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Both look good to me; Camilla and Neil are Approved.
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Cleaned up my sheet a bit and added a few tools and doubled down on Piero's cartography skills given the family business.
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I'm going to read through my old copy of The Count of Monte Cristo and see if anything comes to me. Cool idea for a sandbox/concurrent game nonetheless, will be reading regardless.
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hey, i might be interested, i don't mind indulging in a little pirate roleplay :P

also, how do you make a character sheet like in the "characters" section, bc they look fancy as hell and kinda cool
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hey, i might be interested, i don't mind indulging in a little pirate roleplay :P

also, how do you make a character sheet like in the "characters" section, bc they look fancy as hell and kinda cool


If you quote the original post that contains the CS template, it has all of the BBCode formatting done already, so all you would need to do is fill in the placeholder text with your own material.

This can be a little tricky, since mis-aligning tags can cause errors and break the formatting. Best practice is usually to write your CS separately in a word processor, copy/paste it into the BBCode formatting bit by bit, and make extensive use of the Preview function to make sure everything lines up.
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@tealrootssss The CS is a nightmare to use I'm afraid.
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this is probably the first male character i made/am playing, since i normally prefer to play as a female character (since i am female myself, and just act a lil masculine), and i wanted to switch things up a bit
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<Snipped quote by tealrootssss>

If you quote the original post that contains the CS template, it has all of the BBCode formatting done already, so all you would need to do is fill in the placeholder text with your own material.

This can be a little tricky, since mis-aligning tags can cause errors and break the formatting. Best practice is usually to write your CS separately in a word processor, copy/paste it into the BBCode formatting bit by bit, and make extensive use of the Preview function to make sure everything lines up.


To add to this, Tealroots, clicking the 'Raw' button above every post allows one to get the BBCode formatting of said post.
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is my character approved?
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this is probably the first male character i made/am playing, since i normally prefer to play as a female character (since i am female myself, and just act a lil masculine), and i wanted to switch things up a bit


There are a few elements that I feel need to be tightened up. The murderous brother and the ring possessed by a ghost both have some cool plot potential, but neither figure into his backstory, nor how he got involved in the Exchange or what he's doing in the Antillean Sea. Right now, they feel kind of thrown in, but I could see them tying in to something more focused (for instance: maybe Gerard's brother was possessed by that ghost and killed someone he cares about, and Gerard chased him to the New World for revenge, and searching for him got him involved in the criminal underworld).

There's potential here, but I'd like to see the various disparate elements like those tied together before I give the official thumbs-up.
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@AndyC 'kay, i'll try to edit some stuff in and i'll let you know when i'm done
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@AndyC hey, i'm done editing the Bronze Baron stuff, i hope it's a little more sensical now since i reread the starter post
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I'll take a look later this evening, once I'm off from work.
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I don't want to be mean, and I'll keep this constructive. But I'll be honest, it's still kind of all-over-the-place.

First off, the ring with a ghost in it doesn't seem to fit in with any other part of the character-- is it meant to be a central part of the character's story, or is it just a power-up? Is it meant to be a mystery as to who the ghost is, and who sent the ring to him? If so, then I feel like Gerard's motivation should be more focused towards uncovering that mystery.

His connection with the Exchange also doesn't feel like it has any weight; was Gerard's father connected to them somehow? That's the only way I can see a major crime syndicate (who is basically the Mafia) taking on someone just because their dad ordered them to. And if he's part of this sort of criminal organization, he wouldn't be able to just travel freely around the world (especially if he's not part of the organization of his own free will). If they did let him travel, it would be to further their own interests. The good news is that there's plenty of story potential there, if he's trying to get out of that sort of life-- maybe he's got some Exchange boss that keeps dangling his freedom in front of him if he pulls off "one more job," only to then pull the rug out from under him. That idea can work, but it's not something that can just be tacked on.

The angle with the murderous brother also still kind of comes out of nowhere. If he's a product of their abusive father, then that's something that can figure more into the concept.

I feel like if you stick to one of these concepts-- a man searching for the answers behind a cursed treasure, a good-hearted criminal trying to get out from under the control of the mob, or a pair of brothers who were products of their father's abuse and took opposite paths in life-- and really focus on fleshing out one of them, it could make for an interesting and entertaining character. Currently, though, they don't really fit together, and kind of feel like three or four different character concepts jumbled together.
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