@Thinslayer
So.. I've been preparing my short post.
Would you mind if i tried to disown you of the content of that envelope? ;)
Also, do you mind if i skip some bits of time to get Ravadon dressed?
Sure. Have at it! Let's see where this story goes.
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Sure. Have at it! Let's see where this story goes.
@StormHeart
I'm gonna guess you're a little new to roleplaying, because there's a lot of power-playing (controlling someone else's character) going on here. A lot of players, myself included, are very protective of their characters, and attempting to control them for any reason doesn't usually go over well.
I understand the problem, though. The temptation to power-play, I think, stems from two problems: you want to write more, and you want it to be interesting. I often encountered this issue when I was first starting out with RP. How do I write an engaging story post the people will want to read that uses only my character?
The answer is easier than you might think. First off, half the fun of roleplaying is watching others react to your post. You can make your post considerably more fun to read if you capitalize on that.
Rewrite or reinterpret the previous post in your own words.
I'll write up an example:
"Work faster, you stupid elf" Gurk bellowed. When Kiera got distracted watching the silver-haired girl, Gurk got mad. "What are you gawking at? Want to trade places with her?"
That's 3 sentences right there. And if you try to assess Gurk's thoughts and motives, you could make it even bigger:
"Work faster, you stupid elf!" Gurk bellowed. He seemed angry at her sluggishness. Why should he be? He was getting work for free! Or maybe that was precisely why he got mad - it's all too easy to take free work for granted. "What are you gawking at?" he spat. "Want to trade places with her?"
Now it looks even bigger. But you know what would really make this part amazing? Kiera's reactions.
Discuss your character's thoughts, feelings, and reactions to the previous post.
Let's try it.
"Work faster, you stupid elf!" Gurk bellowed. He seemed angry at her sluggishness. On the one hand, he had no reason to be, since he was getting free work, but by the same token, it's all too easy to take free work for granted. Kiera had to stop herself from snorting. Far from achieving its desired effect, his shouting only served to amuse her as she watched him squirm. She stole a glance at the silver-haired girl; the poor woman was struggling to keep a brave face in the midst of teasing and sexual harassment. "What are you gawking at?" Gurk spat, wresting Kiera's attention back to the tremendous halfling. "Want to trade places with her?"
Look at that. It's a full paragraph, and we haven't even gotten to Kiera's actions yet! Just rewriting and reinterpreting the previous post and inserting your character's thoughts and reactions makes an intriguing write-up all on its own. But we're only halfway done. When writing up Kiera's response, you'll want to take into account the following elements: Kiera's motives, thoughts, actions, and words.
When creating a response, write the motives and thoughts accompanying your character's actions and words.
Weave them together. Let's try it.
"Work faster, you stupid elf!" Gurk bellowed. He seemed angry at her sluggishness. On the one hand, he had no reason to be, since he was getting free work, but by the same token, it's all too easy to take free work for granted. Kiera had to stop herself from snorting. Far from achieving its desired effect, his shouting only served to amuse her as she watched him squirm. She stole a glance at the silver-haired girl; the poor woman was struggling to keep a brave face in the midst of teasing and sexual harassment. "What are you gawking at?" Gurk spat, wresting Kiera's attention back to the tremendous halfling. "Want to trade places with her?"
Kiera snorted. "Oh, heck no! I mean, heck no, Master. I'm working as fast as I dare, unless you want to become fried hobbit. If you make me trade places with her..." She chewed her lip. She had to think of something to say that would help the girl but didn't agree to trading places. "...I might kill your men in their sleep, just like that girl is doubtless fixing to do."
And we didn't even have to take control of the silver-haired girl, or even the minions, to write up this post.
So when rewriting your post, remember the following guidelines:
Rewrite or reinterpret the previous post in your own words.
Discuss your character's thoughts, feelings, and reactions to the previous post.
When creating a response, write the motives and thoughts accompanying your character's actions and words.
You can do this! ;)
I'm gonna guess you're a little new to roleplaying, because there's a lot of power-playing (controlling someone else's character) going on here. A lot of players, myself included, are very protective of their characters, and attempting to control them for any reason doesn't usually go over well.
I understand the problem, though. The temptation to power-play, I think, stems from two problems: you want to write more, and you want it to be interesting. I often encountered this issue when I was first starting out with RP. How do I write an engaging story post the people will want to read that uses only my character?
The answer is easier than you might think. First off, half the fun of roleplaying is watching others react to your post. You can make your post considerably more fun to read if you capitalize on that.
