@Holy Grail There are 10 accepted mages and 10 accepted familiars I do believe. once we get 12 mages and 12 familiars we won't be accepting any more cs' at this time. this isn't to say that its first come first serve. It's if we approve of your cs first. Right now we're looking over and discussing 4 cs's right now, but don't let that discourage you from submitting your cs!
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Okay, since this is a lot of CS’s to review at once, I’m gonna break each review up into hiders to save space.
@Redmarshmellow
@Ryik
@Hippo AF
@Natsu
@Republic
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@Redmarshmellow
We have a number of concerns with your character, focused mostly on her history, personality, and her interests. To start with, your character is an obsessive gamer with ADHD, and very little is mention of her school or social life. How does she maintain excellent grades and social skills when she is essentially a NEET? There is too little here on her social life, school, or family life, and too much on her career in gaming. Her entire character revolves around gaming, there is not a single aspect that is not related, in some way, shape, or form, to video games. This is simply not realistic, even in people who have ADD and ADHD.
In addition, your character’s way of living with her ADHD doesn’t seem like ADHD at all. People with attention deficit disorders have a problem with focus, they either are not focused at all, or hyper focus on one thing, making it difficult to get other things done. I know this because my mother has lived with ADD her whole life, and I have attention deficit problems myself. The way you frame your character’s disorder makes it seem more like she’s completely obsessed and fixated on video games in a way that isn’t healthy. The kind of stim she appears to be seeking from them seems more akin to an obsessive-compulsive behavior or mild autism.
Your character’s ADHD also conflicts with her personality, and there are other conflicting issues here. How can she be calm and hyper at the same time? That is not possible. Some people with hyper personalities do have lulls of calm, and sometimes people with calm personalities can be very enthusiastic. But generally, they are polar opposite personalities. Please pick one or the other, but not both.
Next issue also relates to her ADHD. She has it and her obsession with video games, but has no problems whatsoever with school work? How is this possible? Is she receiving therapy, medication, and tutoring? Please either specify how your character is living with her disorder and obsession or lower her grades and social skills to a more plausible level.
Another issue is with her parents and background. She’s the daughter of a wealthy game retailer, yet they live above one of their game stores? This isn’t Yu-Gi-Oh. Please give them an actual house more fitting to their means, or give a reason why they would be so frugal. Also, her parents constant neglect of her seems to be the reason why she developed an obsession with gaming in the first place. Why then, when their daughter becomes depressed, do they decide to send her to an incredibly demanding private boarding school with no mention of supports for her disability or her depression? This does not fit with the earlier characterization of her parents as too busy to have time for her. Why waste $30,000 on boarding school when she’s more likely than not to fail? Also, how did she get diagnosed with ADHD if her parents have no time for her? Please elaborate.
On the issue of her sexuality, can you please clarify? Is she bisexual? Asexual? Aromantic bisexual? Straight? Please explain her sexuality in a way that is clearer and more concise.
Finally, on the issue of her gaming career. How was a 10-year old able to host an e-sports tournament all by herself? I don’t know what your history is, but when I was ten, I could barely handle neopets and club penguin at the same time, much less organize, advertise, and run a prominent gaming tournament. How did a 12-year old win e-tournaments? Moreover, how did a 12-year old win these professional e-sports tournaments AND keep up well in her studies AND keep a good social life at the same time? It would be impossible for a functioning adult to do all three, much less a 12-year old with ADHD, and no mention of any supports. Moreover, why did losing an e-sports match make her become so depressed and drawn in? Even real athletes don’t respond to losing in this way. I can understand a childish sore-loser temperament, but if she loves gaming so much, why would she then abandon this career?
All in all, your character is too one note with her interests, history, and personality. To fix this character, I would completely rework her history to either make her less adept at gaming, or give her realistic consequences for spending all her time obsessed with video games. I would also make her ADHD more realistic and expand on how it affects her, or change it to an obsessive-compulsive behavior or mild autism. I would also fix the contradictions in her family life and personality, and diversify her interests so that she has other things than video games in her life. Your character needs heavy edits, but is still salvageable. However, we cannot accept her as she is. Please edit your CS, and we will review it again.
