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@Pudding Right off the bat we have a problem; the Sample Post is obligatory. Sample Post is not Bio, Sample Post is a way for me to know if I accept you or not !

You don't have to write about your character's past. Hell, you don't even need to write about your character, but I included it in it because that is usually what everyone does. In the end, though, I need a Sample Post.

I read the rest real Quick and I probably would need to talk about it with my Co-GM, but to me it doesn't seem like anything else is extremely out of place.

P.S: @Indra @Pudding I have to mention that I am ready to accept only one final player as Hero. Which ever one of you edits first and is accepted can join. It's worth to mention that I might need a new villain soon-ish though, but that is not yet certain.

@JrVader Too lackluster. Quirk not explained enough, lacks details and potentially way too power just from that very small description.
Sample post is also too lackluster. I simply cannot accept this as it is, still needs a lot more work before that point. Sorry.

@Indra As I discussed with my CO-GM, I quite liked the Spice idea. It's just that how you put it made little to no sense.

Since everything pointed to wanting to have a Hero similar to Endeavor, let me say that; If I had been you, I'd have created a Hero with a Quirk that lets him create some sort of extremely spicy substance in either spray or dust form? Since your character idolized Endeavor, I would have made it so the character was constantly laughed at for his Quirk that seemed so insignificant compared to the number 2, but who keeps trying. It's the perfect under dog story of someone who never gives up, and eventually makes something of his quirk.

Otherwise, going for a classic Fire Quirk, yet blue, is also fine with me if you prefer that.

Make your choice if it's not already done and poke me when you edited your sheet, please. :3
@Indra Hey !

That Quirk sure seems original, but I have many problems and confusion about it.

First: Spices have nothing to do with actual Heat, so while I understand the idea behind pairing the two for style, some of the things you wrote makes little sense. To me, he's just another Fire Quirk, but with blue flames. Everything Spice related makes little to no sense, and the MHA universe powers, or Quirks, are built around the fact that they basically have to make logical sense.

Furthermore, keepîng in mind that at this point his Quirk is basically just any other Fire Quirk, I also have problems with the moves. Producing Fire or Electricity is a thing but shaping and using it is another. I rewathced Endeavor's fight scene, and he does shape it into balls that he shoots or, at one point, a sort of Javelin - my guess is that it takes load of training to learn to master a Quirk to this level. And he's world wide 2nd Best Hero. The one Move where you are cloaked In flames seems OK, but the two others are way too advanced for a student. He may learn it as the story goes forward, but it takes time to master a Quirk.

Even more than that, the Sample Post is too little too few. I am not talking in terms of length, of which I do not care, but the Quality isn't there. It feels as if it's written Hastily, and it tries to skip over some information which should be described more deeply. It lacks something, and it's not high quality enough that I could accept it as it is !

You can Edit it all, if you wish it, then poke me that I can take a second look at it.
@Genon Androids doesn't really suit the MHA universe... Every Quirks are related to some form of mutations, true, but I don't think a human can mutate to be born robotic with not-biological body parts.

Unfortunately, I can't accept this Quirk. Plus, even if it wasn't for that, the Quirk itself has too many advantages and the best of all worlds, it's not balanced properly. I suggest reading a Wiki of MHA to inspire yourself from existing Quirks and see the difference in power and design to this one, or even just our CS Tab for inspiration and what not.

@Pudding
Hey ! I've seen your WIP, I'm just waiting for it to be finished before analyzing it and giving feed back. :3




If this had been your regular old anime, the heroes might have used this encounter in some way that it would have strengthened their skills and made them more aware of their shortcomings. The weekend would have been used to make friends, render their bonds as a team stronger. Maybe they did that, in their own way, or on their last day off - but mostly, it seemed, a wave of negativism submerged the group; regrets, guilt, anger and frustration were the name of the game.

Monday's weather seemed to agree with our heroes, as the sky was filled with grey clouds and rain poured down on the city. Despite everything, they were of course expected to show up for their classes once the week began. Unless of course if their injuries were too severe and didn't permit it. The first half of their day was filled with regular academic classes. Even heroes had to learn and pass those, of course. Those teachers were your regular, everyday teachers who focused on the class subject and did their best to avoid mentioning hero work too much. So, the morning would be filled with English, History and Economy and the such.

Time soon came around for the lunch break, and as everyone would be gathering their things the English teacher spoke up

"Ah Yes! Everyone, this afternoon's first part of Hero Training class with Mr. Hayes is cancelled due to an important meeting. He has instructed me to tell you all to take this free time for extra study. Do not take it lightly, Mr. Hayes is known for his surprise tests after all."


