[OOC] The New Frontier: A Marvel/DC One Universe RP

[Sep]

<Snipped quote by Lord Wraith>

I'm an 18 year old high school senior. I think I belong to that generation.

@Vandy

Pfft, you're probably from AmericaLand which means you can't even drink yet at 18.

As a Scotsman I pity you.

[Enarr]

Thank Brandon Flowers

[Sep]

Thank Brandon Flowers

@Nightrunner

As a man currently at work (I work on a PC and alt tabbing is super easy. I'm productive damn it!) I feel like I'm missing out on the love you're offering via youtube.

[Lord Wraith]

There's nothing left that you can expose me to or protect me from. My innocence was burned away. My hatred has cultured and made black and white a hazy gray. There is nothing left to protect me from. All because of these places from which I've come.

On a more serious note, I'm seventeen and more or less ask for it by visiting this site.

@Nightrunner

Easy there Linkin Park.

[Sep]

<Snipped quote by Nightrunner>

Easy there Linkin Park.

@Lord Wraith

Please mate, Busted rules.

I mean, that's what I went to school for.

[Blue Demon]

I need some constructive criticism please.

This paragraph just wont fix. If anyone can give pointers that'd be great. (I don't think context is really needed because it's self explanatory. If not, ask and you shall receive.)

Hider

Then he woke up in the future. A future that threatened to take Steve Rogers away from him. It grabbed at him with needy hands and a voracious appetite. Steve had struggled a lot those first couple of months. It had been Lex who had saved him. Lex who came up with the idea of the Justice League. And how to save Steven Rogers. Lex had introduced the idea to Steve slowly. To let him warm up to it. It was a simple idea. In a future of fear where people hid behind computers or masks, he would stand out in the open as both Steve Rogers and Captain America. He had no more need of a secret identity. All his friends and family were dead.

[Vandy]

<Snipped quote by Vandy>

Pfft, you're probably from AmericaLand which means you can't even drink yet at 18.

As a Scotsman I pity you.

@Sep

Louisiana, AmericaLand to be exact. I do what I want!

[Sep]

Just so we stay on topic (Makes me feel better about this chatting)

Favourite Hero and Villain from DC/Marvel anyone? :P

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Would love to help @Blue Demon but sadly anything longer than this is impossible to do at work :P

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<Snipped quote by Sep>

Louisiana, AmericaLand to be exact. I do what I want!

@Vandy

Lies.

[Blue Demon]

Would love to help @Blue Demon but sadly anything longer than this is impossible to do at work :P

@Sep

Work smerk. What did work ever do for you that we can't do?

[Sep]

<Snipped quote by Sep>
Work smerk. What did work ever do for you that we can't do?

@Blue Demon

Pay me? I mean if you want to pay me that's great, I'm all yours :P

[FacePunch]

@Blue Demon There's something off about the flow, but I can't place any specifics.

It sounds like Steve has a man-boner for Lex.

[Blue Demon]

@Blue Demon There's something off about the flow, but I can't place any specifics.

@FacePunch

I'm having the same problem.

And apparently tone down the man-crush. Got it.

[TimeMasterX]

Favourite Hero and Villain from DC/Marvel anyone? :P

@Sep

Favourite villain...you actually have to ask??? :P

[FacePunch]

@Blue Demon I never said the man crush was a bad thing. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

[Sep]

It sounds like Steve has a man-boner for Lex.

@FacePunch

Did we not just talk about this?

<Snipped quote by Sep>

Favourite villain...you actually have to ask??? :P

@TimeMasterX

Is it Sugarman?

[FacePunch]

<Snipped quote by FacePunch>

Did we not just talk about this?

@Sep

Its a purely platonic man boner, I assure you.

As for favorite hero/villain, I'd sayyyy Superman and...uhhh...I dunno. Maybe Darkseid?

[TimeMasterX]

I need some constructive criticism please.

This paragraph just wont fix. If anyone can give pointers that'd be great. (I don't think context is really needed because it's self explanatory. If not, ask and you shall receive.)

Hider

Then he woke up in the future. A future that threatened to take Steve Rogers away from him. It grabbed at him with needy hands and a voracious appetite. Steve had struggled a lot those first couple of months. It had been Lex who had saved him. Lex who came up with the idea of the Justice League. And how to save Steven Rogers. Lex had introduced the idea to Steve slowly. To let him warm up to it. It was a simple idea. In a future of fear where people hid behind computers or masks, he would stand out in the open as both Steve Rogers and Captain America. He had no more need of a secret identity. All his friends and family were dead.

@Blue Demon

This is what I'd do, feel free to use, change, ignore, etc:

-Switch those last two sentences and put a ; between them rather than actually having new sentences.
-There's a lot of short sentences there, maybe try putting different sentences together rather than having them so short.
-'Needy hands and a voracious appetite', I'd just focus on one of these and extend the metaphor. 'A future that threatened to take Steve Rogers away from him, this new reality would eat away at his identity until there was nothing left.'

[Sep]

<Snipped quote by Sep>

Its a purely platonic man boner, I assure you.

@FacePunch

Suuuuuuuuuuuuure

As for favorite hero/villain, I'd sayyyy Superman and...uhhh...I dunno. Maybe Darkseid?

@FacePunch

Not Superman and Hyperion?

I'd probably go with Doc Green annnnnnd.... m

I actually don't know for a villain.

[FacePunch]

Not Superman and Hyperion?

I'd probably go with Doc Green annnnnnd.... m

I actually don't know for a villain.

@Sep

Hyperion is pretty cool, but he hasn't quite lived up to his potential. He's mostly used as a background character in major Marvel books. Squadron Supreme seems to have some promise, though, considering what happened to Namor.

I find that a lot of Marvel's more powerful characters have pretty underwhelming villains. Apart from Magneto, Doctor Doom and Ultron, of course.

[Blue Demon]

@TimeMasterXYou solved my problem. Thank you. :D

_{(And the bro-crush didn't get toned down. Lol. It's now canon. You're welcome.)}