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6 mos ago
Current Computer is back, yay. I can post again :)
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6 mos ago
Computer is getting some much needed maintenance. Will be slow posting for the next week or 2.
10 mos ago
Sorry for disappearing for 2 months. Life kinda went to shit and RPG was pushed to the back of my mind.
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2 yrs ago
Computer is broke AGAIN. Dog jumped on me when I had a glass of water in my hand, but some of it leaked in. Posts are going to be slow for the next week.
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3 yrs ago
Ok, when I said I had a new computer, what I didn't know was the software was broken, so I sent it back... And they sent me one with broken hardware... And Then Christmas happened. Oh well, i'm back!

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I would suggest writing it out on paper at the moment so it doesn't suffer from the quality of a phone, and then type it out on a computer should an extension be given.


@Retired Is there any chance that I might be able to get an extension to the August 18th timeslot, because I am without a computer right now and will probably be without it till Monday, but would REALLY like to throw a character sheet in this and would like to not be hampered by the fact that I had to write it out on a phone. Is there any way I could convince you to extend it to maybe Midnight on Tuesday?
@Ellri I just want to start this by saying, yes, I accept that this character is a bust and I doubt that there is anything that I can say or do that will get him accepted, but I would like some answers on what you mean by several of the critiques:

"He is not appropriately tied to the Jedi or Sith Orders." He is a Jedi... he's clearly a Jedi, he is constantly referred to as a Jedi, he has trained a large number of Jedi, I dont understand this critique at all.

"In addition, a lot of the elements making up the character appear to be slapped together out of convenience, rather than being parts of a single whole. It feels less like a single character than several partial characters stuck together out of desire for a variety of elements." Can I ask what the hell this is supposed to mean? Like, I'm all one for criticism, I can take someone telling me my character is bad and I should feel bad and to be honest, I understand the core of what this means and I assume you mean "Trying to make a character do too many things to try and cover all of the bases at once." (I'll admit to being guilty of doing this with other characters) but how the hell does it apply to Korrsh? "He is a Hutt Jedi who keeps skirting around the law and tiptoing on the edge of breaking it, because he understands that this is what you have to do to maintain order in this chaotic world and because of this, they wont give him the rank of Master as he is seen as too much of a liability, much to his chagrin." That is the core of character. Are you referring to the fact that he has Bounty Hunter allies that he works with? Does he come across as too much of "This guy is trying to make a Hutt Crimelord and a Jedi at the same time, pick one and stick to it?"

These two things stick out like a sore thumb. Im not trying to be difficult, but I am always striving to improve my writing techniques and I cant take criticism to heart and embrace it, if I dont understand the critisism. Can you explain in a little more detail what you dont like so I can avoid it with my next character? Like, your saying "It feels like your trying to make multiple characters in one" could you tell me what you think the other characters are and what you might suggest taking out to improve that?

All I'm asking for is a little more feedback, please.
Sorry, but my computer is taking a little longer to repair than they thought. It'll be repaired either tomorrow or Monday. So Sunday is the earliest I can get an IC up, maybe Tuesday, otherwise.
My computer is dead. I'm not going to be able to post until thursday, maybe Friday.
Alright, I was working on my CS, but my computer is dead and it'll take a few days before its repaired. Once I have my computer back, I'll make an IC.
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