In addition, your character’s way of living with her ADHD doesn’t seem like ADHD at all. People with attention deficit disorders have a problem with focus, they either are not focused at all, or hyper focus on one thing, making it difficult to get other things done. I know this because my mother has lived with ADD her whole life, and I have attention deficit problems myself. The way you frame your character’s disorder makes it seem more like she’s completely obsessed and fixated on video games in a way that isn’t healthy. The kind of stim she appears to be seeking from them seems more akin to an obsessive-compulsive behavior or mild autism.
Your character’s ADHD also conflicts with her personality, and there are other conflicting issues here. How can she be calm and hyper at the same time? That is not possible. Some people with hyper personalities do have lulls of calm, and sometimes people with calm personalities can be very enthusiastic. But generally, they are polar opposite personalities. Please pick one or the other, but not both.
Next issue also relates to her ADHD. She has it and her obsession with video games, but has no problems whatsoever with school work? How is this possible? Is she receiving therapy, medication, and tutoring? Please either specify how your character is living with her disorder and obsession or lower her grades and social skills to a more plausible level.
Another issue is with her parents and background. She’s the daughter of a wealthy game retailer, yet they live above one of their game stores? This isn’t Yu-Gi-Oh. Please give them an actual house more fitting to their means, or give a reason why they would be so frugal. Also, her parents constant neglect of her seems to be the reason why she developed an obsession with gaming in the first place. Why then, when their daughter becomes depressed, do they decide to send her to an incredibly demanding private boarding school with no mention of supports for her disability or her depression? This does not fit with the earlier characterization of her parents as too busy to have time for her. Why waste $30,000 on boarding school when she’s more likely than not to fail? Also, how did she get diagnosed with ADHD if her parents have no time for her? Please elaborate.
On the issue of her sexuality, can you please clarify? Is she bisexual? Asexual? Aromantic bisexual? Straight? Please explain her sexuality in a way that is clearer and more concise.
Finally, on the issue of her gaming career. How was a 10-year old able to host an e-sports tournament all by herself? I don’t know what your history is, but when I was ten, I could barely handle neopets and club penguin at the same time, much less organize, advertise, and run a prominent gaming tournament. How did a 12-year old win e-tournaments? Moreover, how did a 12-year old win these professional e-sports tournaments AND keep up well in her studies AND keep a good social life at the same time? It would be impossible for a functioning adult to do all three, much less a 12-year old with ADHD, and no mention of any supports. Moreover, why did losing an e-sports match make her become so depressed and drawn in? Even real athletes don’t respond to losing in this way. I can understand a childish sore-loser temperament, but if she loves gaming so much, why would she then abandon this career?
All in all, your character is too one note with her interests, history, and personality. To fix this character, I would completely rework her history to either make her less adept at gaming, or give her realistic consequences for spending all her time obsessed with video games. I would also make her ADHD more realistic and expand on how it affects her, or change it to an obsessive-compulsive behavior or mild autism. I would also fix the contradictions in her family life and personality, and diversify her interests so that she has other things than video games in her life. Your character needs heavy edits, but is still salvageable. However, we cannot accept her as she is. Please edit your CS, and we will review it again.
@Ryik
You asked for it, here it is.
First off, remove the “weeb” terminology in your character’s personality, please. There is no “Japan” in this world, though there are countries that are similar to it. If your character has an avid interest in foreign media and games, specify. If you would like permission to create a country that he can have an avid interest in the media they produce, PM us and we can discuss this.
Next off, the issue of your character’s backstory. I’m not gonna comment on killing off the mom, since that seems like a running trope a lot of characters lives. (You guys can form a “My Mom is Dead” club! :D) Instead my issue is with the father. From the sounds of it, your character’s father was a drunkard before the boys were even toddlers. How did he take care of his infant children when he was 1) Drunk constantly and 2) Running a business? Was the business affected by his drunken stupor? Surely his employers or board of directors would have a problem with a constantly inebriated employee. Please give more specifics as to their father’s depression and addiction, and also give them a figure that raised them. Given their wealth, a nanny or stewardess would be appropriate.
