Loksfjoer

MFP #3: Wish (voting and feedback)

Welcome to the Voting and Feedback round for MFP#3!

Voting and Feedback guidelines

• Please take your time to read through all the entries before voting for your favourite work. The reasons you base your vote on are up to you, as long the vote isn’t based on whether or not you like the author.
  It would be nice if you could share why you voted for a specific work.
• Giving feedback is optional but highly encouraged. When giving feedback you should be respectful and constructive. It’s good to point out any flaws or the things you feel could be improved or why you didn't like something, but don’t be mean.
  Make sure to point out what you liked or what appreciated in the entry too.
• Contestant may (and are encouraged to) vote and/or give feedback for the other entries, but shouldn't vote for their own entry. If contestants wish to withhold a vote and only give feedback, that is good too.
• The entries are anonymous unless the writer asked for having their name added. That being said, writers may claim their work at any time during or after the voting period.
• The entry with the most votes will win, but in case of a tie a Contest Mod will cast the tie-breaker vote.
• You can vote for entries and post your feedback in this thread, but if you rather have your vote and/or feedback be anonymous you can PM it to @Calle.
• The voting period deadline is December 23th, 9:00 CET, which is 8:00 game time (both times are in a.m.).

---

The Entries

Sword Hunter

Pyro looked the scales of the snake,

Spectral were the eyes wishing for valor,

It layed in its lair, tongue primeval, breathing its cunning.

The wish x-tremed its soul,

It is always its girth, always its personality...

Reapt the wish as he slept with both eyes open, as sharp as a saber, as cunning as a hooded cape, the snake - the Polish Adder.

by @reaping Adder

(My Wish)

A wish, a simple thing but many people do them for various reasons.
Most wonder what people would wish for, or even myself for that matter as I hope it comes true but now as I fortell it.

A wish for things for me, from the bad things to good things. To have it stay for a long time, with the strength of a first kiss that everyone can remember in their mind and heart.

A wish from the heart, mind and soul. If it came true, it would refresh me and my vigor in vast ways. Question is, when?

The wishing well

I watched my coin as it fell into the bottomless black maw of the well. When I looked back up, she was waiting for me.

Why You Cannot Wish for Wishes

I realize now why genies don’t let you wish for more wishes. It is not because they fear the power you’d gain, no, it is because they fear how hollow you'd become.

For a man, having everything, strives for nothing.

Regret

I wish I had something better for this contest
Or had some insightful words I could say
But I've already submitted this entry
And so I'm filled with regret today

Fallen

From the chapel I briskly walked,
A block or two to sixth and main,
Done tending to my Sunday flock,
But cursed to endure the rain.

Heaven had a different plan,
To wash away their sins,
Forgiven is a mortal man,
Sweet mercy pelts my skin.

But the storm grew dark,
and turned into a gale,
I sought my own ark,
So the taxi I did hail.

Thus quickly did one appear.
He asked me "Where to sir?"
I said "Anywhere but here,"
he chuckled and concurred:

"Father so it's a flood?
Y'know that raises Hell?
Wasn't it paid in blood,
Or so the preachers tell?"

"My Son let judgment fall,
To the holy divine alone,
We simply serve the call,
and help sinners to atone."

"Forgive me for my heresy,
I've seen the sins of men,
And justice is hard to see,
When you're banished from Eden.

So I'll take you there first,
To taste of the bitter fruit,
And you too will be cursed,
Then we'll continue on our route.

I'll take you to a mountain peak,
So far above the wicked earth,
Every kingdom will hear you speak,
and keep sinning for all their worth.

For I've won you at the crossroads,
Here where we made ourselves a deal,
A final trip to Hell your soul is owed,
and you've got the Devil at the wheel!"

For the Devil knows your desires well,
Better the heavenly rain than fires of Hell.

Microfiction & Poetry Contest #3 - Prompt and disccussion

That's it for this contest. We have a total of 6 entries.

I will make the voting and feedback thread soon.

Edit: voting and feedback thread is up:
https://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/184350-mfp-3-wish-voting-and-feedback/ooc

Paranormal Activities [SporkoBug and Calle]

Mitch did not return the smile, nor did he give any indication he even cared for her gratitude. He opened some sterile packages and put them close to him. After putting on some sterile gloves he injected some local anaesthesia and glanced at the clock.
"I don't know any of them," he stated curtly as he looked at Dante, after which he shifted his gaze towards Benjamin and Mike. "Nor am I interested in breaking out demons from an official facility."
"But you could," Benjamin said.
"Given time to prepare, yes." Mitch poked the needle in the edge around the wound and when he saw Freya didn't respond he began sewing the wound. "I would be a lousy assassin if I couldn't get into places where my targets hide."

---

Lily looked at Rose and put a hand on her chest. "Ohh, she needs a moment to adjust. We'll come back to her later." She beckoned her assistant. "Let's see if the other two darlings are awake yet."

The first cage she reached was the one where Steph was. She only looked at the timer for a moment before she turned to Steph. "Hello darling. Out of professional curiosity: when were you going to feast on that handsome boy you bewitched. Benjamin, right? I read the file and I saw his picture. What a catch."

Microfiction & Poetry Contest #3 - Prompt and disccussion

Last 24 hours have begun!

