Oh, wow. I am assumed to use these two custom sprites you two, then? Hahaha. Alright, then.
And completely other random news, since we now have a female faithful, here's a female faithful sprite, made by combining the female civilian sprite with a staff.
@DAWNSTAR Yepp, that checks out nicely. Teh-heh, compare you guys to Morag who I intended to be the first boss. That guy is going to get ------ed. Thanks for joining~ Now, then. I do feel I need to ask, where do you intend to start in all of this? Anyways, Narina is accepted~
@Eklispe Oh, wow. Taking the long route, I see. Tihi. Well, that is entirely fine. ... Being a vegetarian in fantasy middle-ages times... I wonder how that works out? Alright, shall I assume that she got that job in the end of the sheet? So she'll probably be in the throne room when we start, then, or did you have something else in mind? In any case, Arathyra is accepted~
Giving the Fire Emblem to the prince of Renais does work. Maybe he even could slip by Jehanna's troops without trouble. That would explain why the more easily identifiable people from Grado were not allowed to join him.
In any case, I'll send a PM to the last guy asking how it is going~
@Apollosarcher You seem to have missed the g in Reginleif. Other than that, Marwood is accepted~!
... Alright, uh. ... Heh. How do I say this... I wonder if anyone of the remaining is going to create someone developed to accept the Fire Emblem? ... Just wondering. ... Heh, Griswal or Kalte COULD qualify, but at the same time, they both feel... Heh...
@Apollosarcher Reginleif. ... Honestly, you could probably have that particular lance unless you feel like designing your own, Ephraim isn't here to lay claim to it. XD ... Ooooh. That certainly works. Yupp. Go for it alone, then, lonely brave prince of Renais! ... This reminds me a lot of what Ephraim did, kind of. XD
Hm. Yeah, that could work. I can imagine that Sion would do that. Would you like me to type anything specific about the visit or are you on top of that?
Teh-heh. Of course he thinks that. Haha.
Edit: If you saw the wrong nation for a moment, you didn't see anything.
@Apollosarcher Yepp, quite the prince we have here. Teh-heh. I am happy to see the information I have provided appears to have come to use. Nicely developed, too. ... Youngest child, eh? Hahaha...
... Oh, my. Three cavaliers? Then I need to ask, did he leave these behind? It sounds like it because of how you wrote it, but I need to make sure. Loyal friends would accompany their leader, because noble things. Except... yeah, that'd make too many characters early in the game. XD ... ... ... Those three names, Hodge, Ismay and Mylle... Did you intend any particular genders for those names? I honestly can't tell, except for the first one. Is that up to me? XD
Feel free to ask anything you desire of me when it comes to that visit to Jehanna. If you went too far in with a military force, you'd probably encounter Eira's Storm Guild eventually, don't know what more I'd state. She's in charge of security, after all. Or do you want me to show you locals for you to have met? XD
I'll randomly remind that Renais' reason for not acting is their military inferiority compared to Jehanna. They'd simply be cut apart by Sion's forces, just like Grado's are currently. But of course, Marwood doesn't look like a dude that cares much about that~ You are correct about the historical closeness of Grado and Renais, even if I didn't actually mention it in the opening post. Hm. Should I have? Oh, well. Haha.
So everything checks out... Except I am NOT comfortable giving you a Brave Lance to start with! It is one of the best weapons in the game, and... yeah. ... If you want something brilliant, you could have a unique weapon, simply due to the fact that you're a Renais prince. Either that, you pick a less impressive lance, or you can argue for why you think you deserve a Brave Lance. You already have C-rank fighting, which is already stronger than I initially intended you guys to start with (but since people all around picked it, I figured I'd let it slide, haha).
Edit: ... D-Rank with Lances is not enough to fight with a Brave Lance. Is this intentional?
The lyrics are pretty nice, and I must say you do have the capability to sing pretty well. Still, I was somewhat disrupted when the absolutely first word of the entry is a grammatical error (should be you’re). I will say that it does sound nice, and I wouldn’t doubt that these could be real lyrics. Though, yeah, I am not stunned to the point of awe due to that. My apologies.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaah- *kadunk* … There were only two ways that entry could have ended, and regardless of your choice you built it up rather masterfully. I’d like to congratulate you on an entry well done. You pulled me away from my boredom and made me invested into the entry. I will consider it for my vote when I get there. Though, I must honestly say I don’t see the connection to the song. It feels like the song would have been sung AFTER the entry took place, which feels odd and I don’t know if this is supposed to be the case. Oh, well, it was only supposed to be inspiration, after all. Oh, well.
