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Well, originally the list was with most of the names in OOC reference... Also, if le queen isabella needs saving, I guess her name would be on the contract? I'm guessing the king could reward her too(with gold to motivate her/thank her) for coming back.

Also, I think many of us are waiting for the king to say more than "Help my daughters? please, adventurers!"
(no offense @thinslayer )
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Characters that are immobile are in an excellent position for introspection and deep thinking. Caradras insinuated that Isabella would have questions for him; as a noblewoman aspiring to run the country, she should have many.

If I were writing in her position, I would describe how it feels to be so up high and flying, how the scales of the dragon's paw feel, and the chill of their altitude. She would recall everything she witnessed - the giant clawed hand snatching her from the dungeon, and the ruins of Midhaven as they flew away. She would get a passing glance at the golems. Given that, she might wonder why Caradras, the freaking Guardian of humanity, would attack humanity. There might be a brief lore dump on Guardians, followed by some musings on the possible rationale behind the attack. After considering all the facts, she would pose her questions.

Consider spending some time describing what it's like to be Isabella at the moment. Now, descriptions are a little funny because there's more to them than meets the eye. One often thinks of them as simply establishing the setting, but as in real life, the observer's subjective bias greatly influences how the world is perceived. Descriptions reveal the observer's state of mind. Consider the two following examples:

Example 1: Isabella yelped and laughed as Caradras whisked her into the sky. She peered down to see a carpet of green earth stretched out beneath them, with houses like quaint little models peppered across the landscape. Isabella imagined taking one of the houses between her fingers and turning it over to look at the tiny dolls inside. How vast the world seemed now, and how miniscule the concerns of royalty appeared against the endless expanse of the earth! She settled back into the dragon's paw and closed her eyes to let the cool wind caress her face.

Example 2: Isabella clung to the scaly paw with all her might as Caradras whisked her into the sky. Pressure rose in her chest and dragged her down, threatening her grip with every passing moment. As the earth shrank away beneath her, she imagined what might happen were she to climb over and fall. How many seconds would it take before she splattered on the ground? Already her stomach lurched every time Caradras raised his wings to beat them down - she shuddered to think how having her organs stuck in her throat would be the last thing she ever felt. With her head spinning from the altitude, Isabella shrank back and huddled into the dragon's paw as the icy wind seeped through her clothes. Even breathing became laborious, since every inhalation froze her nostrils and burned her throat.

Both descriptions witness the same event, but from radically different mindsets. In Example 1, Isabella is having fun, and flying with Caradras is the ride of her life. In Example 2, flying frightens her, challenging her warrior's courage. How she interprets the world reveals something of Isabella's character. Use descriptions thusly to your advantage.
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Could a minor edit be made to the post with Ravadon's contract, like deleting Isabella's name? It seems to be a sticking point for ineffable (and I can kinda see why, having looked at the post again), and it would be a fairly simple edit to make.

Regarding the wait period...the king doesn't have much more to say. If we were all at court during a peaceful meeting, the king would be giving long and glowing speeches about how wonderful his daughters are, discussing compensation and rewards, and examining each potential rescuer in detail. But since he's been pretty traumatized, all he can muster is a desperate "plz halp." He might have much more to say if we waited a few more in-game days, but leaving ASAP is the wiser course of action. The Reaper can provide lore dumps along the way as needed.
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I did a thing. @Thinslayer Sykes has officially hit the breaking point.
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So the plot thickens.
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Could a minor edit be made to the post with Ravadon's contract, like deleting Isabella's name? It seems to be a sticking point for ineffable (and I can kinda see why, having looked at the post again), and it would be a fairly simple edit to make.

Regarding the wait period...the king doesn't have much more to say. If we were all at court during a peaceful meeting, the king would be giving long and glowing speeches about how wonderful his daughters are, discussing compensation and rewards, and examining each potential rescuer in detail. But since he's been pretty traumatized, all he can muster is a desperate "plz halp." He might have much more to say if we waited a few more in-game days, but leaving ASAP is the wiser course of action. The Reaper can provide lore dumps along the way as needed.


Turned a representative into "any representative" ^^

EDIT: I'll also take the liberty of postponing while Ravadon isn't doing anything noteworthy, interesting or plot relevant.
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Thank you for your advice! It's spurred me into action!

I'm going to be updating Izzy's CS soon, if that's okay with you?

Also, to be sure Izzy was the product of her concubine mom marrying the current king (Alexander). A failed marriage right?
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Thank you for your advice! It's spurred me into action!

I'm going to be updating Izzy's CS soon, if that's okay with you?

Also, to be sure Izzy was the product of her concubine mom marrying the current king (Alexander). A failed marriage right?

Yes. An edit is fine. Yes, Isabella was the product of a concubine mother marrying the current king, followed by the mother being put away. :)
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>.> So, how is that slow reading retort contest going Thin? (Too much Starcraft :L This has taken over my time off work) [Why is this text green to me]
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It's proving to be a busy and exhausting week, especially with some of the new developments in my health.
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I'm not sure what we're talking about but are you okay?
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@ineffable Vomiting and profound weakness after meager exercise certainly isn't a clean bill of health. I'm getting a checkup with the doctor on the 29th.
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Man, hope it an't nothing to bad, but ya sounds like ya got something. (Slight question, but drinking habits?)
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I don't drink. My ancestors and extended family have bad drinking problems, and if it's truly hereditary like scientists say, I'll be inviting destruction on myself if I ever start.

No, my health issues more likely stem from my sedentary lifestyle. We'll see what the doctor says.
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>.> I didn't mean drink as in Booze. Leave the Everclear to the Gator man here. I was talking about something else but mah. (Ya I admit I drink Everclear, makes me wish sometimes it wasn't my favorite drink)
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He pinches his lip. Yellow flakes of skin specked with black coffee grains come off on his fingers. Then he traces his finger along the lower lip to search for more, and pricks it on a sharp edge; he's found another flake. The Law of Even-ness declares that flake must come off too. But this one doesn't peel off cleanly. It must be torn off. Experience says that means blood.

Should he peel slowly to minimize bleeding, peel quickly to get it over with, or try to peel around it to prevent bleeding entirely?

The years have taught him that it's better to suffer an uncomfortable bump on the lip than to taste copper and hold a tissue for the next half hour. He peels around it and throws the flakes in the trash can. Satisfied that his lips are now mostly smooth, he slumps in his chair and stares at the computer screen. Take another phone call? Or sit in After-Call Work for a few minutes? One could get fired for sleeping at work, but one could also get fired for doing the job wrong. Is it better to keep working and risk making mistakes, or rest for a bit and run the (low) risk of being caught napping? Callers' rude screams can wait. On the balance, a brief power-nap sounds like a good choice.

Then he remembers that there was an internet article that said one possible cause of exhaustion is dehydration. A transparent purple water bottle sits on one corner of the desk, already half drunk. Perhaps a sip or two would help. The lid breaks away with a friendly "pop" before a cool, soothing drink of purified water washes down his throat. He's barely put the bottle down before a minor (but notable) surge of energy lifts his spirits.

Welcome to life in Arizona.
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I hope you get better! Rest up, Thins! :)
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@ThinslayerYeh, get better soon.
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*peeks out from under the covers*

Are the server issues gone yet?


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Still too tired to write properly, but I had an epiphany today on how to improve player autonomy: remove the train engine. It was so simple, I feel like an idiot for not knowing that.

I aim to write tomorrow or the day after.
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