Microfiction & Poetry Contest #3 - Prompt and disccussion

We have 5 entries and less than two days left before the deadline.

A Trainers Ambition [SporkoBug and Calle]

"Between you and me," Andy said as he glanced at Mitch. "I think he just gave up."
"That's not what he said," Benny reminded him.
"That's true," Andy said with a sideways glance to his Butterfree, "but that conversation was between us and I will keep it there." He looked from Frosiien to Nygari. "And Mitch isn't that much of a grump, he just takes his job seriously and I'm honestly grateful he does." He put an arm around Frosiien. "Because I love her."

"That's okay," Chifferi said. "I wouldn't want to miss Star Fall. It's nice to be up again and see everyone." He grinned when Penalopy almost shouted out her enthusiasm and slowly more people were gathering here. Slowly but surely everyone would arrive.
Most of them in human form, but that was okay. They were still themselves beneath that disguise.

Ilios waved at Niccia when he felt arms wrap around him and a kiss on his cheek. He turned around. "Ilias," he greeted his sister. "Did you come straight from Alto Mare?"
He had left earlier because a Corsola had requested aid and he had expected she would have arrived before him. Maybe he had travelled faster than he had thought.

"We are ready!" Penalopy replied to the Medicham, in human speech so all humans could understand her too. She wasn't aware it was only Mindy at this point who couldn't understand Pokémon speech. She floated to Gavin and Mindy. "You look almost as gorgeous as Niccia in that dress." She took her hand and pulled on it as she floated back. "And now I will introduce you to my sister. Anylia! Come meet my human friend!"

"Another human friend?" Tater chuckled. "You have a new human friend every time I see you."

Nobody Will Believe It [SporkoBug and Calle]

"I don't know how it happened," Benjamin said as he sat down on the bed next to Ari. "I was in my isolation cell, she came in and collapsed. Then she couldn't get out. We met Josh later and he didn't know how she had become human either. But they knew each other, from before. He called her princess and if she was a royal mage, they might be able to figure out how it happened. And if it can happen to other spirits."

He rubbed his temples. After the light-headedness came the headache. Just like had happened earlier that day. "I hate these pills," he muttered, rubbing his face. He turned off the light in the hopes it would lessen the pain.

Paranormal Activities [SporkoBug and Calle]

Yeah, he's not a good team-player.

We've got a name now. As background: she was born into the agency, her father is a scientist too. She is definitely attracted to the beasts with a female humanoid body and she's crazy. She will smile and say loving things and then jab a needle in them. I'd say she's chaotic evil.

Paranormal Activities [SporkoBug and Calle]

On the other side of the door was a tall, black-haired man with a briefcase in his hand. He only briefly looked at Duncan as he stepped forward. "Mike is here," he stated. It wasn't a question and he didn't wait for an invitation to come inside. "And he asked me to come."
He walked passed Duncan and went straight to the living room.

Benjamin took the notebook and nodded. "We'll do our best," he promised and he looked up when he heard footsteps. "You're fast."
"I was still in town," Mitch replied, his eyes settling on Freya. "The one who is injured?" he asked as he walked to her. "There is no hospital in the area that you can trust for delicate situations like this, but I can patch her up enough to keep her alive for now." He nodded with his head and Benjamin moved aside so Mitch could inspect the wound.

"We want to break into a guarded place filled with armed agents to rescue Steph, Gaia, and Freya's son," Mike said.

"You'll die if you attempt that alone," Mitch stated as he opened the briefcase and got some stitching material from it. "Freya, I won't remove the bullet because that will cause too much bleeding. I will just close the wound and then you can find a place for a proper surgery to remove it. Are you allergic to local anaesthesia?"

---

Rudrig received the message and let out a sigh in relief. Maybe Rose had changed, but she was still Rose and he didn't want her to die. He left the building with a backpack on his back and walked to a motorcycle. The orders were to abandon the base, he wasn't sure why Mr Johnson had given the order, but he must have evidence the safety of the location was compromised.

Stuart likewise packed his things. He was external and hadn't come with much, so he decided to help the agents who were putting the materials in the library in boxes. There was no code red, so the evacuation wasn't high priority.

Agents Morrison and Barrow stocked up on what they needed for the night; they had their few personal belongings already and only needed a base to provide them with weapons. Ethan was with them, likewise preparing for a night of hunting.
"Those beasts were taken away," Barrow told the others. "They're taking them to that place where we dropped off several vampires to test weapons on."
Morrison nodded; he knew where that was. Ethan didn't and he asked.
"We'll take you there once," Morrison promised. "Tonight we kill; we take no prisoners. There have been too many deaths in this city and we'll let them know we won't allow that."

---

Lily almost squealed in delight when she heard the spider-girl was on her way and she waited in the drop-off zone with the agent who had delivered the first two beasts.
The agent glared at the jab that he had lost her and hadn't successfully delivered her.
"Aren't you beautiful," Lily cooed as she eyed Rose. "We'll have so much fun." She gestured to some agents to pick her up.
"Be careful with her," she told them as the agents grabbed her and pulled her to the cage that was waiting for her.

Microfiction & Poetry Contest #3 - Prompt and disccussion

We're up to 4 entries.