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Back when dinosaurs ruled the Earth, I got started with writing online on the Spore forums. Man, those were the days. We're talking like 12 years ago 2010-ish!

I've been here on and off for almost as long, and have GM'd a bunch of different things to varying success.

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@Muttonhawk

Right, my preference is that there are just a bunch of empty “shells” and that Galbar would be the only default one. So we’re in agreement there. Regarding MP, I’m open to ideas.
@Lord Zee

Yeah good to see you again; I remember Larwen and likewise thought that you and Kho did very well together. It's a shame that you and I never got to interact much.

I agree that Godspeed spiraled out of control and started to look like an Advanced RP. That's a large part of the reason behind why I advocate for the 'deep dive' that I mentioned.

Also another tidbit I liked from Godspeed was the Prestige system for heroes, any chance that might see a return? Everything else looks great and has my support, with what that's worth. I look forward to seeing what comes of this!


The Prestige system indeed seemed to work quite well, save for how that one guy with Promus was able to make like five heroes and had mountains of prestige...

Perhaps modifications to how prestige is earned are warranted, but as for the system itself and how it was spent on titles, I do think that Termite was onto something. Back in the old days, we used khookies instead of prestige, and Kho would read every single hero post, rate it, and bake an appropriate amount of khookies as an award. That became too time consuming and thus we came to the more formulaic approach to prestige that you saw in Godspeed, but perhaps a compromise can be achieved. Specifically I'd look at the quest system and give it more attention. I think it makes things a lot more interest to award prestige for heroes when they actually do things of significance and/or meet failure and make sacrifices.
As this RP has started to slow down and the old plots that I started years ago have begun to grow stale, I've been thinking a lot about a new installment for Divinus. In past months I've advocated for us planning to begin the slow process of seeing arcs to their end, so I imagine this comes as no surprise. Anyways, I've realized that there needn't be a linearity here. I could stick around here and simultaneously start a new Divinus.

So some ideas have taken my mind by storm over the past day or two and I figured I'd share them here, both to test the waters for interest and also get some feedback.

To start with, I'm of the opinion that it's high time we took a collective dive into the deep end and made a Divinus in the Advanced RP section. This is basically the opposite approach of what was done with Godspeed some time ago, so I'm interested in seeing how it might turn out differently.

Another idea I had to differentiate it from past Divinus RPs was to bunker down bigtime on the mythology, magic, and divine aspects. Basically I'd canonize the metaphysics as being more or less completely Aristotelian; the universe would be composed of a series of numerous concentric spheres and would be Galbar-centric. With Galbar as the middle sphere, there'd be upper 'Celestial' spheres with the stars and such embedded into them, as well as 'lower' spheres that might contain an underworld and the like. In this hierarchical system, objects and life would be very intrinsically connected to their sphere of origin. Travel between the spheres would be quite difficult but not impossible. Most magic could be explained as energy (or essence) of other spheres leaking into Galbar's, and gravity would exist because the objects of Galbar's middle sphere long to be united with Galbar. Birds cannot simply fly up all the way to the Heavenly Spheres; that'd be absurd, and they're bound to Galbar!

When you do mythological stuff, go big or go home, as they say.

Anyways, the concept of the spheres would tie in to the nature of divinity and the powers of the gods. Though divine beings would be powerful enough to traverse throughout the various spheres (this would probably make for a good definition of divinity, actually--it also fits in with our current limitations of demigods being incapable of unaided interplanetary travel) they would be most closely connected with one of them. Some gods might well choose to attune themselves with the middle sphere (Galbar) and exist among the mortals, a la Thor. But many others would probably choose their own spheres, so the god of death might have his underworld, and the fire god might have some infernal sphere that'd be like Muspelheim, and so on. This provides a very solid in-universe explanation for how personal planes would work and it also might allow some tensions. Since these spheres are physical places, they aren't entirely cut off from others; it'd be much easier to trespass into others' places, and in some cases it might be necessary to travel through somebody else's sphere to get to where you need to go. The gods of the upper spheres and those of the lower spheres might also come to dislike one another.

