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Tryliin Blues


“Hey there, welcome to Tryliin! Oh, you didn't bring a gun? Well, you probably shouldn't be here then...” -Author Unknown


Tryliin: One of the most inhospitable planets in the galaxy, it is largely desert, with a single small ocean on its surface, and well on its way to becoming a dead world. Combined with being on the very edge of known space, it is hard to see what value could be found here, and most of the governments that run the galaxy would agree, abandoning their colonization projects when the settlers quickly realized that they were in fact very low on the food chain. And so, for the next forty years, the planet became a safe haven for wanted criminals, psychopaths and the occasional eccentric scientist, looking to escape the strict regulations of the various civilizations that maintain an uneasy truce with each other.

Then, the impossible happened: A large energy plume erupted from Tryliin, and a maze of structures was discovered under the surface, honeycombing the entire planet. Orbital analysis confirmed that the structures were very ancient, artificial and more advanced than anything the galaxy had ever seen. Further seismic activity revealed the wrecks of many ancient cities, ships and machines, the purpose of which is still unknown.

With new found interest, the various races reestablished their colonies, who now rage war against the marauders and wildlife. The pioneers spearheading the initiative are lone explorers, mercenaries, soldiers and scientists, who sometimes band together to surmount the seemingly endless wastes of Tryliin, in search of wealth, fortune and adventure.















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I think I have a fair idea of what my character will be and should have something of a decent WIP after the weekend.
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Interested. Should get a CS up for submission soon.
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This is an old character that I never got to use, but quite liked. So I've repurposed him this. Hope that's alright :)


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@PerfectThoughtVery interesting character design, although my main question would be why would Parma-Violet want to be a mercenary? If the character "is incredibly hesitant to get into confrontations of any kind, due to them drawing attention to him." What would make him pick a career that literally puts himself into confrontational situations? That's my only real concern with the fundamentals of the character, otherwise I would like to see a bit more to tie him into the universe itself give some faction or organization names that we can build on instead of generic "bad people". That being said if you can give me the answer of why he would choose to be a merc and maybe a bit of merc work he would of done beforehand we can work out the other stuff later and I'd be happy to accept him.
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Here's the WIP that I promised, experimenting with abbreviations that you scroll over for more information. Basically he's an altered predator species that has been "free" for a good while and has come to the planet to seek out something thought lost (open to coordinate with others but can handle it myself if it comes down to it). I'll continue work if everything looks good so far. For now though I'd like to ask how "translator" technology works in this setting. Not sure if that has been touched on yet.

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@PerfectThoughtVery interesting character design, although my main question would be why would Parma-Violet want to be a mercenary? If the character "is incredibly hesitant to get into confrontations of any kind, due to them drawing attention to him." What would make him pick a career that literally puts himself into confrontational situations? That's my only real concern with the fundamentals of the character, otherwise I would like to see a bit more to tie him into the universe itself give some faction or organization names that we can build on instead of generic "bad people". That being said if you can give me the answer of why he would choose to be a merc and maybe a bit of merc work he would of done beforehand we can work out the other stuff later and I'd be happy to accept him.


Both are very fair points. I'll do a little bit of retooling and get back to you.
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@Mangrale looks fun, the hover links don't work with my phone, but I'll check it out from my pc after work.
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@Arthanus Ah I see. Sorry about that. It's quite possibly something that might not be compatible with a lot of phones out there. I may need to make disclaimers to that effect because I've started to use abbreviations so much.
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@Mangrale Its not a problem, I do most of my posts from PC anyway.

So Fisher is looking good so far I'm interested in seeing how he will turn out when you finish.

As for the translator question. I'd say most "civilized" people use what would be the common language while maybe holding onto their own racial language for talking with members of their own race or secretive talks. Translators do exist for races within the S-GAF and for races that don't speak normally there would be a device that would take the sounds/chitters they make and then give them a robotic voice although it probably wouldn't be 100% accurate. Also Gabriel would have a translator program installed with his implants so he would be able to understand fisher after a quick download of the translation guide (given one exists)
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@Arthanus Yeah I'll continue work on the rest of the sheet when I next get the chance. As for the translator, given that I'm kinda writing into that corner where there's only a handful of Fisher's species out there like he is, it would also be prudent for Fisher to be equipped with a translator of his own. That'll likely be a part of his equipment I think.
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Looks fun. I was thinking of bringing in one of my aliens, but this is a mostly human world and the few characters so far are alien. We'll see what we come up with while working in the garden.
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@Expendable It's diverse enough that it isn't mostly humans, I just haven't put many other aliens in yet. Been working on a few to add that will be NPC's and such, but been lagging on it because putting in a bunch of work for races most people will ignore gets exhausting. but ill start putting in small snippets of other races soon
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@PerfectThoughtVery interesting character design, although my main question would be why would Parma-Violet want to be a mercenary? If the character "is incredibly hesitant to get into confrontations of any kind, due to them drawing attention to him." What would make him pick a career that literally puts himself into confrontational situations? That's my only real concern with the fundamentals of the character, otherwise I would like to see a bit more to tie him into the universe itself give some faction or organization names that we can build on instead of generic "bad people". That being said if you can give me the answer of why he would choose to be a merc and maybe a bit of merc work he would of done beforehand we can work out the other stuff later and I'd be happy to accept him.


Okay done some tweaking! Hope this is good.

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@PerfectThought changes look good I'll accept him.
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I'm interested in this, if you'll have me.
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@Gelatinous Cube yeah I'll still accept some characters go ahead and make one up.
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@Arthanus - character is roughed out. I'll see about making some connections.


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I've just about got history and goal down and so just have equipment and abilities left. Should have that up by Friday at the latest.
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Here's a good point to stop on for now cuz anymore will take me another day or so. Could scrounge up more in terms of equipment and abilities, but I'm sorta thinking that anything else he has can be obtained on Tryliin or just supported from his bio. Plus I should really see if even this much is acceptable.

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