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@Ancient Amen

your almost complete, just your history still talks about the personalities changed his phyiscal capabilities still which i told you it couldn't do. He could have the phyiscal capabilities to do some of that already it's just his personalities are the only ones who will actual act on it like he doesn't believe he can do it himself. the main thing about that though.. i'd get rid of the running twice the speed of an average man. that's bit to much i think. sure can run faster than an average person but not twice+. i like characters being a bit physically fit but they shouldn't be extremely physically fit at the start of the rp.

@WilsonTurner
hm.. not to sure how to phrase what my mind is telling me.

I guess one, just because the color in regards to actual color code, falls between red and blue, doesn't necessarily mean it has the aspects of both. I did say people could say what a color would mean. though they wont just be different levels of the 3 that i originally told.

and i did say first come first serve in regards to that, which technically Gingerboi made a purple, though he hasn't fixed everything in his yet so his is not complete so not accepted, so it's still up for grabs.

Though amen is close and he also has purple, though has a better concept of making it, its own thing. which if his is done then he'll be the first come first served.

Yours the talent and primary source of magic is what troubles me. especially when you go saying 'requires more strength to use' and everything.. sure talent in Manipulating energy, i can understand that. all that would mean is he'll LEARN FASTER in regards to that in the lessons, it doesn't mean anything else.

While primary source of magic acts like he can simply just give and take magic from animals and plants like it's nothing which again not something he should be able to do, especially at beginning. To take magic from anything outside one's body and to give magic to the same thing is Fairly advance magic manipulation which no one will learn for a good while in the rp.

@Rex
most likely over thinking it again.... it's just the nature of magic inside of themselves. it could be totally opposite to who they are, it could be the exact same. It doesn't affect what they can use magic for. it only affects 2 things. 1. the color the magic is in it's pure form. and 2. how it reacts when you try to use it. which makes it more difficult or easier to channel magic.

ok, I get it now, sorry I was in a fog yesterday and for some reason couldn't understand. I apologize for that.

@Rex
it's alright, like i said it is simply one of the new additions I've made sense the original so i figured it would have some confusing moments. Just like i should figure for Talent lol, in the original rp about 85% of the people who joined messed that up lol.

@Rex
it's alright, like i said it is simply one of the new additions I've made sense the original so i figured it would have some confusing moments. Just like i should figure for Talent lol, in the original rp about 85% of the people who joined messed that up lol.

so is there anything else you want your need me to change so my character is accepted?

@booksmusicanime
You can move your character to the character tab sense she is accepted now.

@Rex
one thing i just noticed of you history is talking about his doctor father using time magic, one thing i did like is how you didn't say he simply speed, reversed, or slowed time or what ever. no he did 'personal time' in other words he speed up the body's responses instead of time itself. that works a lot better in a good balance to not cause time magic to be a forbidden magic. BUT there is specifically Healing magic.... that can do that and more without causing a person to become older and lose parts of their life because of their body's time was shortened some.

I personally think if his father is a Magic Doctor, (which there isn't a crap tone of magic users just so you know so it's not a common thing 75% of the people die from simply attempting it even if they come from a family that has magic users in it) he would be more using just healing magic sense Time magic is more complicated subject, and if he only knows one kind of magic it probably wouldn't be an advance type.

Which would also explain why they'd send him away to learn (incase you started to think that if they lived in a magical family they could just learn from them) sense 1. wouldn't want to see him die in front of them by their own hands.. and 2. Masters who teach others (which is a good amount.. considering how few there are) tend to be over hundreds of years old because of one reason or another thanks to magic.

So either offer some insight about that bit in the history or change it to fit a better suited ideal. then i'll do a quick re-read and you'll be accepted.

@booksmusicanime
You can move your character to the character tab sense she is accepted now.

@Rex
one thing i just noticed of you history is talking about his doctor father using time magic, one thing i did like is how you didn't say he simply speed, reversed, or slowed time or what ever. no he did 'personal time' in other words he speed up the body's responses instead of time itself. that works a lot better in a good balance to not cause time magic to be a forbidden magic. BUT there is specifically Healing magic.... that can do that and more without causing a person to become older and lose parts of their life because of their body's time was shortened some.