Ah, I get it. The song is his answer to her question. She has absolutely nothing to fear. What a wonderfully little happy entry to come immediately after that downer-one. There are so many beautiful little emotions about this piece, I am going to congratulate you for a work well done. I am now smiling a little silly smile. It does feel a little wordily inferior, but perhaps that was the best way to do this entry. Oh, dear, I’m conflicted. Eh, I got 25 more entries to read, I’ll probably find something. XD
… I wonder if this is completely filled to the brim in poetic justice with literal techniques that makes this a little masterpiece not seen in 100 years. I wouldn’t know. All that I know is that I am kind of indifferent to it, and I can’t listen to that song (not because of the video being unwatchable, but because of that voice) so I looked up the lyrics instead. Yeah, there’s an inspiration. Well. I’m still indifferent. I can’t give it criticism, because I don’t see anything wrong with it, yet I can’t even praise it because I’m unsure if I understand it. … Suppose it is the perfect entry, then? XD
… Oh, wow, what… What the heck…!? Y-you’re making it so that he’s… singing to the drug…!? … Actually, is he!? I… I don’t know… I just know this entry is making me feel disgusted… Which actually might mean that this entry is pulled off perfectly, and a masterpiece causing exactly the reaction it was made to trigger. Geesh. … Hope you’re happy. I didn’t see any errors, so… Agh… Haha… Just know the reaction you caused in me…
Oh, is this a checker-pattern? They seem to go depressing-heartlifting-depressing-heartlifting. You playing with our emotions, here, mdk? Or perhaps that was just intelligent? Haha. In any case, I am impressed at how you could turn it into a little love-story with relatively few changes to the lyrics. The writing is pretty nice, too, so it has all that going for it. It made me smile. Thanks for that.
… HAH! … Alright. That’s a message I can agree to. And I can truly see the appalled expression of the ignorant individual that the person in question is singing to. Quite the sight, really. The lyrics work just fine, nicely done. … Yupp, I believe that is all I can say about it.
… Ah. That song. Need to listen no more. XD … Alright. So, I wasn’t entirely impressed with this entry. It didn’t really have a beginning, the thing about the military was just somewhat depressing, the cute little girl didn’t get to continue with the telescope… Yeah, a little girl interested in constellations is a cute thing, and then it was suddenly interrupted. Hm. Maybe that’s the message. Eh, due to the lack of happening I wasn’t particularly touched by this piece. Eh, no worries. You can write, after all.
Well. It is rather pretty. A little verse from the subject of the song. … It is pretty. … … … … … Yeah.
You set up a rather interesting scenario, however, really. Even if that is what happens in the song, it was a really anti-climatic ending to the piece. I could see it coming from a mile away, and the atmosphere of the song didn’t match the atmosphere here at all, and I am really confused to what I should be thinking about this piece. … Eh. I wasn’t impressed, I guess is what I’m trying to say. I’ve read this depressing piece before. Seeing everything from the perspective of the sadistic guy who says there’s no choice but to play cops and robbers, that ‘Simon says you think better with a hole in your head!’ would have been more interesting. Well, it was your choice and it still read well, but I’m not impressed. Good writing, though. Feel free to try again.
… Nice. Frickin’ nice. I had trouble getting into this piece, because I thought that I could see where it was going. Depressing pieces are always so… dreary. I was just thinking of how I could praise your writing while still saying it isn’t for me, but that ending… Nice. Turned everything on its head, and brought a little shining glimmer of hope with a well pulled-off little twist. Thank you, I needed that. Well done. You’ve left an impression. Haha. … CAN I SINCERELY NOT FIND THE LYRICS TO THIS THING ANYWHERE ON THE INTERNET!? … NOPE! GUESS NOBODY IN THE WORLD KNOWS WHAT SHE’S SINGING! XD
… Heh. This entry made me smirk. Nicely done. Pretty inspirational song you chose, there, and put an amusing little twist on the contents. The speech did sound a little odd, mostly because you blended in the lyrics into the text, but I see what you were doing so it’s fine. Pretty creative. … Really, that is all I have to say. I’m not sure I’d consider it for vote, others affected me more, but I like it. That’s about it.
… The plot is predictable and archetypical, the lyrics of the song blended into the text half-hazardly at best even if the inspiration is obvious, the message and the ending is oddly delivered in shaking parts that is difficult to tell if it is meant to be a message at all… But I love it. The feeling of a typical adventure followed with an dramatic song and odd supernatural powers and the like… I love it. I probably won’t vote for this entry, but do know that you made me smile widely and that I love this piece. Thank you very much for writing it. Teh-heh.
Wow. The title is almost longer than the entry. … … … Geesh. Way to turn an inspirational tune depressing. Oh, well. Well done, I guess. I mean, I don’t see anything wrong with it, though I don’t really see anything unimaginably impressive either. Hahaha.
