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@MegaOscarPwn
>writing on paper towels with a crayola marker, using laptop camera and YouTube capture to upload an unlisted 240p video of you flipping through the paper towels in sequence and linking it here.
@Leidenschaft Microsoft Word for cool kids?

Tough chads like me use Grammarly :^).


>Not using notepad as your only word processor
Kristoffer by @ONL
Spelling errors
Albeit not that many exist

Bad dreams
We'd like you to omit this part of the character. As it stands, it feels like something completely tacked on, and if characters are already being effected by horror scenarios then it eliminates the impact the game's events will have on them. The reason that Elgappa's character's bad dreams worked is because he made it part of his character with real effects on him and his family, a reason we were fine with it. Simply stating that Kristoffer has a shapeless presence in his dreams makes it seem like you finished the CS and then went, 'oh, yea, this'd be cool' and just tacked it on. It almost detracts from the solidity of the character, which brings me to the next point.

Self-Preservation
Every human comes with a sense of self-preservation. It's what's kept us evolving for millions of years and all led up to you reading this and me typing it out prior. I am a-okay with Kristoffer being a dirty treehugging hippie DEMOCRAT, but I'm sure that even scientists have an obligation to their fellow human to keep them from dying. I can put money on a vegan stabbing an animal if it attacks them. I'd be okay with Kristoffer being a pacifist, but IIRC, even pacifism has a clause on self-defense and self-preservation. Putting that quirk into his personality traits almost detracts from the character and makes him unlikeable, knowing he'll be a hindrance in any dangerous situation.

Nik by @ihinka
Occupation
Let me preface this by saying that I do apologize, because this critique is entirely my fault. I should have steered you in the right direction from the get-go instead of just going '*like* lol teehee great!'

This is a science expedition put together by the UN to figure out why aquatic species are dying off at catastrophic levels. A mission like this probably wouldn't recruit an archaeologist. I am fine with keeping the archaeozoology, as it's tangentially related to the mission, so you may keep either archaeology or archaeozoology as her Minor and her passion.

The sheet itself is completely squeaky-clean, but all you'd have to do is ctrl+f on Microsoft Word(Or OpenOffice for cool kids like me) and replace archaeology with something else. All that really needs to be done is have Nik major in something that is relevant to the team's mission at hand.
I'll have reviews for @ONL and @ihinka up soon.
Also, and I know we're all guilty of this, but with the lack of updates from some of the others, we might give the go-ahead to move CSs to the Characters tab by this weekend. People who haven't sent in updates or finished CSs will be regularly pinged between tonight and Saturday night. Otherwise, you're considered dead.

@Leidenschaft With the way you’re playing this up I'm genuinely excited to see you tear my CS apart lol


Nothin personnel kid
@DeadDropYOU'LL KNOW WHEN YOU CAN. Once a few more CSs are up and ready for review, we can offer a final verdict before giving some time for stragglers, GRAVSY INCLUDED.
@DervishIt's 2017

It's all the same now

Hi Amber!
@BlitheIntentYou'd better, lil mister
<Snipped quote by Frizan>

Hey man, we all have our kinks, even if they're fucking gross Mr. Frizzle. Good to see you!

Also, looks like I'm spending a few hours the next couple days reading over the first drafts for submissions. We GMs have been taking notes as the sheets come in, but having the critiques in by Thursday may or may not happen quite on time but I shall try!

After that, the application deadline will be Monday November 6th where we will do our final reviews and make our selections for the 8 slots!


When are we going to tell them that we're accepting none of them and have already accepted 8 other people?
@DeadDropLOOK OUT, IT'S RIGHT HEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERE

Just like Gravsy-Wavsy said, I was hard pressed to find flaws in either yours or @Elgappa's CSs, even trying to stretch myself to analyze anything that could be seen as an issue, because I crave tension and conflict to silence my own insecuritiesbut I didn't really find anything glaring or that could be passed over.

And now, like the Japanese watching on in horror as Gojira and Mothra converge on each other on a sandy, cloudy Nihon beach, we wait for Gravy to finish her CS so we can attack each other verbally in passive-aggressive critiques of each other's characters.
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