Tim

Ruins of Norn: Another Side

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[Withdrawn] Garen Zi, Sith Apprentice, Teräs Käsi Master

No, I insist, really. My brain doesn't work too good. I just can't comprehend stuff if it's not a certain way. Spent a long time looking over the problems I had in my sheet, and after moving onto some of the big stuff like his early life/training on Bunduki, I couldn't make sense of any solutions.

But I do really appreciate your help, all of you. Thanks for your feedback, and good luck with any future sheets.

[Withdrawn] Garen Zi, Sith Apprentice, Teräs Käsi Master

Ah. You make a lot of sense. I have made a large amount of errors by both being nonsensical and vague. It's actually laughable that, before being talked down about it, I first considered making a Darth. I see now that creating a sheet for something as simple as an apprentice is both beyond my understanding and out of my reach.

When I first created this character, I had pulled all my SW knowledge from what I could remember from KOTOR and whatever I could find on the wiki about the time period. After reading over all the provided materials, I was still confused about places like "So we're acknowledging some of the prequels stuff, does that mean the Original and Prequel trilogies are fair game?" And "If Teräs Käsi was created around 30 years ago IC, how is Arden Lyn a master of it if she was around during the First Great Schism?". But I made a character anyway, fumbling in my ignorance, instead of consulting a GM because I didn't want to be a bother.

I can understand now that being vague, as to not break continuity by accident and ruin my sheet, has ironically ruined my sheet with the lack of details. And then the coincidences that happen to my character. I mean, I keep comparing him to young Anakin, but he's not really that special. Not special enough for the Force to alter his fate like it did for the characters in the movies, anyway. But I don't think I can change anything for the sake of just remaking his entire backstory and parts of his sheet, with everything hinging on certain improbable events happening. Sort of set myself up without a failsafe, there.

But, y'know, enough complaining about stuff in hindsight. I've come to the conclusion that I was waaaay over my head in this. So, unwilling to change my sheet and character further and possibly cause more errors in both logic and continuity with my itty-bitty brain, I'm declaring this Denied.

Thanks for looking over the sheet (painful as it must have been), pointing out the flaws, and offering avenues of positive change, Persistent World Mods. Hopefully, someone wanting to create a character can look over my sheet and see what not to do. Maybe even Frankenstein some of the few good aspects and create an actual Force Monk. I'm sorry to have wasted your time and effort.

But thanks for giving me a shot.

-Tim

The Occult Investigations Agency

Douglas Finn

Douglas Finn

OIA Designation

Race: Human (Deathless)
Gender: Male
Age: 42 (appears in his mid 20's)
Psychological Profile:

A passive man, usually friendly and non-aggressive. He has a great sense of humor. Tends to be a bit cynical at times. When focused on a case, the case comes first, alienating himself from anyone not helping him to solve it. He has shown to have a strong will, his years of work not slowing down his determination one bit.

His immortality has seemingly dulled his sense of self-preservation. He has gone into dangerous circumstances, knowing he can't die. When dismembered, he's just as calm, if a little annoyed, as usual. He's even used his dismembered limbs for practical jokes. Strangely, Douglas has reported to still feel pain, so it's unknown if this still occurs with dismemberment.

Background:

Born in 1986, much of Douglas' life was normal. He grew up in a loving household, graduated high school on the honor roll, and went to college to become a forensic investigator. After getting his Bachelor's at 19, he worked part-time as a forensic scientist for the NCPD, while studying for his next degree. Eventually, he worked his way into a full-time position as a CSI. For the next few years, he assisted the NCPD in catching many criminals.