In addition, if he’s still a depressed drunk as the boys grow up, are they not concerned or attached to their father at all? He’s clearly an individual who needs help. Upon becoming teenagers, his sons should know that their father needs help. Please give them more of a reactive connection to their father. Who would abandon a family member in need of help to go off on an adventure? That goes beyond carefree and irresponsible to downright apathetic.
Lastly, this is a request from the GM’s personally, but we want Kaison’s brother to be one year younger. We do not want him attending the academy at the same time as his brother. This is to prevent something we’ve all seen happen in RPs over the years, and it’s something we call ‘character smuggling”. Essentially, a player creates a character, and gives them a static NPC that they’re very close to, a sibling, parent, child, or best friend. The player then plays the static character in a way that would make them a main character. In essence, the player has smuggled in 2 characters for the price of 1. In the most egregious case we’ve seen, a player managed to smuggle 2 separate siblings in his CS, which he then played as 3 characters. This was in an RP where the rule was 1 character per player. We do not want this, and Kaison’s brother attending the academy and the same time he does dangerously toes this line. We are not saying you need to remove the brother entirely, but please do not have them attend at the same time. Either make the brother a year younger, or have him rejected from the academy, I don’t care. But I do not want them both attending.
With that being said, please remove the erroneous terminology in your CS, give the children and their father more backstory, and remove the brother from the academy. We will review your CS again after these changes have been made.
First off, remove the “weeb” terminology in your character’s personality, please. There is no “Japan” in this world, though there are countries that are similar to it. If your character has an avid interest in foreign media and games, specify. If you would like permission to create a country that he can have an avid interest in the media they produce, PM us and we can discuss this.
Next off, the issue of your character’s backstory. I’m not gonna comment on killing off the mom, since that seems like a running trope a lot of characters lives. (You guys can form a “My Mom is Dead” club! :D) Instead my issue is with the father. From the sounds of it, your character’s father was a drunkard before the boys were even toddlers. How did he take care of his infant children when he was 1) Drunk constantly and 2) Running a business? Was the business affected by his drunken stupor? Surely his employers or board of directors would have a problem with a constantly inebriated employee. Please give more specifics as to their father’s depression and addiction, and also give them a figure that raised them. Given their wealth, a nanny or stewardess would be appropriate.
In addition, if he’s still a depressed drunk as the boys grow up, are they not concerned or attached to their father at all? He’s clearly an individual who needs help. Upon becoming teenagers, his sons should know that their father needs help. Please give them more of a reactive connection to their father. Who would abandon a family member in need of help to go off on an adventure? That goes beyond carefree and irresponsible to downright apathetic.
Lastly, this is a request from the GM’s personally, but we want Kaison’s brother to be one year younger. We do not want him attending the academy at the same time as his brother. This is to prevent something we’ve all seen happen in RPs over the years, and it’s something we call ‘character smuggling”. Essentially, a player creates a character, and gives them a static NPC that they’re very close to, a sibling, parent, child, or best friend. The player then plays the static character in a way that would make them a main character. In essence, the player has smuggled in 2 characters for the price of 1. In the most egregious case we’ve seen, a player managed to smuggle 2 separate siblings in his CS, which he then played as 3 characters. This was in an RP where the rule was 1 character per player. We do not want this, and Kaison’s brother attending the academy and the same time he does dangerously toes this line. We are not saying you need to remove the brother entirely, but please do not have them attend at the same time. Either make the brother a year younger, or have him rejected from the academy, I don’t care. But I do not want them both attending.
With that being said, please remove the erroneous terminology in your CS, give the children and their father more backstory, and remove the brother from the academy. We will review your CS again after these changes have been made.
@Hippo AF
To start off with, his history. Child abuse. I have to ask, does that seem fitting in a slice of life RP to you? It’s in the rules that torture is not allowed in a character’s backstory. Constant beatings classify as torture. Remove this entirely.
Next off, the parents. If they were known for their connections to an underground black market, and INFAMOUS for this, then your character would most certainly not be allowed at the academy. Having the son of an infamous pair of criminals would be a blemish on St. Fortuna’s name. If the public didn’t know of their criminal activity, that would be one thing, but in that case, they wouldn’t be infamous, would they? Please change this.