I personally think if his father is a Magic Doctor, (which there isn't a crap tone of magic users just so you know so it's not a common thing 75% of the people die from simply attempting it even if they come from a family that has magic users in it) he would be more using just healing magic sense Time magic is more complicated subject, and if he only knows one kind of magic it probably wouldn't be an advance type.

Which would also explain why they'd send him away to learn (incase you started to think that if they lived in a magical family they could just learn from them) sense 1. wouldn't want to see him die in front of them by their own hands.. and 2. Masters who teach others (which is a good amount.. considering how few there are) tend to be over hundreds of years old because of one reason or another thanks to magic.

So either offer some insight about that bit in the history or change it to fit a better suited ideal. then i'll do a quick re-read and you'll be accepted.

I edited the history. since there are few magic users in the world, I changed his father to a normal human. however, I kind of made into one of those people who wanted to find a scientific reason for why people use magic and how magic works. one of those people who believes in it, but knows it's not just "magic", but a more scientific reason to how magic works.

@Rex
hm.. there be bound to be people like that sense not everyone can use magic, makes sense some. and seeks to give a scientific reason as to why some people can and why some can't or what ever, trying to find a scientific way about magic, even if there may not be any.

Even though most people die not because their unsuitable but because of themselves. of course most don't understand what it takes and so they just want to become powerful and it destroys them. even if they survive the ritual, they can still die during training.

it kind of fits and everything. alright currently I don't see anything completely wrong about it, so the character is accepted. that'll make 3 characters who have made it so far. including one who was only discussed in PM currently.

@Rex
hm.. there be bound to be people like that sense not everyone can use magic, makes sense some. and seeks to give a scientific reason as to why some people can and why some can't or what ever, trying to find a scientific way about magic, even if there may not be any.

Even though most people die not because their unsuitable but because of themselves. of course most don't understand what it takes and so they just want to become powerful and it destroys them. even if they survive the ritual, they can still die during training.

it kind of fits and everything. alright currently I don't see anything completely wrong about it, so the character is accepted. that'll make 3 characters who have made it so far. including one who was only discussed in PM currently.

cool, did you need me to change my characters name by the way, I noticed in the old RPG there was already someone named Alex, so if they want to join and use that name. I can change it. I believe it was RomanAria who used the name. I think, I'll need to check.

Magic Colors [+]

Red=Wild
Blue=Calm
Green=Laid Back, Easy going
More to add as people come up with it.

...then (like i did) then the Light/Dark (color name) will be similar, and Mix colors will have the mixed of the base ones...

Red and Blue are base colors.

As for the rest of it-
His source of energy is connected to the world- he'll have to learn how to actually connect it, and manipulate it to pull energy in, or push it out. If he were wearing shoes and gloves, he wouldn't be able to effectively do so- if he planted hands and feet in the dirt, he'd have a much stronger 'connection.'

Because it's more widespread, because in order to use it he has to reach out, then it's more difficult than just summoning on one's innate mana. He has to focus a line from his hands and feet to draw on energy from a source and use it- or to channel his power to something or the other. Like... pushing a heavy cart. Hard to start, but the more you push, the longer you push, the easier it gets. Meanwhile, other people would be able to draw on their power more spontaneously, without having to manipulate this 'line' to point the power in where they want to go. They can just throw a bolt of lightning, or a fireball- for them, it's like throwing a rock, compared to Lee having to set down what's essentially a track for his energy to flow through.

@olcharlieboi

ok, I miss read the posts RomanAria didn't use the name as their main character but used Alex as being one of their brothers in the RPG to give a more in depth look into their characters back story. my bad.

@Rex
not sure which thing ur reading lol, no one had a character named Alex. at lest not from what i'm reading Aria had Annalyn lol.
my first ooc post has all the names besides 2 that was accepted and i don't see an alex.