One day, when he was 25, he was investigating the seemingly sacrificial murders of the city's residents. The MO had lined up with a similar case years before his time, Serial Killer Markus Durian, so he decided to investigate the condemned house of the murderer to see if there were any connections. This is when he was ambushed and captured by a group of cultists, The Durian Cult, whom idolized the previous killer and thought he was onto something big before he was captured. They performed a ritual, and branded him with a circle in his middle-back (dubbed "The Mark of Cain" or "The Endless Cycle"). It's assumed that the cultists must have misunderstood Markus's notes, for the ritual had made Douglas "Deathless", and he could no longer die. They tortured him with his newfound immortality for the next day, until the day after when the NCPD raided the home and found the cultists, along with Douglas, in the basement.

Following some months of paid leave and therapy, Douglas was back to the NCPD, the encounter with the cultists having only strengthened his resolve. He worked for the next 5 years unaware of his affliction with undeath, believing what the cultists did to him involved hallucigenics. But then, one fateful day, he was investigating the crime scene of a possible gang shooting. A crowd of people who knew the victims had gathered, and Douglas was lightly questioning one of them when 3 cars slowly passed the scene. The passengers rolled down the windows and open-fired on the crowd, injuring and killing many civilians and officers alike, before speeding away. Douglas was hit 3 times in the chest during the drive-by. But as he got up from the floor, he felt fine, feeling his chest, there were bullet-holes in his shirt, but no wounds in his body.

After being sent home that day, hiding the bulletholes from his colleagues, he went into his bathroom and cut his hand open. After a few moments, it healed right back up before his very eyes. Then, he did something very stupid: he took his gun, pointed it at his chest, and fired. For a second, he thought he was dead, having just been an crazy idiot. But then he woke up moments later, alive, slouched against the bathroom wall. But the bullet did hit the wall directly behind him.

He hid his Deathless state from his coworkers for the next coming years. Occult occurances were becoming more and more common. Then, in 2019, OIA came around. Douglas immediately applied for a job and told them of his predicament. Including a demonstration. He was hired on as a senior R&D member ever since, investigating the world of the Occult.

Assigned Division:
R&D Department
Specialization:
Occult Forensics Expert
CSI
Training:
Forensic Degree
Expert Occult Researcher
Basic Firearms Training

Relevant Experience:
Years of Forensic Training during his police days.

Notes:

While he has gone through therapy Douglas can still be found at times simply staring off into nothing.

When testing the lengths of his immortality, Douglas's dismembered arm decomposed at a near-instant rate after a day of seperation, and he proceeded to grow another within a few minutes.

His parents have both passed, and Douglas has no other family, being an only child. And, through his own reports, it seems he cannot reproduce.

The Occult Investigations Agency

YYYYYES

The Occult Investigations Agency

@DocRock

I vote for the Amazon if that helps

The Occult Investigations Agency

@TheDarkTemplar

I DID A THING

The Occult Investigations Agency

Haha yes I will also reserve a spot for my CS

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Douglas Finn

Douglas Finn

OIA Designation

Race: Human (Deathless)
Gender: Male
Age: 42 (appears in his mid 20's)
Psychological Profile:

A passive man, usually friendly and non-aggressive. He has a great sense of humor. Tends to be a bit cynical at times. When focused on a case, the case comes first, alienating himself from anyone not helping him to solve it. He has shown to have a strong will, his years of work not slowing down his determination one bit.

His immortality has seemingly dulled his sense of self-preservation. He has gone into dangerous circumstances, knowing he can't die. When dismembered, he's just as calm, if a little annoyed, as usual. He's even used his dismembered limbs for practical jokes. Strangely, Douglas has reported to still feel pain, so it's unknown if this still occurs with dismemberment.

Background:

Born in 1986, much of Douglas' life was normal. He grew up in a loving household, graduated high school on the honor roll, and went to college to become a forensic investigator. After getting his Bachelor's at 19, he worked part-time as a forensic scientist for the NCPD, while studying for his next degree. Eventually, he worked his way into a full-time position as a CSI. For the next few years, he assisted the NCPD in catching many criminals.

