Force and Fury

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Alrighty, all! Just waiting on slightly amended Camille and Edmund to be posted. Then, we should be good to go!

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6-1-2022: Oriflamme Begins

Hello to all of our Heroes of Parrence, Heroes of Eskand, Drudgunzean Allies, and Shifty Yasoi players. The time for Character Sheet submissions is at an end. Welcome, officially, to Oriflamme! If you have made the requested amendments to your character sheets and I've signed off on them, feel free to now add your characters to the Characters Tab. If you haven't, then I suggest doing so now.

As of this moment, Oriflamme is a live, in-progress game and, within the next twenty-four hours, the following will take place:
1) Our roster will be finalized and new signups will be closed.
2) A collage of our characters will be posted.
3) The notice at the top of the OOC will be amended to pertain to the current posting cycle.
3) The IC will commence.

Happy Storytelling!

- FnF

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@Komo You are good to go. Feel free to post your character in the Characters tab once I give the announcement.

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@Siber Just a heads-up that I hadn't asked you to post Tilda in the Characters tab quite yet. A couple of other people who did (I'm looking at you, Jasbraq) weren't supposed to either. Anyways, it's done now and I'm going to be asking everyone to post today. Unless you're especially attached to the last name, let's give our poor musical girl something that spunds properly Drudgunzean, hm? Perhaps Ulmer, Ulker, Ullhard, or Ullman, just to keep the general sound. Otherwise, you're good to go. Please wait for an announcement next time, though!

Also, now that you're in, it's time to join our discord. It's a fun community with a lot of extra resources and much quicker communication. I'm looking forward to seeing you there!

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@Pirouette Awesome character and, as you know, I love the Joan of Arc angle. Before you post her in the character tab, just a couple of minor matters:
1) You were working on this pretty late, so there are a lot of the usual little typos and things. Just give it a good proofread and fix as needed.
2) Parrence is the country and Parrench is the demonym.

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@jasbraq Hey, so thanks for finally getting that in. I know that your vision for the character has a lot more to it than what you wrote here, but I know how you have a hard time with Character Sheets. Hence, I'm going to accept this short version for now and ask that, as you get more ideas for the character and feel less pressure, you work on her some more and fill in things like her background and inventory. Welcome aboard.

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@RezonanceV Big fan of that CS. I an tell that a lot of love went into crafting Caelum and I'm excited to storytell alongside you in this RP. Below are a few small things that I noticed that I think may be worth taking a second look at.
1) As addressed on discord, the Oraff/Oraphne thing being changed to Oraphe.
2) Small word of warning: nobody is completely immune to Essence magic tampering with the brain, though your guy would have some resistance by virtue of very definite and strong thought patterns: enough that it'd probably give him time to notice and take countermeasures.

Honestly, awesome work!

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@Ti Percy's hilarious. I'll make sure that he makes some appearances! Thanks for making him a thing.

@Fetzen Overall, I love Otios and it's nice to see a yasoi character take shape! Looking forward to seeing him in action! Here are a couple of minor tidbits for thought and questions I had:
1) How would his name actually be pronounced, what with the double 'y' and all.
2) What might the middle section of his name mean, since that's the one that's generally earned. Might be a cool thing to address in terms of his characterization.
3) Fourth and a half wheel is very strong and very rare. How might this have affected him? Is it an important part of his character? Anybody with that much of the Gift is going to draw plenty of attention for it unless they're actively trying to hide it. If they are, that begs the question: "why?"

@Komo Told ya you could do it! Overall, I can see the effort that you put into this and it's paid off! It's nice to have bboth a wizard and another knight, haha. Two for one! below are some little things that I might ask you to take a look at.
1) Her father being a fifth wheel wizard is maybe a little bit much. There are probably no more than ten of those in the entire world. If he was fifth wheel, he'd probably be a king and able to singlehandedly wipe out that entire army. If he's fourth and a half, that'd still be really strong and worthy of immediate recognition.
2) I imagine that you had to stop and restart a few times as you worked on this over the course of a few days. Naturally, there are a few typos, missed words, and awkward sentence structures in there, so maybe just give it a good proofread and fix those. The hard work is all done, though! I've included a couple of examples below.

• A small wording thing: tallest of her father’s children and just a head shy of her oldest brother’s height. Since she's shorter than her brother, did you mean, "tallest of her her father's daughters?"
• Due to her talent in picking up skills quickly along with her gifts, she has proven to be really lethal and effective combatant that anyone who has fought beside her has never gone out of their way to change anything, or say anything else.

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@Siber Sounds good. Yeah, it kind of just needs to have the right sound. Like, think of an old school Germanic-sounding name. That's what we're looking at here in terms of characters being consistent with the world and logical. Thanks for making that adjustment. Subject to it, you should be good to go! Also, if you need any help, feel free to ask.

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@Siber Overall, I like your character and her angle a lot. I do wonder where her name cones from, though. If I'm going to be honest, it strikes me as pretty out in left field compared to the others.