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Incarceron: A Sci-Fi Intergalactic Imprisonment

Is this thing dieing?

The STARLIGHT Incident

I'm defiantly interested in this! I'll try to write up an app this week.

The Knights of Songbird ~ A Bioshock Roleplay

Who's supposed to post next?

Borderlands 3

Tunks said
You're supposed to pm Gisk with it it.

Sorry! Thanks for telling me.

I Lost the Spirit - A Danny Phantom RP

I'm glad this is still going!

I Lost the Spirit - A Danny Phantom RP

ARK floated around the ghost zone bored out of his mind.. Well if he had a mind he'd be bored out of it but as he drifted through the ghost zone, passing the occasional ghost, he came across a closed portal to the land of the living. ARK enjoyed standing near these when he came across them and listen in on the conversations of the living. Maybe one day he return there through one of these portals and be able to see what it's like on the outside again. As he listened to what sounded like laughing girls he could distinctly hear two others chatting among themselves but they were to far away for him to hear what they were saying. ARK had been to the land of the living once before but soon left when he found out that the way he traveled in there was through a portal in some ghost hunters basement no doubt that it was unnatural but none the less it was still an amazing feat of technological prowess that ARK remembered vaguely of in his after life.

Incarceron: A Sci-Fi Intergalactic Imprisonment

Spookyhat said
It's alright, I started out awful, but after two years of doing RPs and writing chapter-based narrative you sort of get the hang of potholes to avoid. If you need it, I can edit your posts and give feedback. That's what I do for my friends' writings.

Sure I'd like that. I'm fairly new to the whole roleplaying thing.

Borderlands 3

Here's my app. Also tell me if you get the reference to the first level up thing and the last one.

Name: Corhog
Role: The Steel Shield
Appearance:
Action Skill: Primal.exe- He enters an upgraded state where he's able to take more damage and deal quite a bit more while also changing appearance and gaining a fully automatic mini-gun like arm attachment though he become fifty percent slower.
Weapon:
Grenade: transfusion grenade- Take back what is yours!
Shield: vladorf absorb- so you can return what is theirs
Echo Log:

Male voice: *panting* is this thing on? This is Henry Gragathemes please send help. Me and my men were sent on a expedition into this forest looking for something people called a monster which I find amazing considering the things that live on this planet. Anyway they got two of us and now there's only three of us left. I am with one, we were separated from the other we need immediate hel-

Female voice: *screams from far off*

Male voice: ..they got her.. Crud. He'll be coming soon. Please send help pleas- *screams* THERE IT IS SHOOT IT! SHOT IT!

Staticky voice: YOUR BULLETS DO LITTLE TO ME HUMANS. *laughs manically*

Male voice: *screams*

*static*

Level ups:

Just a wet blanket named Pam- He gains the ability to scan the landscape for any hidden or unseen objects or enemies.

Kablamo!- when in Primal.exe mode he can fire small normal rockets and a fairly slow rate instead of throwing grenades.

Ramming speed!- Corhog is able to cause damage to the enemy in his Primal.exe mode by simply running into them.

Wild wisdom- he can enter a state of enlightenment while standing still that gives his weapon more accuracy and a faster reloading speed

It ain't me!- When in Primal.exe he can now take more bullets, dish out more damage and rather than havering his gun arm attachment his arms retract and he's able to fire an awe inspiring laser from his singular eye with great accuracy and even greater damage.

Borderlands 3

Argh! I'm Soo close to fishing my app! I just need a picture then I can upload him! I'm gonna put my limited drawing skills to the test after I stop typing!

Incarceron: A Sci-Fi Intergalactic Imprisonment

Spookyhat said
Not to be picky or anything, but Rocket's post seemed a bit rushed and didn't describe his character in any way, merely rehashing what had already been said. I would suggest you go into detail about his character for a short bit through a minor action or reaction, and then put fuckloads of compound, complex, and other sentences in there instead of having run-ons. Try and pad it with unnecessary details with a lot of separate sentences that actually mean important things.Sorry, but as a very poor writer, I like to force my self-criticisms on others. And take all advice with a few grains of salt: personal style is something everybody should encourage.

I appreciate the criticism :) Sorry about that I'm not the strongest writer but I'll go back and try to make it better.