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Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

These days, with people popping in, then leaving 18 or so seconds later, it doesn't get all that busy.

when people intend to talk, they'll say someone's name there to ping them.

Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

You lurk, @Heat? You did not hide your presence in the IRC sufficiently.

Help!

No problem. It might have been a minor server blip yesterday.

Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

No problem. The basic concept of the character is good. When there's a clear concept that doesn't go at odds with Aftermath, there's usually nothing wrong with it. The finer details might need improvement, though.

Help!

Didn't notice this thread till now, @LunaGrey. Still having issues?

You did not try to add too many tags to the thread you tried to post, right?

Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

!= is the boolean expression for "not equal".
"Jedi temple" isn't a faction. "Jedi Order" is.
Appearance is necessary to have.

Flaws could use a bit of expanding on how they affect him.

The "connections to Alat" bit is essentially a note that that bit in your bio has potential for being used for connections to other player characters.

Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

No worries, @OSIEIPPO.

Here’s a preliminary review, @Themerlinhawk
@Sundered Echo and @Fallen may have additional commentary.

Name = good. Species = good. Age = good. Gender = Good.
Faction != Jedi Temple. Faction = Jedi Order.
Rank = Good.
Captivity status = Acceptable.

Appearance != Good. Appearance = Missing.

Race = subgroup of species. Traits described are unique to entire species. Notable Race Traits = Incorrect label.

Flaws = lacking in description and attribution to character. Otherwise within acceptable parameters.
Skills = solely related to combat. That = implausible. Jedi = trained in many skill areas.

Trakata = Minor specialization of lightsaber combat. Trakata = integrated into other lightsaber forms.
Trakata != a full lightsaber form.
Lightsaber combat form involving multiple blades = Niman. Jar’Kai = term for wielding two weapons.
Wielding cortosis baton != common. Wielding cortosis baton = needing justification in bio.
Many others = trained in Trakata. Connections to Alat = Present?
@Sundered Echo = Capable of expanding on this.

End of biography = compatible only with prisoner. Rest = compatible with Jedi Rescuer. Option = worth considering?

Want to find an old game. Please help.

No idea, to be honest. We can only vaguely remember it ourselves.

Uh... hi!

Fair enough. Good luck in finding other RPs, though.

Want to find an old game. Please help.

Technically we can't claim full credit, as our brother named it for us. But it does seem like it might be what @Klomster is looking for.