Flarbinia

Uncovered: Secrets of a Lost Age

Anyone want to discuss character ideas?

@Theyra

Sorry for the late reply, but yes.

In The Black (A Clean-Up Crew RP)

Redecker Krueger resumed surveillance as the radio went silent, even if he thought that graves denying himself and others supporting fire was a risky move. Whether the man on the third floor was a shapeshifter or just an injured employee who happens to look like the male reporter didn't matter. He has been ordered not to fire into the building and focus on the exterior. He watched the surrounding area until he noticed something move near the building and pointed his rifle in that direction. "Movement spotted. Unable to identify if it's human or not. Holdin' fire until I can get a clean line of sight." Redecker said over the radio to anyone who was listening as he continued watching.

"The fucker is headed for the perimeter. Takin' the shot." Krueger said over the radio as he pulled the trigger, his target falling like a puppet with its strings cut. "Target neutralized. Area clear. Resumin' surveillance." Redecker Krueger said over the radio as he turned his attention back to the surrounding area.

Uncovered: Secrets of a Lost Age

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Uncovered: Secrets of a Lost Age

Cue the Indiana Jones Theme

Star Wars: A Republic Divided

I am really lookin' forward to this RP.

Paradise Lost

"Still, it could be worse. He could've been one of the engineers assigned to Cryostasis Pod Maintenance." Doctor Yeoman said to Doctor Raphael Vitella. "I can't imagine bein' placed in one of those things." Doctor Vitella said to Yeoman. "My cousin worked on ships his whole life. The technology ain't as flawless as ancient Human dramas make it look. One fuckup, one malfunction, one glitch that goes unnoticed, and a passenger ends up as a frozen stiff fit only for a funeral." Yeoman said to Vitella as she handed him a pad to see if anyone was expected to show up. "A couple of follow ups and a couple people needin' their prescriptions, but other than that, looks like it will be a slow day in Med-Bay unless someone ends up needin' emergency surgery." Raphael Vitella said as he put away the pad and turned his attention to the door.

Doctor Raphael Vitella watched as the rest of the Medical Staff assigned to this shift arrived. "Alright, people. Stay sharp. Just because it's lookin' to be a slow day doesn't mean that we can slack off while we're on the clock. The life of your patients may depend on you workin' to the best of your abilities. Who knows what could happen today?" Doctor Vitella said to the rest of the medical staff who had entered the Med-Bay.

In The Black (A Clean-Up Crew RP)

"I have repositioned. Resuming surveillance." Redecker Krueger said over the radio as he looked through the scope. "I don't see any more hostiles on the fourth floor, but I'll keep an eye out for any activity above ground level." Redecker said over the radio as his gaze turned to the third floor. "Third floor looks clear so far. Wait, I see some movement. I can see him now. It's a member of the news crew. He ain't a 'Necrotic', but he's badly injured. I will be watching him until he leaves my line of sight. Best get a medic there before he passes out from blood loss." Krueger said as he watched the third floor, being on the lookout for any hostiles that might still be on that floor. "Hostile spotted. Taking the shot." Redecker Krueger said over the radio as he spotted a cyber zombie and took the shot.

"Hostile neutralized. VIP condition unchanged. Maintaining surveillance until the third floor is secured. I will immediately report if I see anyone else who is uninfected, VIP or otherwise." Redecker Krueger said over the radio as he continued to look through the scope.

Star Wars: A Republic Divided

Kol Nax

Kol Nax

Species
Gotal

Gender
Male

Age
40

Appearance
Brown furred Gotal standing at 2.1 Meters with large conical horns. He has orange eyes and the gray-brown skin that's typical in his species. He wears brown Armorweave, as Armorweave can protect from Blasters while remaining light enough for him to easily chase down his targets.

Personality
Kol Nax prefers Vibroblades over Blasters because he sees blasters as too impersonal. He believes that the point of fighting is to win a fight, not demonstration of fancy technique. He doesn't care about politics, seeing governments as a big source of Bounties that he can cash in on. However, he refuses to join the Guild, as many lucrative Bounties are posted by individuals who do not go through Guild channels. He also refuses to take Bounties posted by pirates due to his home being destroyed by scum like them.

Homeworld
Zegara

Occupation
Bounty Hunter

Force Sensitive
N

Rank
N/A

Forces Abilities
N/A

Skills
Proficient with a Vibroblade.
Piloting

Equipment//Personal Belongings
Two handed Vibroblade. Blaster Armorweave clothing. Kekstad (Modified YT-1300)

Background
Born on the Outer Rim world Zegara, Kol Nax was born in Lucky Barrens, one of the larger ore mining towns on the planet. Kol thought that he has nothing forward to look forward to in life than mining ore for the rest of his life like his father. This all changed when he and several others returned late from the mines to find the town reduced to burning buildings and charred corpses. Marshal Kekstad told Kol that Nurg Destree, the Mayor of Lucky Barrens, refused to pay annual tribute to a pirate gang called the Fire Talons and they had decided to make an example of the town before succumbing to his wounds, the blaster pistols in his hands having been emptied during the attack. Kol helped the others bury the dead before grabbing what few possessions weren't destroyed or stolen and headed to the nearest town with a spaceport. He sold everything except the clothes on his back and bought passage offworld, recognizing that there was nothing left for him on Zegara. He looked back at his homeworld one last time before the transport went to Hyperspace.

