Izurich

Rise of the New Heroes

EDIT: Deleted.

Reason: Rescinded participation.

New Superhero RP (Title is a Work in Progress)

@Zapdos

I see~ alright, got it. Well, all fictional universes are in essence subjective to the whims of the creator, so it's not a bad thing, as I said with my "Your word is Law as the GM" statement.

MGR is short for Metal Gear Rising, an action hack-and-slash video game developed by Platinum Games and released in 2013. (Wikipedia Article)

Raiden refers to the main protagonist of said game, and his abilities and gimmicks are the main inspiration for Camille, as noted in the Trivia section of her CS.

This video perfectly illustrates my main reference on how Camille fights, and also the fact that steel-cutting slice slice is most of the gameplay:


Or, to be more specific, how she'll eventually become at the peak of her power. She's a rookie now after all!

New Superhero RP (Title is a Work in Progress)

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God, my character comparatively looks low effort. And isn't nearly as powerful...

Any tips on presentation?

@AceSorou

Here's my super secret method...

Seekrit

I stole CS formats from all over the place... pssst, pssst...

That, plus experience I guess, I've been forum roleplaying for over a decade now.

New Superhero RP (Title is a Work in Progress)

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Alright, so I looked through your CS. I like the effort you put into Camile and her backstory, but her powers are way too strong. These heroes are meant to be rookies, not experts. I think the super strength is fine, but adding in the speed and agility basically make her Mecha Girl Superman, and that's pretty OP (plus another person is making a super speed character). Or she could have enhanced human abilities? Basically, the nanobots allow her to be in peak physical condition, having abilities beyond most humans but without her being Superman (if that makes any sense). I think that plus her research skills and family wealth is pretty impressive as it is.

Also, I'd say Rose Noire would need to be nerfed a little. I'm fine with it cutting through most materials, but a sword shouldn't be able to cut through things like concrete and steel as if they're butter.

Let me know what you think; I can tell you put some thought into your CS and I'm impressed with how quickly you made it.

@Zapdos

Those are fair assessments!

Yeah~ I had the feeling that she's a bit too strong for a week-old superhero career, but since I had no benchmark to compare her against, I decided to lie on the stronger side then nerf as necessary, instead of the other way around.

Also, I have specific replies to this part of your review:

Also, I'd say Rose Noire would need to be nerfed a little. I'm fine with it cutting through most materials, but a sword shouldn't be able to cut through things like concrete and steel as if they're butter.

If we're going by Marvel and/or DC stuff? I don't know... it's pretty wild there, anything goes, a sword that can cut through concrete or steel is even nowhere the strangest thing around.

If we're going by Raiden from MGR, his sword cutting through steel is like 99% of the gameplay, it even has a whole in-combat minigame revolving on how to best cut those steel stuff, just so you have a full context on why I put that in.

Regardless, this is your universe and as the GM, your word is Law. If a supernatural sword in this universe can't cut through steel or concrete, then so it shall be.

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Finally, and most importantly, I've made the edits!

New Superhero RP (Title is a Work in Progress)

@Zapdos Aaand my CS is up for review!

Camille Belrose, Chevalier d'Acier

CAMILLE BELROSE

a.k.a.

CHEVALIER d'ACIER

Theme

Nickname(s):

Cammy, Mille

Age:

25

Gender:

Female

Family:

• Jean-Marie Beaumont (Father)
• Mathilde Belrose (Mother)
• Lucas Beaumont (Younger Brother)

Occupation:

Researcher, R&D Department, Belrose Nanoengineering Inc.

Appearance:

Visual References

Front View

Casual Outfit

Camille is a young-adult woman with pale complexion, raven hair, and reddish-brown eyes. She's quite taller than average, standing at 177cm (5'10") with an average build.

