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Peace is a Lie, there is only Passion. Through Passion, I gain Strength. Through Strength, I gain Power. Through Power, I gain Victory. Through Victory, My Chains are Broken. The Force Shall Free Me.
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Peace is a Lie, there is only Passion. Through Passion, I gain Strength. Through Strength, I gain Power. Through Power, I gain Victory. Through Victory, My Chains are Broken. The Force Shall Free Me.
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"Never was, never will be."
8 yrs ago
We find that our favorite damage type is collateral.
8 yrs ago
We do not corrupt mortals. We teach them enlightened self-interest.
8 yrs ago
Peace is a lie. There is only passion (for cookies).
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If you don't know where to fit him in @Blitzy, you can drop by the PG discord and ask people there. In recent days people have submitted a number of new sheets for Imperial-aligned characters, which should give you more places that might fit him. It is generally easier to reach the various players and GMs on the discord if you want to plot out possibilities.
You can also discuss stories you might want to explore there.
There are plans for several empire-oriented stories soon.
Also, if you can't find a spot you like for him, you can always work on a different character. There's no shame in abandoning a character concept.
You can also discuss stories you might want to explore there.
There are plans for several empire-oriented stories soon.
Also, if you can't find a spot you like for him, you can always work on a different character. There's no shame in abandoning a character concept.
@The Elvenqueen
Personnel Files:
Interesting choice of master. How far down the chain of command from the Darth is she? Given her age, she is presumably fairly low on the food chain.
Is it critical for her father to have been a Darth, or could he have been one of Acheron’s Sith Lords? There’s not really anything in the bio that gives the feel of her father having had the power to be a Darth. Such people are rare powerhouses in the Empire. Generally, when a Darth dies unexpectedly, there is an upheaval as power shifts hands.
Appearance:
At her age, she would most likely be mistaken for being an acolyte rather than a Neophyte.
Mask could feasibly be equipped with external visual sensors and screens on the inside, which could allow for those glowing panels all the time.
Pretty certain “most Sith” don’t use respirators except when it is absolutely necessary.
Force skills:
As yoda said “size matters not”. Within reason of course, It doesn’t really matter whether it is a lightsaber or half a starfighter you telekinetically lift. Though you could, of course, have a mental barrier in play as a flaw.
Beyond the basics, known talents are often taught better than techniques without any talent, but of course circumstances can change such too. Force Lightning may often be of use in interrogation, if your character has practice at that.
The level you described for Force Sight is sounds closer to being part of Force Sense than Sight.
Don’t forget that choking isn’t just used for killing (though being able to do that is often considered a milestone), but also for basic interrogation and teaching lessons.
How good is she at breaking through defenses? Is that something she’s studied?
Nice to see you left skills that are of interest but unlearned.
Note: Force Healing is more about helping the body accelerate its own healing than it is magical healing. See the Guide to the Force.
Non-Force skills:
What can she fly from A to B? Fighters? Transports? Small Freighters?
Selling snow to a Wampa would require her to be able to communicate with one, just sayin’.
Combat skills:
Presuming that you mean that she can hold her own/outsmart/evade opponents of similar or lesser skill level, right?
What is she likely to do if faced with an opponent that is clearly superior in skill?
Political Influence:
The Empire doesn’t have a senate. Sith, Moffs and the like fill the kind of roles that senators hold in the Republic.
Rivals:
What would she do if faced with an incapacitated Jedi?
Associates:
Generally, the Sith don’t react too much to parents training their children. Some choose to do that, others choose to have the Academy take care of it. The only thing the Empire considers important is for them to be trained. Many Sith tend to prefer their heir to be a descendant.
What happened to her father’s power base when he died?
While most likely not close, she might at least have encountered Darth Theya once or twice, as one of Theya’s secondary spheres of influence is Biotic Science.
Ownerships:
Most Sith holocrons tend to be fairly extensive in the knowledge they contain. They are rarely so narrow as to cover just a single Force technique. We would suggest that you have her have only one holocron, but that she has not yet wrested much from it beyond the knowledge that it can teach her about handling animals and the raw power of Force Lightning. It could have a very stubborn gatekeeper that prevents her from easily accessing things.
Psychological Evaluation:
People stupid enough to call a Sith something like “shorty” deserve what’s coming to them.
Interests:
What is the goal of her drinking? Is it the intoxication? Forgetting? Outdrinking those who are larger? Something else?
Achievements:
Generally, no Sith wants to have on record any kills of other Sith at the academy (or anywhere else), on account of that being a crime. But of course, no witnesses to a death clearly means it was entirely accidental and all that.
