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- If you were wondering why you don't see many centered sheets, it's because they're hard to read.
- Consistently getting the farm's name wrong in the second half of your sheet and the too-many traits makes me a sad panda.
- Stumps is not one of the only colored men working on the farm. There is an entire barn for the colored workers, which probably outnumber the white ones.
- The first half of his history doesn't make a lot of sense applied to the real-world scale of segregation, but I can forgive that for someone unfamiliar with US history.
- Unless he's contracted the world's slowest-moving gangrene, his arm isn't scabby/gauze-y anymore, it's a fleshy stump. He's more likely to experience phantom pains than he is to still be treating an injury, even of that scale, after two years.


Thanks for the feedback. I took account of your criticisms and your suggestions in the revision of the character sheet and also updated Stump's history so that it makes just a little more sense. The revised character sheet of Stumps is in the characters tab.

Anyway, no need for the apologies. I'd rather have a GM who's willing to take time to make quality posts rather than a GM who rushes posts. It's rare to find a GM like you these days who's willing to reject character sheets and give valid reasoning for that rejection.
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Okay, i had a go at fixing up the sheet. Toned down the father, and toned down Lawrence, and changed his traits up a bit too. I hope this reads better!
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@Stitches's friend here, sorry for the delay! Give it a whirl and lemme know if anythings unacceptable. =)


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Fixed it up for you @DeadbeatWalking!
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@Stormflyx@Stitches@DinoNuts Accepted! Feel free to move them over.
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Look who finally has a personality!

It's not me, that's for certain.
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Is it confirmed that my character sheet has been accepted?
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You two are accepted.
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'Sup! Posting a CS as well. I'll admit its fucking challenging making a racist murderer an at least somewhat endearing and sympathetic character. Apologies if the bio is a tad too long.

Speaking of which, the "The Affair"-hider in the bio is a bit more of an in-depth look at a specific, character-defining event in Kenny's life that explains why he is who he is. It's something I could've reserved for IC, but IDK, it's always hard to me to judge what is better left explained and was is better left unfolded IC.

Another thing, I suppose; I have no idea if 30's medical science was capable or not of explaining Ray's condition and death cause, but I'm rolling with it for now until corrected, in which case I'll adjust accordingly.

I have a question as well; does this RP have a Discord? I just find it easier to discuss things through said app (or similar apps) than the forums. But hey, I'm willing to adapt.



Now, there is this trait called and described as "Churchgoing - You are of the righteous sort who might hesitate to kill". Kenny is, as mentioned above, very much hesitant to killing, but it doesn't have anything to do with religion. Should I pick this trait or may I simply assume it doesn't matter that much considering Kenny's well into the minus scores anyway, heh.
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Just a quick note about The Affair. In 1920s Florida there wouldn't be any need for local authorities to cover it up. The fact three black men had assaulted a white man, even if there was an accusation of rape involved, would automatically confer a death penalty on the black men.

The real challenge would be to stop the local population from lynching the three before they managed to get taken into police custody. Even then the three would likely find themselves in serious danger of falling down stairs, tripping over and accidentally smashing their facers into the floor and waking in the middle of the night to find their ribs had spontaneously broken while they slept during their stay in jail awaiting sentencing.

Most black men around this time would've just moved their entire family out of the area as soon as they discovered Norma's relations with a white boy, rather than confronting him. In fact, they'd probably have moved out of town after she'd stood up to a disgruntled customer for the first time, to avoid the inevitable firebombing of their home the day after.

Now, there is this trait called and described as "Churchgoing - You are of the righteous sort who might hesitate to kill". Kenny is, as mentioned above, very much hesitant to killing, but it doesn't have anything to do with religion. Should I pick this trait or may I simply assume it doesn't matter that much considering Kenny's well into the minus scores anyway, heh.

The trait is entirely to do with the unwillingness to kill, and nothing to do with religion. The name is just for flavour.

We already had this discussion in depth over on Discord, when people were asking whether a character who would be willing to kill for religious reasons should have the trait or not.
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Posted. @The Bork Lazer, feel free to interact with Alice in Stumps' opening post if he isn't in the stables at the moment.
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Posted. @The Bork Lazer, feel free to interact with Alice in Stumps' opening post if he isn't in the stables at the moment.

Was Stumps the farmhand who just helped MJ in the stable? She didn't bother to ask his name.
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I'll post sometime this weekend.
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Was Stumps the farmhand who just helped MJ in the stable? She didn't bother to ask his name.


I'm okay with Stumps being the farmhand who interacted with MJ.
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@cider Sheet's good, but you have too many traits. Shave off a few and Kenny will be accepted.
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Just a quick note about The Affair. In 1920s Florida there wouldn't be any need for local authorities to cover it up. The fact three black men had assaulted a white man, even if there was an accusation of rape involved, would automatically confer a death penalty on the black men.

The real challenge would be to stop the local population from lynching the three before they managed to get taken into police custody. Even then the three would likely find themselves in serious danger of falling down stairs, tripping over and accidentally smashing their facers into the floor and waking in the middle of the night to find their ribs had spontaneously broken while they slept during their stay in jail awaiting sentencing.

Most black men around this time would've just moved their entire family out of the area as soon as they discovered Norma's relations with a white boy, rather than confronting him. In fact, they'd probably have moved out of town after she'd stood up to a disgruntled customer for the first time, to avoid the inevitable firebombing of their home the day after.

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The trait is entirely to do with the unwillingness to kill, and nothing to do with religion. The name is just for flavour.

We already had this discussion in depth over on Discord, when people were asking whether a character who would be willing to kill for religious reasons should have the trait or not.


Can't claim I know all too much about the era (not even American, after all). In any case, what you say sounds reasonable. Kenny, however, was ashamed of almost "allowing" himself to be killed by blacks as well as having an affair with a black woman to begin with and thus didn't let anyone know (this is in the bio, but maybe it's not clear enough?). There were rumours to the point of it being an open secret however, and I can see why Norma and her family might've probably skipped town after the attack. Thus I've now rewritten that part of the bio to have Kenny and Ray track them down elsewhere instead. Thanks for the points!

@cider Sheet's good, but you have too many traits. Shave off a few and Kenny will be accepted.


OP didn't say anything about it so I didn't consider that. I can see now that you've said about max 10 on the last page though.

I figure "Crippled" might cover the "Slow" trait, so I've removed the latter along with "Abrasive" and "Fisherman", which knocks down the total to 10.
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Posting tonight or by the latest tomorrow.
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@cider Accepted! Move him on over.
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Going to get a post up later today. Was going to do it yesterday, but I did not have the time to do so.
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