As Chevalier d'Arcier, Camille takes a peculiar form resembling a combat android often seen in sci-fi series. Her arms appear completely mechanical with a forearm-mounted holster for her monosword and her hands appear to be gauntlets of metal claws. A red headband sporting twin horn-like protrusions adorn her scalp, her black hair becomes far longer than normal and gains crimson highlights creeping from the tip of her locks, and a pair of curious shield-shaped hair accessories are perched upon her twintails, these hold throwing daggers which she can quickly fling at enemies. A black skirted leotard adorn her torso complete with a collar that resembles a knight's neck-guard. Finally, a pair of jet-skates adorn her feet.

As herself, Camille prefers to wear comfortable clothes that doesn't stand out too much, a common preference for many modern people really. Unless she's dressing up for a specific occasion, there's not much to describe about the various casual outfits she has. At her work as a nanotech researcher, she wears a white lab coat and sometimes safety googles when the needs arise. If she's currently partaking in her hobby, a digital camera can be seen slung over her neck.

Superpower:

When she engages her power to transform into Chevalier d'Acier, Camille gains superhuman strength and endurance, able to fling an SUV without much straining and her whole body hardens as her skin can shrug off small arms fire, flames, and grenade-tier explosives. Together with her trusty monosword and throwing daggers, she essentially becomes a cutting edge combat cyborg.

Of course, no superhero is perfect, including Camille herself. While her powers may seem quite impressive at first glance, one can notice that all aspects of her power deal only with the physical plane. Therefore, the matters of the spiritual and ethereal are beyond her expertise as she has little means of dealing against the arcane and supernatural. Furthermore, while she has her throwing daggers, her primary method of dealing with hostiles is with her monosword, which means she needs to engage them in melee range to be fully effective.

Skills:

Outside of her superpowers, Camille is a competent engineer specializing in nanotechnology just like her mother, Mathilde Belrose. She holds a Master's Degree in Nanoengineering and currently works in the R&D Department of her family's company.

She also holds some experience at photography, especially landscape photography, however this is merely a hobby to her and as such, she doesn't hold a candle to actual professional photographers.

Equipment:

• Chevalier d'Acier Nanosuit: Formed through the unique nanomachines infused in her body, the suit can be donned at will, transforming her into the titular Knight of Steel, enhancing her abilities to superhuman levels.
• Rose Noire: A part of her costume and her signature weapon, Rose Noire is a curious sword with a mono-molecular cutting edge, enabling it to cut though most mundane materials as easily as a hot knife through butter. However, it's useless against arcane-based powers.
• Pétales Cramoisis: Her only means of ranged combat without external assistance, it takes the form of crimson-red throwing daggers stored in her twin hair accessories. They possess lesser striking power than her sword, but can be thrown reliably for quick ranged strikes. After embedding into the target, it dissolves into particles in a few minutes. Once they're empty, said hair accessories internally form new daggers, reloading themselves. As with her sword, these daggers do nothing against metaphysical powers.

Personality, Biography, and Trivia:

Personality

Mature, conscientious, and disciplined, Camille can be best described as a perfectly functioning member of society. She took more after her engineer mother than her artist father, while her younger brother was the other way around. As such, it was only natural that her mother was more influential in shaping who she becomes as she grew up. She strives her best to maintain a regular sleep schedule, healthy diet, and exercise, and if someone needs a friend who can they rely on in difficult times, Camille would be that person. Even before the meteor 'chose' her for its gifts, the raven-haired woman already possessed the personality of an ideal heroine.

Of course, her no-nonsense approach to life can make her appear as stuffy and humorless. Her self-confidence can lead her to being highly opinionated on certain matters and it could complicate problems rather than solving them. Furthermore, like the rest of this new generation of superheroes, Camille was an ordinary civilian being given great powers, and such a sudden change would carry unpredictable results even for someone as 'ideal' as her. After all, as the saying goes, power corrupts and absolute power corrupts absolutely.

Biography

Born to an American family of French heritage, Camille is the oldest child of an engineer mother and artist father, who decided that they would be keeping their respective last names, leading to Camille possessing her mother's family name while her younger brother took after his father's. She had never found herself wanting of needs as her family was quite wealthy. In fact, her mother was the owner and head researcher of the Belrose Nanoengineering Inc., a firm specializing in the research and manufacture nanotech devices from medical to industrial, while her father was a landscape artist of reputable fame. The former even designed the costumes of more than a few superheroes, boosting the firm's fame even further.

