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Yay. 2 hrs and just OOC talk? Double yay.
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All right, I gotta fix this. Who's still confused about the chronology?

And yes, we have two alternate means of communication: Discord and Chatzy. The links are in the 0th OOC post.


Not confused about the broader timeline of how Rabid's posts are fitting into ours. It's the timeline of dialogue within the current group who is on the road. All the conversation threads have sort of mushed together. There's bits were inside the city gates, now mixed in with bits out of the city gate.

It's fine, once Fox posts, I should be able to just ignore the inconsistencies and move straight past it.
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@Thinslayer Yeah it's totally fine. Just finished my reply, in fact.
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@TheFox Holy fuck, out of the frying pan and into the fire.
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@Zool Whoa. You're good at writing action. That was intense.
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Thanks mate. Fox had me hyped with that mini-massacre from Yakeru. So tempting to grapple-hook the wyvern but baby-steps, ye know.
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@Zool Do you suppose MacKenzie is, perhaps, arguing herself as much as she is Yakeru? It sounds like she wants to save the world as much as Yakeru does, but is trying to persuade herself that they can't do that for this city. Or maybe I'm reading too much into it? :P
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My writing sucks.
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Nah, it's interesting, it took me a sec to figure her out. She 'knows' that she's right. That's just the way she is. And the city is clearly beyond saving, no need for self-persuasion there. She's wrong though. Heroes should try and save every life they can, of course. I think she's not seeing what's important, and is just applying what she knows (which is very little) to the situation with dunning kruger confidence.

She's got some growing to do.
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@Dark Cloud That's not really how I'd describe writing that is able to convey information through the nuances of word choice, sentence structure, and reading flow. I don't think it sucks. Is there anything in particular you're struggling with? I know a few writing tips I can share.
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It may have been an easy retreat for the goblin, they were making swift headway however something they hadn't accounted for was about to happen.

Within the chamber of stone sarcophagi where the group was gathered a sound could be heard muffled through layers of stone much like a howl. It sounded inhuman and otherworldly making the demon boy bristle at it's familiarity.

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'This can't be happening...' his heart beat at a million miles an hour, his breathing ragged and dry.

'I must be dreaming, this has to be a nightmare.' the man tried to rationalize his predicament, but upon feeling around in the stale darkness he realized he was stuck in some kind of little room. He could hear faint noise from outside like a battle was raging, then something awoke within him.

'I sense death...' it was a voice as deep as the ocean and filled with a maddening hunger for something.

'Jared want escape...' was that his name? Jared? It sounded right but the man didn't recognize the deep voice echoing in his mind however 'Jared escape and we kill...' the voice began to grow louder, and Jared felt as though something was taking over his mind.

'Wait kill? N-' it was too late the voice boomed over his own 'Jared be free and we kill!' everything began to fade and turn blurry, like he were seeing things from different eyes but couldn't control his own body.

"WE KILL," now fully in control the other spirit howled, hunger in it's deep voice "WE MUST KILL." with unnatural might it launched the stone lid covering the sarcophagus their body had been trapped within, smashing the cover to pieces on impact with the opposite facing wall.

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As the dust settled, heavy breathing echoed within the small chamber. It was a ragged and hungry breathing of someone maddened by hunger, from the dust came a cloaked figure brandishing both sword and shield "DIE." it rumbled, rushing after the small green-skinned creatures.

Screams filled the air as the hulking knight lumbered jarringly towards the retreating goblin, archers fired upon the knight to no avail as It reached the rear party. It swung it's broadsword and blood spattered the walls, as three archers we're hacked down by the knight.

A barrage of arrows rained upon it, bringing it to kneel upon the blood soaked stone "HUNGRY..." suddenly it stood back up, black blood dripping from it's chain coif and ripped out the arrows flecked upon his chest with a howl that shook the room.

It was a horrifying scene for the retreating goblin to behold, the knight seemed unkillable and unrelenting as it stalked after them.


lol, don't be silly Dark Cloud. Some people can only dream of stitching words together like this.
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@Zool That makes sense. In a way, I think they both have a point - on the one hand, you can't save anybody if you're dead; and sometimes there's an opportunity cost in that you save fewer lives through one choice than you could have saved if you made better choice. On the other hand, the whole point of being a hero is giving reason the middle finger and saying, "Why can't we have both?" I'm gonna save these lives and I'm not gonna sacrifice any opportunity cost, because I'm strong enough to pull it off.

It'll be fun to watch MacKenzie grow. :)
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I feel like I just waste peoples time, I spend too much time talking and it's off putting, I should try to post less here in the OOC and the chat, I think I annoy everyone. Anyways I'll be back in a moment my dogs need walking.
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@ThinslayerTotally agree. That "Why can't we have both?" is what being a hero is all about. Had she even been a little into anime or fantasy, she would know this very basic thing already lol
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@Dark CloudYou're good buddy. You're not annoying in OOC, you keep things lively. Don't worry about it.
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@Zool Your both right, sorry.
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@Dark Cloud I think Zool put it succinctly. To put my own (long-winded) spin on it, limiting your activity would cause everyone to lose more than we gain. Certainly, it would clean up the chat logs a bit and allow other voices a little bit more "volume" when they speak, but controlling that would require crippling a personality trait that leads you to be active frequently, respond frequently, and converse for longer. I like those benefits a lot better than cleaner chat logs. In short, it's more lively that way, and I'd rather work with or around it than limit it. So like Zool said, you're good, buddy. ;)

I do know the feeling, though. When I get the Writing Itch and don't have an outlet for it, I start talking everyone's head off, and then wonder whether I'm annoying everyone with how much I'm talking. You're not alone in having that sort of anxiety.
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@Scarifar Quick question: Does Afki have Parshath yet, or is that up to me?
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You know, there's a word for the kind of people who always tells themself that their writing sucks. They're called 'Writers'. Trust me man, you're fine. I'm exactly the same way.
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Alright, I'll get on to this soon-ish. It might take me till tomorrow, but we'll see.
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