on doing it, the fact that you list is as part of your active navy and allude to it as a possibility means that there's always a chance. A chance many don't want to take.


For what reason do you have slaves/non infected populations for? I know that you've mentioned somewhere that you turn some of them into sleeper agents with the virus in them, but you are relying on the fact that said agents won't simply say where they are coming from and authorities simply knowing that they're from infected space. You're also overlooking the fact that some people would be more than willing to just shoot down suspected infected craft. Instead, what if your hivemind was smart enough to start basically farming humans/other sentient beings for hosts and biomass. In addition, what was your original host species? There is more than just humans in this galaxy.


There is more but this is what I could quickly think of off the top of my head. Another word of advice, don't be upset if you have to change your NS a lot. Ask any veteran NRPer and they will tell you that they change their NS many times if not dozens of times. Hell, I know a decent number of NSs that their creators never consider "finish" and continuously work on it up until the RP itself ends up dying out.
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