After graduating highschool, she decided to follow after her mother's footsteps and studied nanotech, earning herself both a Bachelor and a Master degree after six years of study in total. Then for the next two years or so, she had been working in the firm as one of the researchers of its R&D Department. To the envy of those less fortunate, Camille indeed had an easier track in life due to her family's wealth and resources, enabling her talents to be discovered and nurtured with rather smooth sailing. It looked like life would continue as usual for the black-haired girl, away from the conflicts between heroes and villains...

Until that one fateful day.

It began as a normal day at work, Camille was tinkering with a new prototype of nanobots, one that's designed to be able to stored in a wristband and when activated, would spread and cover the wearer's body to form a skintight suit. It was when she's wearing one of these wristbands that the meteor passed... and like a few chosen others, something happened to her. Shortly after the mysterious meteor struck, the wristband was somehow infused into her skin, completely without a trace as if it hadn't been there in the first place.

Justifiably, she was shocked and only by her excellent composure that she managed to stop short of panicking. Taking a few deep breaths, she tried to rationalize what just happened, and when that failed, she performed a scan on her arm using the lab's equipment, then this was the moment that nanobots began surfacing from her skin...

Thus, Chevalier d'Arcier was born.

Trivia

• Her faceclaim is Lucia from Punishing: Gray Ravens.
• Her powers is based off Raiden from Metal Gear Rising: Revengeance
• The way she summons her gear is basically this trope: Instant Armor
• Her most favorite hobby is landscape photography.

New Superhero RP (Title is a Work in Progress)

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Great! To answer your questions:

1) I'd like at least 4-5 players, but I don't have an upper limit in mind. I know people do lose interest in RPs or life gets busy, so I want to be prepared for that to be safe.
2) I'd work with the players or have them work with one another to figure out a way to resolve it. Maybe one of them has another idea they can use instead. Of course, if for example Player A posts their laser eyes hero today and Player B posts it five days from now, I'm much more inclined to say Player B should change since they had plenty of "notice" so to speak. In any case, I'll try to be fair and reasonable when working with people.

Does that answer your questions?

@Zapdos

Nice! Yes, you answered those two questions nicely.

I'll get to brainstorming my CS now. Right now, I'm thinking of making a cyber-magical girl of sorts (E.g: Nanoha, Symphogear, Busou Shinki. Basically magical girls with mecha-esque powers), but who knows if my creativity takes me elsewhere.

Excited to be here!

New Superhero RP (Title is a Work in Progress)

@zapdos This looks lit, and the fact that we’re all starting on the same playing field is right up my alley!

A couple of the usual questions:
1. How many players are you thinking of taking in?
2. What happens if two PCs have a set of powers that are quite similar in essence?

Symphony of Espers

--Ambushed--

"Cough! Mmmgh!" Tears ran down her eyes as Valkyrie trusted her legs to carry her to wherever it'd be safe from the lachrymal assault. With not even a second to spare for observation, she could only hope that her lightning bolt of a melody did something against those bastards. A moment later, she found herself inside one of the apartment rooms far away from her previous spot, the air here freed from any irritating white smoke. "Haaa..." While her wincing eyes were still bloodshot and tearing up, she could at least get some fresh air and apparently, whether it was due to her esper form enhanced physique or the tear gas' subpar potency or both, her ocular faculty cleared up faster than she thought it'd be.

This allowed the brunette to clear her mind and focus back on the mission at hand. She made a few grunts as she stood back up, went to the doorway, then peeked out into the hallway before turning her gaze toward the Precinct across the street. "Huh...?" It was at this point that she noticed the mobsters who had been shooting at her suddenly stopped, they couldn't even be seen as a plume of opaque smoke blocked the window. It could mean many things, but the one prevailing theory would be that her lightning bolt snagged a few of them, then they realized that cover meant nothing against her so they decided to retreat out of sight, yep, makes sense.