So spheres would obviously be very important and defining aspects of a god. For the most part they'd become manifest very early on in the RP and then stay the same, but perhaps a few resemblant of Persephone could change spheres throughout the course of things. Given the much greater emphasis on personal planes by lieu of this concept of spheres, I am tempted to make modifications to the Domain(Portfolio) system. Specifically I find myself tempted to say that 'Domains' as we call them are no longer necessary; I could rename Portfolios to something more like Foci. A god could then take completely unrelated Foci, like Horses, Earthquakes, and Seas (a la Poseidon). Though you wouldn't start with one, our notion of 'Domain' could perhaps be renamed to Cluster. Taking multiple closely-related Foci like Volcanoes and Forges would give you a cluster over that sort of thing, in this case Fire. Having the cluster of Fire would imply some level of mastery and control over all things Fire-related, even if they aren't technically Foci.

And all this talk of spheres leads in nicely to one thing that I very much liked about Godspeed--the usage of Mater Lei instead of some all-powerful yet vague and enigmatic figures like Fate and Amul'Sharar. They wouldn't be exact parallels, but I would have a figure that I'll nickname 'the Architect of the Spheres' as the informal leader of the pantheon. The Architect would be the god that found the void that would eventually become Galbar's universe, slowly crafted the various spheres, and then after spending so much time creating the empty shell of Galbar decided to enlist help for the monumental task before him. Enter the other gods, who he promptly offers control over many of the spheres so that they can help him to realize his vision. Of course, all the millennia of solitude have made the already oddball Architect into even less of a people-person. So given that as well as how he'd only be slightly more powerful than the other gods rather an overwhelmingly so, the situation would quickly spiral out of his control. Much to his chagrin he'd be unable to micromanage and gods would start doing what they want, but as they'd come to be attuned to the various spheres, it'd be too late to kick them out. So he'd just have to make the best of it and try to maintain some semblance of order.

Well that was quite a bit. Thoughts?

Turn 9




The Mustaqilun Tribe



Orr'gavol: The Hammersworn



Oguurec Dekaan



Mol'nan Tribe



Ekon-Danna






Estroth's Machinations

Fort Derung
Late January





Carnage. One of the gladiators impaled the other upon a spear, and the crowd went wild at the gratuitous burst of blood that erupted afterward, each of the fine droplets flung into the air a scintillating ruby in the sun. But then the one with a spear grew too caught up in his victory and was in turn skewered from behind by yet another one of the savages. Some of the spectators were enthralled by the gore and followed the fighters' every movement, but General Estroth merely watched with a lazy and impassive look as he decided upon which of them to hedge his money upon. Eventually he pointed to one especially savage pygmy. "A thousand dacha upon that one," he said to one of his officers. The two took simultaneous gulps of wine, and then Estroth's man answered, "Deal."

Bloodsports had fallen out of favor in the mainland, for slaves were a valued commodity and throwing them away in the arenas was seen as a barbaric waste. But here in Lemuria, it seemed as though there were always too many of the mongrels. For every pygmy that his soldiers shot or worked to death, another three vermin seemed to take its place. The pygmies were vile, lazy, treacherous little beasts that weren't even especially good at the sort of manual labor expected of slaves; they were only used in the mines and rubber plantations for their convenience and expendable nature. Talic Estroth had the lofty ambition of one day seeing the genocide to its end, but in the meantime he'd settle for reinstating pit fighting. Watching the wretches hack one another to pieces was sometimes entertaining.




When he left the arena later that day, a gunman was waiting outside. But the young dark elf was scared, and his trembling hands couldn't aim true. He fired one shot of his pistol and then ran, but a sudden impact struck his leg and brought him to the ground. A small grin formed upon Estroth's cruel visage as he held up a smoking pistol of his own.