… You dare mix anything of Mozart’s with drugs!? … XD … Gosh. What a crooked mix. That happy, brilliant, may I say royal-sounding tune mixed with this twisted intention for it… Allow me to applaud you for making me enjoy the twisted nature of this. That’s some imagination and twisted abuse of what is well known. I mean, had it just been Mozart, then I’d just smile and listen. Had it just been this entry I would have sighed and moved on. In combination… such a twisted world… Gosh. Well done. Well done, man. Yikes.
… Hah. You sure THAT’S what the song was referring to? Or is that just your own little take on it? Geesh. That was depressing. And yet I am smiling at the stupid song. Geesh. Oh, well. I guess I will praise the atmosphere, I know you got that one down pretty well. I didn’t understand most of the third part, but I did understand the end to it, and that’s just eh. I’ve read it a hundred times before. That’s the bad part about having been a Roleplayer Guild writing contest veteran, I guess. Still, nice job with the atmosphere. … Hah…
Thank you for writing this. I have no idea how much time or effort it took to write this, really. I’m unsure if you used some techniques for matching syllables or something… Eh… In any case. … The contents didn’t impress me, though. I wonder if I should study what’s impressive about these things. Maybe then I could give more fair reviews.
… Heh. It is a story I have heard before… But something about your story-telling is just enticing, Somehow, it was interesting. I don’t exactly get what he did, but I do understand the results of it. The ending wasn’t anything special, just another step on his journey, but the story itself was fascinating, somehow. Underdogs destroying those who thinks themselves in command is always nice. The lines to the inspiration are clear and so… Nicely done.
… Reading the entry before listening to the song was the correct choice. It was, like, a perfect build-up. First it was only small-talk, getting to know both the characters. They it was encouraging the other person, saying that the other person had helped so much. … And then, as it developed it became apparent that something had happened. To the writer, no less. It isn’t immediately obvious what. And then, just exactly as I started to realize… the PS confirmed what otherwise would have confused me. Masterfully done. An amazing experience, that would have been entirely spoiled had I listened to the song first. What a genius thing to make from nothing but this absurdly sub-par song (I apologize if you think differently). Allow me to tip my hat and congratulate you for this feat. You may just have snared my vote. This text got to be the best thing that has ever happened to that song. Even the slight grammatical errors or mistakes in the writing can be explained by that it is an actual person writing this. Perfect. Just… just perfect. Well done.
I like the song. I like the story you’ve written of it, it makes sense, and honestly, the song left things unsaid and this was a pretty good way of doing it justice. And yet… … … That’s not an ending… … … I’m… slightly disappointed, since I liked what was… Oh, well…
Nice title. … Oh, wow. Game soundtrack? … Ooooh, I see what you did there. Alright. … Indeed. There are few times an amount of words that vaguely make out a scene can be so epic. It is an impressive experience, indeed. … Not sure I can give it a vote for writing masterpiece things, though. XD
I would never have done something with that particular song. Particularly not something about supernatural spirits challenging random mortals to a game in order to free a wish-granting woman, or whatever she was. … It was entertaining. Thanks for that. Pretty nicely written, and an amusing twist on it. Good one. That’s all I can say. Haha.
… Yikes. … Poor girl. … … … … … … … … … Well. Suppose the story did what it was meant to do. Well done on that point. It didn’t feel particularly spectacular, though, so I don’t have so much more to say on that. Just… poor girl. And guess that if the lottery ticket was only seven dollars win, I guess he left her for some different wicked reason. … Instant karma.
… Right. Uh. Someone will need to explain this one to me, because I don’t understand. So… he was in a simulation, I guess. But… wasn’t he still 24 hours away from the “This job wasn’t worth it” line? … Is there a reason he’s saying “Job” with a capital letter? I mean, I’m trying to see past that the entry is riddled with such smaller errors but it is kind of difficult. … Um. Oh, well. Do feel free to try to make me say something else next time, if you want to. It isn’t as if I like writing reviews like this one…
It feels like this entry kind of got a little bit… dirty at one / two times, but eh. It was nicely written, and you started to care for the rather amusing main character… … … Meh. That twist didn’t do it for me. It didn’t in any way make it a better story for me. That was just… Bleh. I don’t know if Vivian or El Cero are established characters in that world, maybe El Cero shows up later as a villain and has a reputation from “He killed the famed Searing Salamander after being trained by her” or so, so you thought of writing the circumstances or something, but… Eh, no. I don’t feel like writing more on this entry. Suppose you can consider this a success, because I got upset. Mempah.
… Reminds me of that one entry which I had that ended pretty much the same way, but I at least had built up the atmosphere… mdk, did you ever give me that review? I’m trying to recall… XD
Well written, I can say that much. It might be my own exhaustion at this point, but my attention wandered during the long paragraphs in the beginning and I had to ask myself if I had read a part or not, having failed to get excited or anything like that. But… let me hug you. Thank you… so very much… for having a heart-warming ending. Thank you. Thank you so very much. Let me hug you. Auuuwh. Sob.