"Heh~" She was doing quite well considering her odds, that lifted her spirits a little. Although... where's Wukong? Didn't Veronica say that she'll be assisting her? Shit... the monkey didn't get into trouble on the way here, right?

Valkyrie was about to report the situation when her gut warned her that something was up, that inexplicable sixth sense humans have when an impending danger is near. "...?!" However, it still wasn't enough as by the time she whipped about, there was an 80s reject psycho with a gas mask clad in a stolen EOD suit all up in her face. Merry's red-orange pupils constricted in immediate fight or flight instinct and judging by the movement of her trigger finger, it's firmly in the former. However, the hostile was restraining Teslic Gauss' barrel with her arm, then the ominous glint of a combat knife was caught by her peripheral vision-

-Merry didn't think, her body moved on its own as vein-patterned lightning surged down her free left arm, her electrified hand splayed open-

"Kom deg vekk fra meg!!"

BAM!!

A violent boom shook the air akin to a localized lightning strike as Valkyrie slammed said left palm into Viper's chest, the melody cast upon her via touch. If the move was successful, it should result in Viper's torso being paralyzed as her frame was thrown about ten feet back, then Valkyrie would aim the freed railgun and let loose as many sabots as she could at the neon-haired gangster, professionally aimed at her vitals.

If that failed through one way or another, well, getting stabbed was always an option.

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20 | Female | G.E.M.I.N.I. | The Faceless
Teslic Gauss | Long Gun | Physical | Nibelung Valesti
Northern Sentinel | Government Agent
Electromagnetism | Lightning | Static Shock
[Paralysis (4), Speedster (4)], Damage (2), Damage X (6), Push (2), Pull (2), Piercing (2), Bend (0)

DAMAGE: B | SPEED: E | SENTINEL: C | Max Mana: 500

[Bronze Touch] [Paralysis] [Push] = -60 Mana

PHYSICAL: D | ARCANE: E | CHAOS: D | Current Mana: 284

Heartbreaker - A KILLER Isekai Adventure

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Oooooooh trust me I understand completely. First D&D game I was ever in we rolled stats with a rather merciless GM and I ended up the lowest of the bunch, with the highest guy having 20 points over me. My character was completely useless in combat despite being a fighter. And was character-ending-event'ed out of game due to some stupid bullshit I won't get into here, and then the rest of the group joked about how they were gonna brutally murder her later.

I completely understand where you're coming from.

@Lady Lascivious

Thank you for the empathy, and fuck those assholes, it’s certainly worse than my case as in mine, the GM and super PC players had no malicious intentions at all, it was entirely my fault. In yours? Yeah, they need a high-five, to the face, with a bat, laden with spikes.

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To make a long answer short:

Yes. But in general the stronger your character, the stronger I expect you to accordingly think of the consequences, and also the more i'll put them under scrutiny.

@Yam I Am

Hmmmm… alright, then it’s not my cup of tea, apologies, I prefer RPs where the PCs are mandated to have a strictly equal or at most minor differences in raw power.

I cannot continue my participation in good faith as I don’t trust myself to not succumb to my old trauma and be toxic, thus ruining the experience for everyone involved.

Nevertheless, I wish you all great fun in the rp! And perhaps we’ll meet again in the future.

Heartbreaker - A KILLER Isekai Adventure

@Lady Lascivious

Indeed, in the end, it does boil down to how we see the nuances of power and how it affects our enjoyment of the collaborative writing activity.

Oh, I won’t refute your statement about me missing a piece of the puzzle. You are correct. I am well aware that I’m a bit weird when it comes to being sensitive about differences in raw power between the PCs, regardless of themes, nuances, and everything else.

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@Yam I Am Those are very good points. Hmmm… gave me a lot to think about.

So, I don’t wish to drag out this discussion anymore than necessary and fill up the thread with my rambling. I will ask one final question to end it, it may be an obvious question, but here goes:

Will this RP allow Average Joe and Thor PCs to mix?