"Closer," the general spat. The wounded would-be assassin was picked up and dragged forward by Estroth's bodyguards. The dark elf struggled for a few moments but then realized the futility; there were four soldiers dragging him forward and he could hardly even flail his limbs if he tried. "Sometimes, I still long for the days when I could go into battle myself. At least this gives me a taste of that excitement once again."

The bodyguards beat the dark elf back down down onto his knees but even then they didn't let go. They had of course torn the pistol free from his grasp, but even now they were wary of him suddenly procuring a knife. But true to the tales, the crazed general showed no fear. He put one hand under the traitor's head and lifted his chin up, forcing the terrified youth to look at him. The elf's eyes were drowned beneath a glossy layer of fear, but muddied into that was more than a little bit of hatred and defiance. Talic laughed a little bit at the sight, and at the spittle that followed.

"You're a disgrace! A fucking savage, no better than the na-"

A fist broke his jaw and knocked him onto the ground. Though a general's sword was meant to be a sign of his status, this one always enjoyed the times that he could put his blade to use. He drew it then, and the bodyguards released their holds and backed away. Estroth pressed the tip of the sword into the assassin's neck gently enough to just shed a tiny trickle of blood, but then he roared, "I'm fucking Talic Estroth! The Butcher of Derung! And you compare me to them? You think that you can kill me? Ha!"

He lifted up the sword and nearly brought it back down on the man's neck, but that would have been too...clean. Instead he buried the blade's edge into the wounded man's ribcage so deep that he could hardly wrench it back out after the fact, even leaning back and putting his boot upon the wretch's mangled chest. The thick layer of blood upon his boots would be covered by mud, but his sword needed cleaning, so he thrust it into the hands of one of his men. The assassin still lived, albeit choking on his own blood. "Should've aimed for the head."

He turned away from the dying man's spasms to face his second, a Colonel Zekel Mythec, and dryly ordered, "Have the traitor's family strung up and shot."




There were only a few people assembled around a grand war table. Estroth didn't keep an especially large staff; over the years he'd ensured that his inner circle consisted only of what few like-minded officers he could find, mixed with a few other sycophants whose desire to ingratiate themselves outweighed any pretensions of bureaucracy or of adhering to strict policy. The Emperor reigned supreme, above all, essentially an infallible god. But on Derung, it was only the General who spoke for Yllendyr. To keep with the analogy, he had what one could call a divine mandate; for his ruthless effectiveness the Imperium granted him a great deal of autonomy and leeway, and he didn't tolerate officers that entertained delusions of crossing him or questioning his methods.

"General, I've received reports from the second Auxiliary Legion. Captain Gruz reports a decisive victory over the Matamba tribes; several hundred pygmies were slain and the force was able to advance into their territory and raze three redoubts and villages. Unfortunately, they were evacuated before-"

Talic silenced the junior officer with a wave of his hand and threw the paper report to the side. "Decisive victory. Good, I've come to expect as much from Gruz. Now reign him back in before he overextends his forces and gets them all killed. Tell the mongrel orc that his orders are to withdraw and regroup with the First Auxiliary for their invasion of the Sundi region."

So he sifted through the rest of the day's missives. Reacting to reports of renewed pirate activity, he ordered yet another naval patrol to circle the island and attack any illegal ships. It seemed that no matter how many times he cleared the nest, more pirate vermin always arose; he blamed it on the navy's refusal to send more ironclads.

"And one more, General. A letter just came in; it's from the mainland. To be opened by you, it said."

Expecting nothing more than a trade manifest or perhaps the rare notice of garrison changes, he was thoroughly taken aback when he saw the unbroken seal and heard that it was for his eyes, and even more so when he read that Naerzo had fallen terminally ill and was expected to pass within the fortnight. The others saw the look on his face and became instantly anxious; many had never before seen anything but cruelty, anger, or irritation upon their commander's face. "Make preparations for me to return to the mainland; I want to be on a ship tomorrow," he suddenly declared.

"What? Have you been reassigned?" Zekel blurted.