@WilsonTurner
That isn't specifically what i meant. i didn't mean base as in just Red Blue and Green. one reason because then there wouldn't be much of different in the magic then, and even if it is a mix of any of those 3 doesn't have to be specifically attuned to them entirely. similar traits sure but isn't completely dependent on the other colors, and technically not sure how you can balance Wild and Calm which pretty much are polar opposites. If it was literally just those 3 types there would be no real variety which i was hoping to accomplish. Base colors mean each of the different colors themselves. Red, Blue, Green, Purple, Black, White, Yellow, Etc....

Basically by Mix of the base colors i mean like example: Pale-Blue. it's somewhat mix of White and Blue but without it being an entirely different color, or Shade of the original colors. Yours is trying to be Redish-Blue, or Blueish-Red, a mix of red and blue that doesn't create purple yet has similar qualities to the original blue and red.

..you really just confused me on trying to explain your source...

book had an outside source as part of his primary but isn't all that's in the sheet. it's what will become his primary when his character learns more in controlling energy and everything. but also added in a source of magic within his character, and gave bit of a reason as to why the character's primary would be an outside source once we reached to the point in the rp where his character learns how to use an outside source.

and people still have to create a path for their magic to flow in terms of where they wish it to go, sense they can't just grab the energy and use it, because it'll become instantly unstable and blow up in their face with a 75% chance of killing them.. at one point in training sure people will be able to do it without having to focus for a few moments and just do it on instinct but that'll be a while, and by that point most if not everyone will be able to do it.

@Rex
not sure which thing ur reading lol, no one had a character named Alex. at lest not from what i'm reading Aria had Annalyn lol.
my first ooc post has all the names besides 2 that was accepted and i don't see an alex.

@WilsonTurner
That isn't specifically what i meant. i didn't mean base as in just Red Blue and Green. one reason because then there wouldn't be much of different in the magic then, and even if it is a mix of any of those 3 doesn't have to be specifically attuned to them entirely. similar traits sure but isn't completely dependent on the other colors, and technically not sure how you can balance Wild and Calm which pretty much are polar opposites. If it was literally just those 3 types there would be no real variety which i was hoping to accomplish. Base colors mean each of the different colors themselves. Red, Blue, Green, Purple, Black, White, Yellow, Etc....

Basically by Mix of the base colors i mean like example: Pale-Blue. it's somewhat mix of White and Blue but without it being an entirely different color, or Shade of the original colors. Yours is trying to be Redish-Blue, or Blueish-Red, a mix of red and blue that doesn't create purple yet has similar qualities to the original blue and red.

..you really just confused me on trying to explain your source...

book had an outside source as part of his primary but isn't all that's in the sheet. it's what will become his primary when his character learns more in controlling energy and everything. but also added in a source of magic within his character, and gave bit of a reason as to why the character's primary would be an outside source once we reached to the point in the rp where his character learns how to use an outside source.

and people still have to create a path for their magic to flow in terms of where they wish it to go, sense they can't just grab the energy and use it, because it'll become instantly unstable and blow up in their face with a 75% chance of killing them.. at one point in training sure people will be able to do it without having to focus for a few moments and just do it on instinct but that'll be a while, and by that point most if not everyone will be able to do it.

yeah I miss read the posts RomanAria didn't use the name as their main character but used Alex as being one of their brothers in the RPG to give a more in depth look into their characters back story. my bad.

Um.

I think I'm just going to withdraw, because of reasons. Let me know if you absolutely need someone to join in to push the plot along, and I'll throw together something less complicated and original.

@Rex
lol it's alright man, like i said though just move alex to the Character tab sense his ready.

@WilsonTurner
if your certain, chances are if Aria was on probably could help make some understands in how things are phrased.

@olcharlieboi
She probably could, but I just started up another 1x1, which takes up more time in my books than a group rp.

That, and I don't want to go Grammar Nazi on you all and make more enemies.
Because I can't stand small posts x.x
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I should really be an English teacher. I'd be evil.

O.o ohai everyone. Yeah, sorry, Alex was the name of one of the brothers of my character. Please continue using the name. I'm making a different character this time around anyway.

Do not speak Aria's name!
She is invoked by it!
Do not SUMMON HEEER!

It is too late! It is TOOOOO LAAAAAAATE!!!