Failures:
Generally, an acolyte that doesn’t succeed “properly” on a test will be given further tests until he or she is deemed worthy, either by the overseers or by a Sith in need of an apprentice that matches the acolyte’s skills or aptitudes.
Interview:
Generally, unimpressive physique only means much of anything to the less intelligent warrior-type Sith. The smarter ones tend to know better than to be deceived by appearance. Still, this doesn’t mean the overseers as a whole wouldn’t try to use her diminutive size against her. They would definitely do that, just as they would use the bigger acolytes’ size against them.
Review of Sith apprentice Aria “Ari” Saal
Personnel Files:
Interesting choice of master. How far down the chain of command from the Darth is she? Given her age, she is presumably fairly low on the food chain.
Is it critical for her father to have been a Darth, or could he have been one of Acheron’s Sith Lords? There’s not really anything in the bio that gives the feel of her father having had the power to be a Darth. Such people are rare powerhouses in the Empire. Generally, when a Darth dies unexpectedly, there is an upheaval as power shifts hands.
Appearance:
At her age, she would most likely be mistaken for being an acolyte rather than a Neophyte.
Mask could feasibly be equipped with external visual sensors and screens on the inside, which could allow for those glowing panels all the time.
Pretty certain “most Sith” don’t use respirators except when it is absolutely necessary.
Force skills:
As yoda said “size matters not”. Within reason of course, It doesn’t really matter whether it is a lightsaber or half a starfighter you telekinetically lift. Though you could, of course, have a mental barrier in play as a flaw.
Beyond the basics, known talents are often taught better than techniques without any talent, but of course circumstances can change such too. Force Lightning may often be of use in interrogation, if your character has practice at that.
The level you described for Force Sight is sounds closer to being part of Force Sense than Sight.
Don’t forget that choking isn’t just used for killing (though being able to do that is often considered a milestone), but also for basic interrogation and teaching lessons.
How good is she at breaking through defenses? Is that something she’s studied?
Nice to see you left skills that are of interest but unlearned.
Note: Force Healing is more about helping the body accelerate its own healing than it is magical healing. See the Guide to the Force.
Non-Force skills:
What can she fly from A to B? Fighters? Transports? Small Freighters?
Selling snow to a Wampa would require her to be able to communicate with one, just sayin’.
Combat skills:
Presuming that you mean that she can hold her own/outsmart/evade opponents of similar or lesser skill level, right?
What is she likely to do if faced with an opponent that is clearly superior in skill?
Political Influence:
The Empire doesn’t have a senate. Sith, Moffs and the like fill the kind of roles that senators hold in the Republic.
Rivals:
What would she do if faced with an incapacitated Jedi?
Associates:
Generally, the Sith don’t react too much to parents training their children. Some choose to do that, others choose to have the Academy take care of it. The only thing the Empire considers important is for them to be trained. Many Sith tend to prefer their heir to be a descendant.
What happened to her father’s power base when he died?
While most likely not close, she might at least have encountered Darth Theya once or twice, as one of Theya’s secondary spheres of influence is Biotic Science.
Ownerships:
Most Sith holocrons tend to be fairly extensive in the knowledge they contain. They are rarely so narrow as to cover just a single Force technique. We would suggest that you have her have only one holocron, but that she has not yet wrested much from it beyond the knowledge that it can teach her about handling animals and the raw power of Force Lightning. It could have a very stubborn gatekeeper that prevents her from easily accessing things.
Psychological Evaluation:
People stupid enough to call a Sith something like “shorty” deserve what’s coming to them.
Interests:
What is the goal of her drinking? Is it the intoxication? Forgetting? Outdrinking those who are larger? Something else?
Achievements:
Generally, no Sith wants to have on record any kills of other Sith at the academy (or anywhere else), on account of that being a crime. But of course, no witnesses to a death clearly means it was entirely accidental and all that.
Failures:
Generally, an acolyte that doesn’t succeed “properly” on a test will be given further tests until he or she is deemed worthy, either by the overseers or by a Sith in need of an apprentice that matches the acolyte’s skills or aptitudes.
Interview:
Generally, unimpressive physique only means much of anything to the less intelligent warrior-type Sith. The smarter ones tend to know better than to be deceived by appearance. Still, this doesn’t mean the overseers as a whole wouldn’t try to use her diminutive size against her. They would definitely do that, just as they would use the bigger acolytes’ size against them.