… That was a story that I think was probably better told in the video, but kudus for doing it anyway. The quality Is pretty good, though, the story isn’t particularly amazing, and the fact that the video of the song told the same story, a picture tells a thousand words, made it feel like there was rather little that you had actually filled in. Yeah, there is little here that stands out. But, as I said, you do have the ability to write. So, yeah.
… Oh, holy crap. Here we go.
… I have been through a lot of World War II stories. I have seen stories of all three of these routes. I have seen the stories following captives sent to camps, both tragedies and those with… “happy” endings. I have seen the stories about both German and Allied soldiers, which often are tragedies when about German soldiers and bittersweet victories when about Allies. And also, I have seen stories about the commands of both sides… but never ever before, have I seen a representation of World War II using… anything else. Like, aliens and humans in a Sci-Fi world. I must praise you for putting a twist on that which I have never seen before.
I must also praise you for the amount of work you have put into this. Reading the author’s note and all of that… You’ve put a lot of thought and work into this. Looking at it like this… it really does feel like this is somewhat of a different league than the other entries. I mean, this story could have made a pretty interesting movie. Or book-series. Anything, really. … And I really love winged beings, winged girls is among the most awe-inspiring and beautiful and magnificent idea that has ever appeared on this planet, so seeing such beings being treated like that causes pain to a very personal part of my heart. The ending was… exactly what one would expect it to be, but it was an experience nonetheless. Hm. Now I really wonder what I should do with this vote of mine.
In any case. A job really well done.
… Oh. It’s a piece fully inspired by the music… and I see how this stage was set up by the title of the song. I like it. Her freeing herself to this dark tunes and destroying her captors was a very satisfying experience. A little madness is wonderful, is it not? Still, the piece lacks a proper ending and isn’t so marvelous as to compete with some of the rest. But it was a nice experience. Thank you.
… *sigh* A thoroughly depressing story, inspired by a depressing song. The constant switches to first-person was confusing, but I did get used to them eventually. It is written by someone who has the skill to create pleasing texts, but yeah, I don’t find this particularly pleasing. There was no explanation to the tragedies, of why she had to die or why the village was attacked. It was all for the sake of tragedy. Well, if that’s what you want to write… *shrugs*
... GASPS! ... I apologize to anyone I may have discouraged / depressed / infuriated / offended with my writing my opinion of the text. Gasp. Alright, now I'll go do something else.
@71342 Trainees only need the level to promote, Guiding Rings is for the next step. ... Heh, Mages can't use staffs, that's for when they promote again.
Oh, and I am fine with most spelling-complications, but "Caer Paelyn" should be "Caer Pelyn". XD
@Apollosarcher Oho? Prince? I'll look forward to it, then~
@71342 Oy. You're still supposed to to post it in the OOC so the others can read. XD In any case, here you go. Here's what I wrote.
Oh, dear. I forgot about that thing when I wrote 1-10 on trainee classes. See, after the battle where the trainee-class reaches level 10, they automatically promote to the regular class of their choice. So, uh, you’d probably have to either decrease your level a bit or instantly promote upon ending the first map. Also, when a pupil or other trainee with more than one weapon alternative promote, they lose the capability of using the other kind. Seeing how you have C in Anima (woaw), I’ll assume you’re intending on going the Mage route, you’ll lose the ability to use Dark magic when you inevitably do.
That said, you still being a Pupil and having C-rank skill in Anima is pretty odd. The trainee-class pupil is mostly for young people that haven’t yet achieved the skill and prowess to become a true magician ready for the field of battle. You’re a well-practiced magician who’s grown strong over almost 30 years and has become more skilled than most common (regular-class) magicians of the world, who’re stuck at D. That description and still being a pupil-class is pretty odd, and having C-class while technically being level -1 is pretty weird too. So, well. Do tell me how you’re thinking with this, now that I’ve said these things. Well, I’ll probably allow it, anyways, but it is odd.
… Also, the lowest Dark magic, Flux, by some reason requires D-rank to use… … … Eh, you know what? That’s stupid. For the sake of this roleplay, Flux can be used by anyone with capability of using Dark magic. Because, yeah, it is stupid otherwise, not being able to wield any weapon.
“...Save the occasional tantrums of dragons, of course.” – Oh, you have no idea… Or, I guess you do… XD
Oh, my. Seems like Dana has had a different side to her… or she’s just been mad at you a lot. Haha. She’s very strict about everyone doing their job… And may or may not have used dark magic to keep track of your location… Haha… Within a certain range, anyway… … … Alright, then. Yepp. Assuming you find someone to be that friend of yours, the background checks out. Should the worst come to pass, I could have it be an NPC that I have join you, but your intention of finding a player to be that one is more fun, really. … … … Huh. Who’d actually fit that description? … Eh, I’ll let them stand for that.
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