Generally speaking, when they had Hero Training in the afternoon it was split in two parts; Physical then Academic - which meant that the physical part was the one cancelled. Depending on the student, this was either a good or bad new. What was more, it was also true that Mr. Hayes was not known to cancel his classes ever. Which meant this meeting was of some importance.




"How much?" said Mr. Hayes. He was sitting at a long table in the Principal's office along with four other teachers and, instead of Enterprise, the man who had come to their help at the Factory on Saturday. It seemed they were in a conference call with someone over the phone. "Too much." the voice answered.

"With that they stole, they could muster a small army. Or worst."

Silence fell on the table while the information was seeking in. All the gear they stole did not only mean they amassed that much wealth, but it also meant that it most likely would end up on the streets thanks to the black market. In the hands of common thugs. "Troubling news, but nothing that we can do about it - What about their identity and motives? Any news on that part?"

Arthur, as was his, was a tall man and handsome man; short, well kept black hair and a focused and serious look. He almost always wore a vest ontop of his clothing with his arms under it, not in the sleeves. He missed his left arm and always has his cane with the other arm. Arthur was born without an arm only for him and his family to discover way later in his life that this was to be his Quirk. Arthur was also known as Fate's Hand, his hero's name, otherwise known as the 2nd Pro Hero in the country, after Enterprise. He was chosen to replace her as Principal, a position which he accepted.

"We're looking into it, it's only a question of time. What about Enterprise?"


Mr Hayes would be the one to answer; "Well, for now she's...

...as good as dead." answered Noxious back at her interlocutor.

(No more Rainy Mood)



She was standing, in the room where she and her Villain's League had first met. The room, along with most of the hideout, had been developed and upgraded. From the exterior it still looked like a ruin, but the inside now had rooms for those who might need a place to lay low or stay at. The 'conference' room was now Noxious' quarters. Gone were the crates, power generators and wires. In it stead the floor had been equalized and, in the corner, a personal training area. This was where Noxious was standing, punching and kicking away at a punching bag between her answers. She was in her combat outfit.

The person she spoke to was on screen, although their identity was masked by a dark veil of shadow. Classic. Only a few persons knew that All For One was the one leading the League of Villains. Most thought him dead - this was not All for One. Just like Noxious led this branch of the League, her direct superior led the branch of the League in North America.

"If I had reached her, she would already be dead. I scraped her cheek with one finger. The poison will take hold, but it will take time since the dose was minimal. I do not know how long it will take, just that the result is assured." she said, taking a break and walking away towards the screen, while stretching her arms.

"Leave nothing to chance. You are a professional - act professional. I want to be certain of Enterprise demise - the last vestige of All Might's ideals - before we proceed with the plan. Still, you know what to do. I will trust you with the next steps, do not disappoint us, Miss Araraki."

The purple haired villain did not display the acknowledgement of her superior's order. No nod, no words - just a stare at the screen until it closed and left her alone in a room where, once more, her comrades were supposed to join her shortly. The next part of the plan was bound to be even more exciting.
@Genon I don't like how you wrote this Quirk. It's too versatile, not focused enough and not well balanced in my opinion. Gaining speed and pwoer from storing sound sounds just like an excuse to have another hero with super strength and speed, which are two things that are supposed to be a lot more rare in MHA than other super heroes stories. I just feels like literally everyone wants that, and it's a bit annoying to be honest.

A quirk that blocks sound around himself and store it to use it back in sounds shockwaves sounded do-able, but I'm not ready to accept the accumulation part that makes him stronger for no good reason.
@Tenma Tendo I suggest joining the Discord to discuss it more easily, if you have Discord ! It helps tons.

:3
@Tenma Tendo This Quirk is fine as it is, I think. She can't put too many big objects in herself (This is going to become awkward fast) and just storing things isn't useful enough that I'd think it's OP without a limit. Beside the amount of things she stores is limited by the size of her own body and available place for tattoo, as well as being vulnerable to lose them if she'S wounded. I think this Quirk already feels like a Quirk enough as it is.

I'm ready to accept this character as it is, just wait for BlackCat's Approval. :)

@Ryonara From what I see, I think you can post the CS, but make sure BlackCat said it's fine, too, first.
@Genon I'll check that tomorrow. It's getting late here, I'm heading to bed. :P

@Tenma Tendo The second one seems easier to make a Quirk out of. It actually sounds like a good MHA Quirk alright ! I'd like to see a CS of such a concept !
@Tenma Tendo Yup. Still accepting as it is. I'd like to hear those Quirks. :P
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