Leaves@Stekkmen
So here's the thing. This CS has a lot of issues and listing them all would take too much time and energy, but here are some of the highlights. There's a lot of spelling and grammatical errors. That's not very pleasant to look at, especially for a grammar Nazi such as myself. As a whole it's lacking flow, lacking a lot of descriptions, and flavor in general. It all comes off as segmented and bland, nothing stands out. You say she completed her education, but what kind of education? From where? How did her name get so big that all these big names wanted her to be part of them? How'd they reach out to her? She invented a bunch of weapons in the arsenal? What did she invent? You only listed 2 weapons that she has but apparently she invented "quite a few." These is only a small sample of what needs to be improved but as it stands I could never let this character sheet go through. Sorry man, try again.