The general scoffed at the mere suggestion. "No, I expect that I'll return soon enough. I imagine that I'll be attending a royal funeral, and then a coronation."
A WIP, but it has an overview that gives a pretty good idea.

Edit: updated

Turn 8




The Levogh



The Lycan Covenant



Attolia



The ap-Cantar



The Mustaqilun Tribe



Orr'gavol: The Hammersworn



The Aedelfaari



Oguurec Dekaan



Mol'nan Tribe



Ekon-Danna






Gideon was a long way from home. Then again, at this point, did he even have a home? It occurred to him that he had hardly even considered what he might do in the event that his impulsive plan succeeded and his military career enabled an early retirement. Perhaps he wouldn't even return to his city in Aurelia; there were probably nicer and warmer beaches elsewhere, where the smokestacks of factories didn't taint the salt spray and give it a sour taste.

He sat by himself and mulled over all this in silence. It would probably be good for his sanity to act more sociable, but it wouldn't be long now before mealtime. He could talk to his fellow soldiers then. In the meantime, he found his eyes drifting down to his hand and to the ornate ring upon it. For what must have been the thousandth time that month, his mind replayed the memory of just how he'd wound up with it.




Months ago


The windy air on the ship's crowded deck was cold, for they were still in the lower latitudes. But anything was worse than being stuck below deck. Even on a ship as large as this, it was easy for the gentle rocking to make a man sick if he tried to stay holed up in his quarters like a rat. The sight of some others vomiting off the side of the ship reminded him that it wasn't much better up here, but he tuned out the disgusting noises before they also made him sick and so he pushed through the throngs of people and found his way to another part of the deck. He came to the edge of the ship and leaned against the railing, trying to follow some sailor's advice and find something still to stare at. There was nothing around except the gently bobbing ship itself, the rolling waves below, and the sky. The ship and the waves were of course the last thing that he should have looked at since their constant motion would only make the sickness worse, so he found himself looking up to the clouds. They weren't quite perfectly still, but staring at them was probably a better bet than trying to look at the sun.

Gideon might have despaired at his circumstances then, but moping wasn't in his nature. He stared and stared, trying to find shapes and faces in the clouds. Then he jumped with a start when someone else came to join him and leaned against the railing only a few inches away. The boy naturally spun to look at the stranger that had approached. The stranger was a well dressed and aging man that nonetheless projected an air of elegance in that way that only the wealthy and powerful could manage.

"Ah, hello there," the man spoke. His words were are crisp and clear as the cold skies, but they carried a subtle hint of something else much like the air here tasted of salt. The man's voice had the faintest hint of an accent, but it sounded like none that Gideon had ever heard before, much less one that he could recognize.

Gideon was silent for he didn't know what to say; a few awkward moments of silence passed by in the blink of an eye. Fortunately this man had the social grace to break the silence and brush away the building tension. "I couldn't stand it up there," the man had finally gone on to say, gesturing up to the much less crowded upper deck that was reserved for first-class passengers. "I can see how grand it looks from down here, but it's just another deck. And the people there make poor conversation."

Conversation? That's what the man had come down here for? Gideon thought for a moment, then tried his best to indulge the stranger. "So...what brought you onto a ship heading to Yllendyr?"

The hint of a smile crept onto the man's face as he offered some vague answer, "I have some friends there that I must catch up with."

Gideon didn't think much of the answer; he found himself more bewildered with how this person had friends in Yllendyr, and how a lower class person like himself had even come to speak with such a plutocrat. He snapped out of his momentary daze to see the man's inquisitive eyes peering deep into his own; without speaking, the man had returned the question.

"I'm going to join the elves' military. I might not like it, but it's better than moping around and lamenting a circumstance that I could change."

Gideon realized that without even consciously thinking about it, he had tried to make himself look sophisticated. Lamenting? He never spoke like that! Had he even used the word correctly?

