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@Blizz No but not far from it.
@Raijinslayer Nope, you're good. Blood taught Reggie how to completely operate the monitors so Reggie would probably be able to do the things he did.
@HaltingBlooper Umm, the Kindergarten they are going to is a completely different one then last time. I get that Emerald may not have gotten that which would explain why he thought that it was the same one but I still wanted to make sure you got that.
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In the Kindergarten, where canyon walls are dotted with the imprints of gems who were "born" a very, very, long time ago, there was a gemstone embedded into the canyon wall that was yet form. This deep indigo colored gemstone resembled the geometric shape of an emerald but was smoother and took on a more roundish appearance. This gemstone was on the verge of becoming the physical third eye of a gem with an odd set of weapons. This gem was Azurite.
@Blizz I'm sorry, I don't like criticizing people's works but, at least in the casual section, I expect proper grammar and a decent structure of sentences. One thing to help you write better if you're going to remain in the casual section, write how you would talk and remember to use punctuation and capitalization where needed.
In the kindergarten, we're canyon walls dotted with the imprintments of gems who were"born"a very very long time ago.But there was a gemstone embedded into the canyon wall, yet to form.This gemstone resembled the geometric shape of an emerald, but was smoother and more roundish and it also had a very deep Indigo color, this gemstone was on the verge of becoming the physical third eye of a gem with a strange weapon, this gem was Azurite
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In the Kindergarten, where canyon walls are dotted with the imprints of gems who were "born" a very, very, long time ago, there was a gemstone embedded into the canyon wall that was yet form. This deep indigo colored gemstone resembled the geometric shape of an emerald but was smoother and took on a more roundish appearance. This gemstone was on the verge of becoming the physical third eye of a gem with an odd set of weapons. This gem was Azurite.
@Blizz I'm sorry, I don't like criticizing people's works but, at least in the casual section, I expect proper grammar and a decent structure of sentences. One thing to help you write better if you're going to remain in the casual section, write how you would talk and remember to use punctuation and capitalization where needed.
@Blizz IC. It's kind of a mess.
@Blizz Nvm, inside joke, kind of. But wow, that grammar though. Umm, do you think that you could fix up your post a bit with some capitalization and punctuation and perhaps keep it from being a run-on sentence.
@Blizz Just a moment, as soon as the gems enter the kindergarten, which should be the next post or two, then you can come in.
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