One day, when he was 25, he was investigating the seemingly sacrificial murders of the city's residents. The MO had lined up with a similar case years before his time, Serial Killer Markus Durian, so he decided to investigate the condemned house of the murderer to see if there were any connections. This is when he was ambushed and captured by a group of cultists, The Durian Cult, whom idolized the previous killer and thought he was onto something big before he was captured. They performed a ritual, and branded him with a circle in his middle-back (dubbed "The Mark of Cain" or "The Endless Cycle"). It's assumed that the cultists must have misunderstood Markus's notes, for the ritual had made Douglas "Deathless", and he could no longer die. They tortured him with his newfound immortality for the next day, until the day after when the NCPD raided the home and found the cultists, along with Douglas, in the basement.

Following some months of paid leave and therapy, Douglas was back to the NCPD, the encounter with the cultists having only strengthened his resolve. He worked for the next 5 years unaware of his affliction with undeath, believing what the cultists did to him involved hallucigenics. But then, one fateful day, he was investigating the crime scene of a possible gang shooting. A crowd of people who knew the victims had gathered, and Douglas was lightly questioning one of them when 3 cars slowly passed the scene. The passengers rolled down the windows and open-fired on the crowd, injuring and killing many civilians and officers alike, before speeding away. Douglas was hit 3 times in the chest during the drive-by. But as he got up from the floor, he felt fine, feeling his chest, there were bullet-holes in his shirt, but no wounds in his body.

After being sent home that day, hiding the bulletholes from his colleagues, he went into his bathroom and cut his hand open. After a few moments, it healed right back up before his very eyes. Then, he did something very stupid: he took his gun, pointed it at his chest, and fired. For a second, he thought he was dead, having just been an crazy idiot. But then he woke up moments later, alive, slouched against the bathroom wall. But the bullet did hit the wall directly behind him.

He hid his Deathless state from his coworkers for the next coming years. Occult occurances were becoming more and more common. Then, in 2019, OIA came around. Douglas immediately applied for a job and told them of his predicament. Including a demonstration. He was hired on as a senior R&D member ever since, investigating the world of the Occult.

Assigned Division:
R&D Department
Specialization:
Occult Forensics Expert
CSI
Training:
Forensic Degree
Expert Occult Researcher
Basic Firearms Training

Relevant Experience:
Years of Forensic Training during his police days.

Notes:

While he has gone through therapy Douglas can still be found at times simply staring off into nothing.

When testing the lengths of his immortality, Douglas's dismembered arm decomposed at a near-instant rate after a day of seperation, and he proceeded to grow another within a few minutes.

His parents have both passed, and Douglas has no other family, being an only child. And, through his own reports, it seems he cannot reproduce.

[Withdrawn] Garen Zi, Sith Apprentice, Teräs Käsi Master

@Ezekiel

Okie doke, changed the first few paragraphs of the bio slightly to accomodate the first two points. The second point was easy enough, just changed it from 5 years to 3 years.

The first point actually made me think, though, because it was really good one. Sorta pushed me to make a deeper backstory and a plot reason for him to go back to Bunduki. So, y'know, I'd actually like to thank you for pointing that out.

Get to it when you can. No rush.

[Withdrawn] Garen Zi, Sith Apprentice, Teräs Käsi Master

<Snipped quote by Tim>

I think it shows his youth that he's see it in blanket terms of good and evil which is cool.

So you then propose your approach to how the Sith bring him in.

@Ruby

I thought I did that. Sith is there on business, Sith witness potential and senses hatred of Jedi when the sabers start glowin' , Sith uses hatred and naïvaté to convince him to join voluntarily, knowing that even if he refuses, the Sith Kidnapping Squad can come pick him up. I don't think it was all that coincidental, because y'know it was only a matter of time before someone with Sith relations noticed his subtle force powers, and Anchorhead is pretty much the place to be to hire some Scum and Villiany for dastardly deeds.

But, I mean, if that's too much of a stretch, I can think of something else. Just gonna take a bit for the cogs to turn.