"Ah, intriguing...see, you're already proving to be a more interesting conversationalist than any of those arrogant fools on the upper deck. Tell me more."

Over the next minutes Gideon somehow managed to offer his name, his innermost thoughts, and more or less this entire life story to the stranger before he'd even realized it. All the while the strange man had still revealed next to nothing about himself, and aside from the occasional brief quip or reassuring smile, the plutocrat had done nothing but listen and allow the boy to pour his heart out.

When Gideon finally found himself once again telling the story of how he'd come onto that very ship and of how he was going to enlist in the military, the proverbial curtains closed. Once he stopped speaking for a few moments and let silence reign again, he looked closer at the man and saw him just staring out into the sea. Had he even been listening?

"You're more remarkable than you give yourself credit for, Gideon. Perhaps you'll do well in life."

"Uh...thanks, sir?" he stammered. Meanwhile, the stranger had stopped leaning against the railing and reached for one of the many rings around his fingers. Each one looked exquisite and was probably worth more than Gideon's life.

So imagine his surprise when the man removed one of those rings and held it in an outstretched palm towards Gideon. "Take it," he intoned. "A gift to you, for telling such a good tale."

The boy immediately grew suspicious and backed away half a step. "Thank you, but I couldn't possibly..."

"It isn't stolen," the man said, practically reading Gideon's mind. "Let me make this easy for you: take it, or I'll throw it into the sea." He held the ring over the railing and toyed with it, gently laughing.

It was worth far too much for that; the part of Gideon that had always been poor screamed at him to accept the thing, and just like that he found it placed in his hand. It was only then that he could examine it closely: it was a band of solid, gleaming gold. Decorative swirls and patterns wrapped around it, but it was the signet that caught one's eye: a large, oval-shaped ruby was set into a circular plate. It looked almost like a red eye.

"It's very valuable. I hope you'll have the sense to keep it for yourself; in these days, there are no honest men. I'm afraid that no merchant or jeweler would offer a fair price to a young man like you. But that's just as well; you should keep it, wear it, treasure it if you're going into the military. It's always given me good luck."

He stuttered, "Th-thank you." Then he looked down into the ring and its ruby, "But where did you get it?"

There was a faint chuckle for an answer. Gideon thought that he heard the man utter, "Anhreich." He looked up even more bewildered, but his new acquaintance was gone, already vanished into the crowd. Gideon was left alone, and for the rest of that long sailing trip he'd been left to wonder if his ears had played tricks upon him. Things did not come from Anhreich, nor go to that place if they could help it; that was a cursed land where ghouls walked and men burned one another alive. Surely something so beautiful as this ring couldn't have come from there?

He never did see that strange man again.




Gideon was still brushing his fingers over that ring upon his finger when the bells rang out. Reluctantly, he made his way to the mess hall. He found himself sitting down at some table with some other humans, an orc, and some snide-looking young dark elf woman. Finding himself not much in the mood for conversation and the others likewise quiet, Gideon resigned himself to silence until the dark elf finally asked why everyone else was so quiet. Much to Gideon's shock, one of the other soldiers pulled out a radio, and when Gideon heard the news he was just as shocked and bewildered as Lunastri.

At least he could find some humor in how the radio tried to take an objective stance. At least there were still some honest people, though to be honest it probably wouldn't be long before whichever side of the civil war controlled the radio tower had those truthful operators replaced with propaganda speakers. Gideon supposed that those reporters might even be shot for something along the lines of treason; he couldn't imagine that either Olarth or Ecruir would appreciate the other side being portrayed in anything but the absolute worst light. That the Sentinels of all people would stay out of the fighting was another irony that was beyond laughable!

Gideon could hardly eat. He excused himself to some quiet corner, then fell on the ground laughing in morbid humor. "This shouldn't have been my fight! I might have to die for one of those fucking 'emperors' that slay their own kin, and meanwhile the Sentinels won't even be lifting their fingers," he muttered to himself. He looked down to his ring. "I hope you really do bring good luck."
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