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The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@Holmishire oh my gosh, I liked your entry to begin with, but didn't see what RomanAria just pointed out. That's probably because I didn't read any of the other entries. I could tell you were taking bits from different stories, BUT OH MY GOSH. Clever, clever -- very impressive!

@Terminal I may have taken the challenge perhaps less seriously than it deserved, but the only way I could conceive of a writer being defeated by a creation is when the creation refuses to play along. I find the entire thing amusing, probably because of how close to home it hits, and perhaps my feelings showed in my writing. That said, the actual story I told is not entirely fictitious. As I commented a few times before, this actually happens to me a lot. Perhaps the specifics are different, but the overarching theme is the same. A new character refuses to talk, or an old character straight up says that I'm writing them wrong, and their actual reaction to something is not what I'd like but something that does nothing for the thing I'm writing. I really do try Q&A sessions with characters to get to know them, though perhaps less formally, or stick them in situations in my head to see how they react. If I'm mocking anything here, it is myself. I'm disappointed that you feel I passed on a technicality, but I can understand where you're coming from and appreciate your honesty.

For the linebreak issue, I guess I need either to stick indents in there for every new paragraph, and not skip lines, or always skip lines. *huffs a sigh* I'm hearing this from several places, and the idea makes me uncomfortable, but I guess that's life.

@RomanAria I can see where my writing lacked the depth I should have tried for. I'm glad you enjoyed it, however.

To both of you, I'm a little confused by the way you handled my story and WiseDragonGirl's. The concept is very similar, and yet each of you judged them differently -- and differently from each other. Term liked Dragon's, and felt she failed on a technicality, while I passed on one. Aria liked mine, and felt Dragon failed because she wasn't truly defeated. Would you mind elaborating a bit further? Term, in your case I'm particularly interested in learning what came across as insincere in my piece, and how I might improve.

What the heck is the Final Hazard? And how will not clearing certain things affect it?

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@Terminal You suck. <3 Can't waaaaiiiit~

Adelon: Steeling the Faith [Open!]

@AlexStarsion In case you don't know, I'm probably skipping this round.

Wings Askew

I need Chuckles to post/collab first, but then I have another post ready to go. Not sure if we're actually going to see the king talk to Gaius onscreen or not, but it takes place before that happens, regardless.

Unquiet

The child slowed as she drew closer to the thing that called itself a god, but suddenly it was gone, and a lady was laughing. A wave of foreboding swept through the child, both a pressure from her magic and chills brought on by the words someone spoke that echoed through the room. She reached the doorway and ducked inside, lifting a hand to shield her eyes that still hadn't adjusted to the brightness after so long in the dark. She dropped it as the singing ground to a halt, and gasped as her vision cleared enough to made out another girl. The other youth was maybe twice her age or a little less, and glowing with a gentle luminescence. But she was wrapped in wires and tubes, some of them burrowing into her like parasites.

The younger child clutched her kitten doll tighter, her stomach knotting at the sight. Who would do something like this? No, Amuné knew the answer. People didn't care about them. The older girl must have magic too, and people had feared and hated her for it as well.

"Like me." The words came out in a hoarse whisper, barely loud enough to be heard. As the light faded, the Seer moved forward, drawn by the girl's plight, and her expression. She knew that look. That inability to do anything. She knew it far too well, and the pain that it brought. She reached out a hesitant hand, not sure if she should touch anything or not. Those tubes couldn't be good, but she didn't know much about healing, and certainly didn't have any medicine or other supplies that she might use to do something. Even bandages would have to be ripped from her own dirty clothing, and that would put bad stuff in an open wound.

The older girl looked weak, too. Was she dying? Was that why she'd stopped singing? Cautiously Amuné touched one of the lines, trying to see how secure it was. A prickle like static ran up her spine and made her shudder. She knew, somehow, that the girl was important, and that she'd been stuck here like this a long time. She traced the path of the tube to where it buried itself in the teen's upper arm, but when her fingertips brushed against skin she froze. A moment later she yanked her away as if burned, stumbling back a few steps. In that brief moment, images had burst into her head, a confusing blur she couldn't draw much sense from. Dark, awful things, like the one that had beein in the other room, beating against a wall, were the thing she saw clearest. But the wall was cracking.

"H-how--" The child's voice voice cracked, rusty from disuse. "How do we fix it? Keep them away?" Regardless of the answer, she steeled herself in case she triggered another vision and slid her hand past the tangle of tubes, to gently grasp the hand of the other girl. "I'll stay for now," she said softly, looking back in the direction she'd come from.

Nobody should have to die alone.

Unquiet

*waves*

Ah, it seems Amune is going to go separately from the others. At least for now. ^.^

Unquiet

*bounces excitedly*

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@Dark Wind I may write the death of my fave char, as demanded by a prior labor. It's even canon!

Bot Killer Squad (Fighting against the RPG bots since 2016)

@Kurai Assassin BKS makes me think Burger King. @.@

The Twelve Labours: General Discussion

@PlatinumSkink I actually didn't give the piece a title. I think Terminal just added that to distinguish it. ^.^;;

As for creating a character that knows things I don't, as in the Internal Debate story, it happens to me all the time, so I can understand where @WiseDragonGirl is coming from. My characters will know things I don't, or are supposed to know a great deal about subjects where I'm clueless, and I end up having to look things up. Alternatively, they start taking on traits I don't intend them to, or doing things I'd rather they didn't. This happens to me all the time. I have a vague memory of telling a teacher in elementary school that I couldn't do some multi-step assignment without starting over because the character I'd come up with wouldn't pay attention to some scenario or other. I got very confused when I was told I should make her pay attention, because it's her choice, not mine, and wasn't this how everyone wrote things, by asking the characters what they'd do?

And don't even get me started on Nikki's twenty-something self, who decided that sixteen-year-old James was the most awkwardly adorable thing /ever/ and she was going to get him to like her whatever it took. Two years later, there's a baby (although that /was/ an accident, and mostly the fault of a third party in the rp. Who messes with a gal's birth control, anyhow?!) Thank goodness age of consent in that canon is not the same as where I live, but it's still a bit creepy and most definitely embarrassing.

As for losing an argument, if the opposition makes solid points, and counters your points, I'd call that a loss. You can keep arguing, but it doesn't make sense to after a certain point. The prompt specifically mentioned conflicts of ideals and viewpoints, and those are going to be discussions, so I feel it's a valid way to go about this challenge.