@GrizzTheMauler
Suggestion for formatting: put the
Rank should be this: Apprentice (Warrior)
Question: Has he ever taken on any apprentice(s)? If yes, are any of them still alive?
Appearance:
Perhaps add in some of the images you chose to compliment the description?
Force skills:
In addition to the list, we suggest you write a sort of report to give people a feel of how he uses the Force. Perhaps written by another Sith or an imperial officer?
How is he on playing with the more esoteric elements of the Force?
Non-Force skills:
The listed skill levels says very little about his skills outside the Force. Perhaps you could describe what it means for others?
Is he experienced as well as well-trained? Does he have the patience for politics? What would he do if someone tried to frame him for something?
He’s a decent pilot, but is it with fighters? Transports? Capital ships? Is it in combat or outside it?
Combat experience:
Not altogether sure that a personalized form can/should truly be named like that. While some Jedi/Sith use a single, pure form, most tend to have a personalized form that is mixed together from many.
The bit about controlling the area falls somewhat under the Principle of Sokan, of using the terrain to your advantage.
Does he use Dun Möch? The art of deceit and taunting in combat, pointing out their mistakes and such?
Would he seek to inspire terror in enemies while fighting multiple foes through intentionally disarming and/or dismemberment of foes, potentially up to complete delimbing? (the arts of Sun Djem, Cho Mai, Cho Mok, Cho Sun and Mou Kei)
Rather than name it as something like “total area control”, describe that he fights with the intent to control the battlefield, using all tools at his disposal, the environment, etc.
Minor grammar tweak: Well trained → Well-trained
Question: you’ve delved into six of the seven forms, but not Juyo. Why? (not saying you should, but we’re curious.
Political Influence:
In the Empire, political influence is not just about the backstabby, backtalking stuff. It is just as much about having associates and contacts elsewhere in the Empire. Having people who might warn him about an unfriendly rival planning a trap for him.
Does he have any contacts in Imperial Intelligence? Any people he really doesn’t respect?
It is also worth noting that being an apprentice of Darth Theya brings with it a good bit of political influence. Mind you, it might be that he doesn’t use it much, but it does exist. As does the influence that comes with him being a Pureblooded Sith.
Rivals and Enemies:
Does he have any other rivals in the Empire, perhaps non-Sith who have offended him somehow, but who are still alive? People who don’t like him?
Does he have any particular foes in the Republic or Jedi Order, people he’s had problems with before?
Perhaps Heat’s Battlemaster could be one to explore for such?
Associates:
Perhaps flesh out a little on what these associates are like? Are they important in the imperial war machine? Do they deal mostly with offense or defense?
Does he have any apprentices? Any “pet” officers? Any troops he usually brings along, or does he take whatever is available?
Ownerships:
Guessing you meant Balmorra there?
Any details on the slaves?
Does he perhaps have an underling or two to deal with the day-to-day activities that slaves cannot be trusted with?
When traveling apart from the imperial Army/Navy, what sort of ship does he use, since the Bloodmark is not outfitted with a hyperdrive?
As an apprentice of Darth Theya, he would have access to requisitioning small vessels when he needs to travel.
Psychological Evaluation:
Phrasing: rather than “having unlocked”, use “expressed a natural talent for”.
The blood rage bit, we believe that it is not so that most warriors are consumed by it, but still something that many do.
We suggest expanding this into two sections, one for his behavior in battle, another for elsewhere.
Flaws:
Details would be wonderful on the flaws.
While some of this will overlap with earlier sections, but sometimes it is better to cover elements twice, with slightly varying perspectives of it.
Interests:
Might be an idea to note that he has little interest in politics.
You’ve got Balmoora again instead of Balmorra.
Formatting. Perhaps add
What sort of personal training? Combat? Physical fitness? Pazaak? Force? Erotic Dancing? Something else?
Major achievements:
Details would be wonderful. Especially since some of these achievements are not really covered in the interview section.
Failures:
Any other failures? Perhaps something related to politics?
Interview:
Was he perhaps involved in the Sacking of Coruscant, but not at the Jedi Temple?
Wild suggestion: Perhaps the attack on the Senate, where Darth Angral slew the Supreme Chancellor?
While not a requirement, it would also be nice to have some more parts to the interview. If you want, you can have them done from other perspectives, such as reports from other people. (Perhaps a report acquired by agents from republic files, to show how terrifying he is to them?)
Review of Caixal
Suggestion for formatting: put the
[/b] tags before the entries in the Personnel files section.Rank should be this: Apprentice (Warrior)
Question: Has he ever taken on any apprentice(s)? If yes, are any of them still alive?
