Thinslayer

The Faraway Land: Knights vs Dragons (CLOSED)

I should probably clarify for everyone that the dragon attack from the intro did not happen in Southaven, but in Brixton, a city further up north.

The Faraway Land: Knights vs Dragons (CLOSED)

Extra Lore: Guntag, the Dwarven Architect

The legend that dwarves are master craftsmen is mostly a bunch of bunk; that honor goes to the elves. It's Guntag (pronounced goon'-tog), an architect, whose masterful dungeons and elaborate temples single-handedly spawned that legend. The Ancient weapons left behind in the Apocalypse War were deemed too powerful to leave out in the open, so the Four Kings paid him to create secret dungeons for them in the four corners of the continent. They took the locations of these dungeons with them to their graves.

While there are a few people who possess clues to the locations of one or two, only one person alive in the whole world knows where all of the dungeons are.

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Extra Lore: Halflings

These creatures are dwarves with a certain set of genes that eliminate facial hair. While some stories consider them a different race (and the dwarves would agree), they are definitely one and the same. Like most dwarves, they prefer living underground, but unlike most dwarves, they favor dirt and tree dwellings over rock and stone. They tend to live on the Riftgard frontier where security is lax, so they are often at great risk of getting raided and pillaged. Thus, they tend to fear outsiders and hide as much as possible from them.

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On the other hand you may now introduce the doctor for everyone in the council chambers.

@Rhiven Knight

I think I'll do that. In the meantime, while we wait for the others to post, I'd like to write a few short stories set on Aion. Currently working on one already 'cuz I'm bored. xD

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Anybody want to read short stories while we wait? :D

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That's true. I was going to wait for @Celsius and @Pie Flavor, though. Let's give them a couple days.

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the end goal of the post felt like it was getting to the council chambers, not necessarily getting to the doctor based on my letter sorry i misinterpreted.

@Rhiven Knight

I figured as much; I likely would have done the same thing in your shoes. That was my bad. Maybe what I need to do is use descriptions to draw interest. If I had spent a little time introducing the doctor to you in the letter and gave a reason why Rhayven should interact with her, would that have helped?

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@Rhiven Knight
It was! I especially enjoyed the atmospheric description of his home and personal life. It's hard to put my finger on it, but the way it was put together really helped evoke images of the scene. Definitely has good re-readability. I like your style; don't change it.

Consider slowing down a bit, though; the pre-council introduction to Dr. Hawthorne was supposed to be significant. It's okay, though - the doctor has a good sense of humor. :P

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What I'm aiming for is to give players the freedom to make interesting choices and thereby create interesting stories. Players don't want or need too many choices, or they can get overwhelmed by them and develop writer's block. Give them too few choices, though, and I might as well be writing the story myself. I'll be experimenting with GM styles a bit over the next few posts, so please bear with me.

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Oof, one-word replies make me feel like I screwed up (though I know that's not the intent). :3

I'm curious now, though: would you guys like me to use tabletop-style descriptions, or more conventional storytelling? We can experiment with both to see what works for everyone.