Rewrite or reinterpret the previous post in your own words.
I'll write up an example:
"Work faster, you stupid elf" Gurk bellowed. When Kiera got distracted watching the silver-haired girl, Gurk got mad. "What are you gawking at? Want to trade places with her?"
That's 3 sentences right there. And if you try to assess Gurk's thoughts and motives, you could make it even bigger:
"Work faster, you stupid elf!" Gurk bellowed. He seemed angry at her sluggishness. Why should he be? He was getting work for free! Or maybe that was precisely why he got mad - it's all too easy to take free work for granted. "What are you gawking at?" he spat. "Want to trade places with her?"
Now it looks even bigger. But you know what would really make this part amazing? Kiera's reactions.
Discuss your character's thoughts, feelings, and reactions to the previous post.
Let's try it.
"Work faster, you stupid elf!" Gurk bellowed. He seemed angry at her sluggishness. On the one hand, he had no reason to be, since he was getting free work, but by the same token, it's all too easy to take free work for granted. Kiera had to stop herself from snorting. Far from achieving its desired effect, his shouting only served to amuse her as she watched him squirm. She stole a glance at the silver-haired girl; the poor woman was struggling to keep a brave face in the midst of teasing and sexual harassment. "What are you gawking at?" Gurk spat, wresting Kiera's attention back to the tremendous halfling. "Want to trade places with her?"
Look at that. It's a full paragraph, and we haven't even gotten to Kiera's actions yet! Just rewriting and reinterpreting the previous post and inserting your character's thoughts and reactions makes an intriguing write-up all on its own. But we're only halfway done. When writing up Kiera's response, you'll want to take into account the following elements: Kiera's motives, thoughts, actions, and words.
When creating a response, write the motives and thoughts accompanying your character's actions and words.
Weave them together. Let's try it.
"Work faster, you stupid elf!" Gurk bellowed. He seemed angry at her sluggishness. On the one hand, he had no reason to be, since he was getting free work, but by the same token, it's all too easy to take free work for granted. Kiera had to stop herself from snorting. Far from achieving its desired effect, his shouting only served to amuse her as she watched him squirm. She stole a glance at the silver-haired girl; the poor woman was struggling to keep a brave face in the midst of teasing and sexual harassment. "What are you gawking at?" Gurk spat, wresting Kiera's attention back to the tremendous halfling. "Want to trade places with her?"
Kiera snorted. "Oh, heck no! I mean, heck no, Master. I'm working as fast as I dare, unless you want to become fried hobbit. If you make me trade places with her..." She chewed her lip. She had to think of something to say that would help the girl but didn't agree to trading places. "...I might kill your men in their sleep, just like that girl is doubtless fixing to do."
And we didn't even have to take control of the silver-haired girl, or even the minions, to write up this post.
So when rewriting your post, remember the following guidelines:
Rewrite or reinterpret the previous post in your own words.
Discuss your character's thoughts, feelings, and reactions to the previous post.
When creating a response, write the motives and thoughts accompanying your character's actions and words.
You can do this! ;)
@ineffable
I've been thinking. If you like, you can go ahead and get started without me introducing you, since you're co-GM. You can make NPCs as needed, too. I could use your help with Ravadon's arc, anyway.
I've been thinking. If you like, you can go ahead and get started without me introducing you, since you're co-GM. You can make NPCs as needed, too. I could use your help with Ravadon's arc, anyway.
Hmm, the slave ship arc looks like a lot of fun. I should tie in the Princess's and Ravadon's arcs into it somehow.
Plus, the king's letter needs to reach everyone.
Post soon, somebody? :3
Plus, the king's letter needs to reach everyone.
Post soon, somebody? :3
@Thinslayer
Ravadon remembered the smells of ash far to well. The ember lights made him rub his eyes. "Hey, what's all this ungloriousness doing near me?" he thought to himself.
"Oh.." His mind felt a little light, though his eyesight needed some firm calibration before he could determine what exactly was going on.
The boys voice felt familiar. Like an older brother Ravadon once had. The cold, wet feeling on most of his body was welcomed by the heated air. Moving made snapping noises for all but his right forearm. A numbness in his lips and tongue. "Hmm.. must have been a while since i ate.." he thought. The taste of a sour banana with pepper scorched upon his tongue.
He yawned, rubbing his eyes.
He sat up, noticing an eye-patch, a cup and the etheral glow on his hand as he stretched forward to a better taste.
The aroma gave him the impression he was offered coffee. His first sip was swift and washed out most of the filthy aftertaste he'd been having for a few days now.