Kol Nax arrived on the volcanic moon Zeroth and was approached by a Kel Dor. The Kel Dor introduced himself as Xaa Gilas and explained to the Gotal that he was looking for new fighters after his last one was "accidentally" killed by his opponent, offerring him a big cut of the profit if he signed on with him. Kol accepted and was escorted to a small building. He was introduced to Nautolan named Zinn Leda and was told to change out of his miner's clothes. The Gotal returned in more appropriate attire and was handed a wooden sword. Kol Nax engaged the Nautolan and was defeated with fast and precise strikes, Zinn saying "Forget your preconceived notions of armed combat, of two honorable warriors fighting in accordance with some noble code. That mindset will get you killed. The purpose of fighting is to win a fight, not to demonstrate some fancy technique. How you attack and defend depends on your opponent or the terrain and situation. Act as the wind when your enemy is like a tree. Act as a mountain when your enemy is like the wind." before helping him up. Training would continue until Zinn Leda decided that Kol was ready, giving him a two-handed Vibroblade.

Kol Nax and Xaa Gilas arrived on the Black Sun controlled rogue planet Grilla and was approached by a Rodian. "Xaa. Judgin' by your friend's attire, I can safely assume that he is not here to gamble at the Sabacc tables or watch the Podraces. I hope he fights better than Dressk. Ax Phaask, my own fighter, is very angry that he won't be getting a rematch with him, so don't expect him to pull his punches if he faces your fighter in the arena." The Rodian said to Xaa in a hostile tone before heading to the arena. Xaa Gilas told Kol that the Rodian is Kragg Iantoc, head of the Star Ghosts (a gang working for the Pyke Syndicate), before heading to the arena with the Gotal in tow. Xaa paid the entry fee before heading to his seat while Kol Nax followed several other new arrivals to the waiting area. He entered the arena and faced off with Dug twins named Gowsara and Togan, both of them duel wielding Vibroblades. "Maroc Gek will enjoy seeing the look on his rival's face when we defeat his fighter and claim the pot for ourselves." Togan said to Kol before he and his brother engaged the Gotal. They were able to keep Kol on the backfoot for a while, but Toban grew impatient and struck at the wrong moment, allowing his larger opponent to block the blade and knock him to the ground, Gowsara quickly being defeated without his brother to keep the Gotal distracted. Kol Nax would defeat gladiator after gladiator until he found himself facing off with Koarrgh, a Kaleesh on the payroll of Galba The Hutt. Koarrgh told Kol that he expects him to put up a better fight than Ax Phaask before charging at the Gotal. The two fighters clashed, exchanging blow after blow until Koarrgh found an opening and landed a blow that knocked out his less experienced opponent.

Kol Nax opened his eyes to find himself in a Bacta Tank aboard a ship, Xaa Gilas telling him that the Gotal would now be working for Galba The Hutt before leaving. Kol assumed that he would be reduced to breaking the legs of debtors once he was fully recovered. Instead, he was tasked with helping Koarrgh bring in Crimdan Grast, a Devaronian who had split off from Galba's organization to form his own gang and began encroaching on the Hutt's remaining territory on Halmon Station. The Gotal accepted the mission, changed into clothingmore suitable for the mission, and headed to Grast's Bar where the head of the Grast Consortium held court as soon as Galba's vessel had docked with the station. Kol Nax was surprised that he was able to walk there without encountering any of Crimdan Grast's thugs and even more surprised when the bouncer let him and Koarrgh into the bar without confiscating their weapons.

Crimdan cleared his throat to speak as he smiled at Kol. "You must be Galba The Hutt's new errand boy. I knew you worked for him the moment the Moon Jewels dropped out of hyperspace. The old slug must be desperate to send his campion and some unproven muscle after a small-timer like me. Every day his condition gets worse. He is already too weak to directly command his top lieutenants while his empire crumbles around him. Join the Grast Consoritum and I'll pay double whatever he offered you. Refuse and my men will send your corpses out the airlock." Crimdan Grast said to Kol Nax and Koarrgh as several thugs pointed their blasters at them. Kol responded by drawing his Vibroblade and charging at the closest thug, immediately cutting down a Rodian, Koaargh slamming his weapon into a Gran's head. He immediately followed up by striking down a Trandoshan and thrusting his blade into a human thug's chest while the Kaleesh slammed the bartender's head into the counter. The fight continued until the surviving thugs decided to cut their losses and ran out of the bar. Crimdan Grast tried to bribe Kol and was knocked out for his trouble. When the Devaronian regained consciousness in front of Galba The Hutt, he begged for his life, offering to pay quadruple the Hutt's usual cut. Lazaal (the Duros who served as Galba's Majordomo) told him that he had already signed his death warrant. Galba died a month later and his organization collapsed, Kol Nax deciding to become a Bounty Hunter after being freed from his contract.

Kol Nax saw the face of a figure named Cornel Grim. The Fire Talons had attacked Black Sun and the resulting bounty had resulted in the decimation of the gang, with Cornel being the only leader left. He accepted the Bounty and immediately headed to meet with an Ithorian Information Broker named Tabbigg.

Star Wars: A Republic Divided

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Accepted, but the picture link is broken and the appearance part is not where you place the picture. You write in the appearance part, but do not post a picture there. The picture goes above the name. Fix that when you can.

@Theyra

Fixed

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Okay, I read the CS and I need more for the personality part than just that he does not like using blasters.
Same thing with appearance since you did not provide a picture, and I had to look up what a Gotal looks like. Say what he looks like.

For the Rank and Forces Abilities part of the CS, just say N/A rather than leave it as is since your character is neither military nor a Jedi.

One last thing, you do not need to change it since I know there is no rule for it and I have not seen someone do it. But do not use custom planets since there are alot of planets in star wars in both Legends and Canon where you can find a plant you like and making one up is not needed.

That is it, and make the edits and we will see if the CS is acceptable or not.

@Theyra

I am changin' "refuses to use blasters" to "prefers to use Vibroblades over blasters".