Appearance:
Perhaps add in some of the images you chose to compliment the description?
Force skills:
In addition to the list, we suggest you write a sort of report to give people a feel of how he uses the Force. Perhaps written by another Sith or an imperial officer?
How is he on playing with the more esoteric elements of the Force?
Non-Force skills:
The listed skill levels says very little about his skills outside the Force. Perhaps you could describe what it means for others?
Is he experienced as well as well-trained? Does he have the patience for politics? What would he do if someone tried to frame him for something?
He’s a decent pilot, but is it with fighters? Transports? Capital ships? Is it in combat or outside it?
Combat experience:
Not altogether sure that a personalized form can/should truly be named like that. While some Jedi/Sith use a single, pure form, most tend to have a personalized form that is mixed together from many.
The bit about controlling the area falls somewhat under the Principle of Sokan, of using the terrain to your advantage.
Does he use Dun Möch? The art of deceit and taunting in combat, pointing out their mistakes and such?
Would he seek to inspire terror in enemies while fighting multiple foes through intentionally disarming and/or dismemberment of foes, potentially up to complete delimbing? (the arts of Sun Djem, Cho Mai, Cho Mok, Cho Sun and Mou Kei)
Rather than name it as something like “total area control”, describe that he fights with the intent to control the battlefield, using all tools at his disposal, the environment, etc.
Minor grammar tweak: Well trained → Well-trained
Question: you’ve delved into six of the seven forms, but not Juyo. Why? (not saying you should, but we’re curious.
Political Influence:
In the Empire, political influence is not just about the backstabby, backtalking stuff. It is just as much about having associates and contacts elsewhere in the Empire. Having people who might warn him about an unfriendly rival planning a trap for him.
Does he have any contacts in Imperial Intelligence? Any people he really doesn’t respect?
It is also worth noting that being an apprentice of Darth Theya brings with it a good bit of political influence. Mind you, it might be that he doesn’t use it much, but it does exist. As does the influence that comes with him being a Pureblooded Sith.
Rivals and Enemies:
Does he have any other rivals in the Empire, perhaps non-Sith who have offended him somehow, but who are still alive? People who don’t like him?
Does he have any particular foes in the Republic or Jedi Order, people he’s had problems with before?
Perhaps Heat’s Battlemaster could be one to explore for such?
Associates:
Perhaps flesh out a little on what these associates are like? Are they important in the imperial war machine? Do they deal mostly with offense or defense?
Does he have any apprentices? Any “pet” officers? Any troops he usually brings along, or does he take whatever is available?
Ownerships:
Guessing you meant Balmorra there?
Any details on the slaves?
Does he perhaps have an underling or two to deal with the day-to-day activities that slaves cannot be trusted with?
When traveling apart from the imperial Army/Navy, what sort of ship does he use, since the Bloodmark is not outfitted with a hyperdrive?
As an apprentice of Darth Theya, he would have access to requisitioning small vessels when he needs to travel.
Psychological Evaluation:
Phrasing: rather than “having unlocked”, use “expressed a natural talent for”.
The blood rage bit, we believe that it is not so that most warriors are consumed by it, but still something that many do.
We suggest expanding this into two sections, one for his behavior in battle, another for elsewhere.
Flaws:
Details would be wonderful on the flaws.
While some of this will overlap with earlier sections, but sometimes it is better to cover elements twice, with slightly varying perspectives of it.
Interests:
Might be an idea to note that he has little interest in politics.
You’ve got Balmoora again instead of Balmorra.
Formatting. Perhaps add
[i][/i] tags around “Exotic Encounters”, so that it is even clearer that it is the proper name of the place?What sort of personal training? Combat? Physical fitness? Pazaak? Force? Erotic Dancing? Something else?
Major achievements:
Details would be wonderful. Especially since some of these achievements are not really covered in the interview section.
Failures:
Any other failures? Perhaps something related to politics?
Interview:
Was he perhaps involved in the Sacking of Coruscant, but not at the Jedi Temple?
Wild suggestion: Perhaps the attack on the Senate, where Darth Angral slew the Supreme Chancellor?
While not a requirement, it would also be nice to have some more parts to the interview. If you want, you can have them done from other perspectives, such as reports from other people. (Perhaps a report acquired by agents from republic files, to show how terrifying he is to them?)
How's the sheet coming along, @Blitzy? Is your schedule still too full?
Do you need any help? Have you got any questions?
Do you need any help? Have you got any questions?
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