"Elf? Haha, no! No, friend! She obviously fell for my glorious charm. I had her with but one glance, but a thousand she'll return to me in thanks for being found!
So tell me your little name, Patch-eyes, so she might kiss me on your behalf. Which is a glory in itself, mind you."
He coughed up some slime. It was a thick clog in his mouth.
"Ah, it seems this humble small bit of coffee will not do to strengthen my resolve. "
He spit the mouthly mixture on the floor, tried to brush off the lightheadedness and get on his feet.
"The lowly tavern my glory stayed in was donating large sums of wealth to recieve my even more courageous performance. Not worthy of my time, of course, but i'm a gloriously, praiseworthy, humble man of the people... "
He halted, realised he was not wearing anything and to most, would seemingly awaited the response of 'Patch-eyes'.
Though his thoughts might indicate his embarrassment.
Ravadon took one sip of the coffee and broke into loud boasting. "Elf? Ha ha, no! No, friend, she obviously fell for my glorious charm. I had her with but one glance, but a thousand she'll return to me in thanks for being found! So tell me your little name, Patch-Eyes, so she might kiss me on your behalf (which is a glory in itself, mind you)."
The boy smirked at the thought of the elflike woman kissing Ravadon. It seemed beneath her. "I would say there is no harm in asking, but..." He coughed so as not to finish that sentence. "My name is Druth Vanarys. You may call me Van, or Patch if you like. I will abide by your decision. Just do not call me 'little,' or I will pry the flesh from your skin with holy fire."
Then he extended a hand.
"Nice to meet you."
He subtly shifted the envelope out of sight.
Due to reasons I'd rather not go into I'm afraid you will have to go on without me. Sorry about that. I wish you all a good RP.
Thank you for letting me know. Best of luck to you!
@StormHeart The Healer's Apprentice
"Work faster, you stupid elf!"
How did Kiera Akello get herself into this? One minute, she was meditating on spirit binding theory, minding her own business, and the next minute, she was press-ganged into slavery on a luxury yacht with a misfit gang of orcs, dwarves, and elves. The rich tycoon they served was a particularly obnoxious halfling, whose great girth was sustained by a constant influx of beef, cake, and pain.
Kiera had the unenviable job of being the heal-monkey. Some people could get high off being healed, and for a glutton like His Royalness Lord Gurk, eating as much as he wanted and being healed of nausea and stomach pain was his greatest delight. People like him made a mockery of the noble profession.
In a nearby corner, a group of Gurk's minions entertained themselves by teasing a young human woman. Though they yanked her silver hair, dumped out her bucket of cleaning water, and grabbed at her butt, she put on a brave face and refused to give them the reaction they wanted.
A spray of spittle and chewed chicken bits regained Kiera's attention. "What are you gawking at? Want to trade places with her?"
"Work faster, you stupid elf!"
How did Kiera Akello get herself into this? One minute, she was meditating on spirit binding theory, minding her own business, and the next minute, she was press-ganged into slavery on a luxury yacht with a misfit gang of orcs, dwarves, and elves. The rich tycoon they served was a particularly obnoxious halfling, whose great girth was sustained by a constant influx of beef, cake, and pain.
Kiera had the unenviable job of being the heal-monkey. Some people could get high off being healed, and for a glutton like His Royalness Lord Gurk, eating as much as he wanted and being healed of nausea and stomach pain was his greatest delight. People like him made a mockery of the noble profession.
In a nearby corner, a group of Gurk's minions entertained themselves by teasing a young human woman. Though they yanked her silver hair, dumped out her bucket of cleaning water, and grabbed at her butt, she put on a brave face and refused to give them the reaction they wanted.
A spray of spittle and chewed chicken bits regained Kiera's attention. "What are you gawking at? Want to trade places with her?"
Should i have him ask about the letter, read and sing about it as he strolls through town into every bar, tavern, cave and as he walks past the beach, so people have a chance to pick up on what's going on?
Like a moving billboard on a tour with too many compliments to himself about how great he is doing. xD
@Thinslayer
He should probably ask about it before anything else. Maybe have him sing about the letter afterwards so the patch boy can chew him out for it. xD
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So... Should i meta-game to be more direct and obvious? ;)
Not sure I follow.
@Thinslayer
Weren't you supposed to write up an introduction for me? I've been waiting for it? :)
Yup! Our patch-eyed boy is holding a letter addressed to Lady Isabella Stonebridge. Your intro comes soon. ;-)
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