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@ChaoticFox Sounds good.

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@DeprivedOfWords The problem I'm having here is Felicity is too "well-rounded", and that doesn't make her interesting. a rough-and-tough protester girl, who I would expect to be armed like she is, but you turn around and give her cooking, thieving, and charisma... and.. somehow, excellent vision despite missing an eye? It feels like you just picked the best traits you could. Despite being a heavily armed bruiser with a high pain tolerance, and "use to barreling through people who don't give her enough space" she's also very quick and agile?

I'm sorry but I this isn't the kind of place for "Action Heroes".

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@Yunagi Not long winded at all. I enjoyed reading it myself, I wonder who her "benefactor" is. *taps chin* hhmm.

@Caits No worries, just clean it up and I'll take a look at it again.

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@Caits inventory needs alitt organizing (use mine for reference) and I would like a little more detail on how she came to be an expert at hand-to-hand, and a profcient marksman while balancing school and a life.

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@Caits No sweat, that's fine.

• NPC Template + Example has been added

Taking a break: Be back soon.

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My character's bio is up.

More information between the year she was released up to the apocalypse to come soon. 5 pages is enough for today, other things to do ^_^

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@Symphoni For those like in Candi's case. It's basically just me offering to help analyze posts and provide tips on how to improve your writing. From what I see though you seem quite capable yourself, and I'm no all-star writer. Some people feel inadequate next to some of the posts some people make.

Honestly, it's just me trying to be helpful =)

The only reason I asked is because you talked about the offer I extended to Candi, IE: The me trying to be helpful at improving capabilities and writing.

However, I see you are talking about the consideration to join this roleplay, so, absolutely. We don't have a full roster yet.

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@Symphoni Absolutely. To clarify, are you here just to roleplay, or are you asking for a mentorship?

Let it be known I've never claimed to be the best at anything, but I will try. =)

[Edit: Also, thank you for the compliment! ^_^ I try to be chill and helpful. I'm absorbed in writing my character's tragic biography atm.]

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No worries.

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@Caits I am. and I will be around for awhile.