If his uncle knew about his parents misdeeds and beating their child, why would he not get the police to intervene? If he loves his nephew, surely it’s worth blemishing the business name to stop him from getting beaten constantly? Its not like you can explain away severe bruises and broken bones on a child to “oh, he fell down the stairs”. At this point, the uncle is completely irrelevant to anything in the history.
Lastly, there is no reason or way for Draco to be attending the academy, other than revenge. Why would his parents, who beat him up so often, send him to a prestigious magical academy? Why not just lock him in a basement and beat him some more? Why give him the skills to take them down?
Also, solitary is not a food. Please reread the rules, and change your password.
All in all, you must redo this character’s entire history. Child abuse is against the rules, and I’m being nice to you by giving you a chance to redo it. If he continues to have child abuse in his backstory, your CS will be rejected.
Next off, the parents. If they were known for their connections to an underground black market, and INFAMOUS for this, then your character would most certainly not be allowed at the academy. Having the son of an infamous pair of criminals would be a blemish on St. Fortuna’s name. If the public didn’t know of their criminal activity, that would be one thing, but in that case, they wouldn’t be infamous, would they? Please change this.
If his uncle knew about his parents misdeeds and beating their child, why would he not get the police to intervene? If he loves his nephew, surely it’s worth blemishing the business name to stop him from getting beaten constantly? Its not like you can explain away severe bruises and broken bones on a child to “oh, he fell down the stairs”. At this point, the uncle is completely irrelevant to anything in the history.
Lastly, there is no reason or way for Draco to be attending the academy, other than revenge. Why would his parents, who beat him up so often, send him to a prestigious magical academy? Why not just lock him in a basement and beat him some more? Why give him the skills to take them down?
Also, solitary is not a food. Please reread the rules, and change your password.
All in all, you must redo this character’s entire history. Child abuse is against the rules, and I’m being nice to you by giving you a chance to redo it. If he continues to have child abuse in his backstory, your CS will be rejected.
@Natsu
One small error. In where is says “Mage or Familiar”, you put male. I’m going to assume you meant mage, and otherwise do not imply that you have fully harnessed the power of testosterone.
In the event that that is true, *trumpets sound* Congratulations! You’re accepted! Your magic is a complicated one, Weather Magic! Your character can harness the power of weather, to change its form and use it to their advantage! A difficult magic to master for sure, weather magic is rather weak for beginners, with most hardly able to conjure a slight change. However, as you grow more skilled, you can summon or banish powerful storms, increase the duration of your magic’s effects, and even wield the destructive forces of nature under your very fingertips! Zeus trembles before you!
In the event that that is true, *trumpets sound* Congratulations! You’re accepted! Your magic is a complicated one, Weather Magic! Your character can harness the power of weather, to change its form and use it to their advantage! A difficult magic to master for sure, weather magic is rather weak for beginners, with most hardly able to conjure a slight change. However, as you grow more skilled, you can summon or banish powerful storms, increase the duration of your magic’s effects, and even wield the destructive forces of nature under your very fingertips! Zeus trembles before you!
@Republic
Okay, the first and biggest thing is what makes me mad the most. You world built. You didn’t even PM us to ask if it was okay to create a new country, you just went ahead and did it. You made a wholly new country. If you will look at every other character accepted, they are all from Prydain. If you wanted a new country to be from, you should have PM’d us and discussed it. So no, no way jose. Remove that entirely. You get to be from Prydain. Remove everything having to do with this unapproved country.
Also, your character was born a paraplegic. Merriam-Webster defines paraplegic as “partial or complete paralysis of the lower half of the body with involvement of both legs that is usually due to injury or disease of the spinal cord in the thoracic or lumbar region.” Specify on whether he has complete paralysis or not, because if it is complete, then he will not be able to use crutches. In addition, most mobile paraplegics and wheelchair bound people have developed immense upper body strength, due to their need to use their arms to move their chair. If that were the case, your character would not be thin and frail. Please correct this.
In addition, his frugality is never explained. Why? Give a reason for it. Also, give a reason why his overprotective parents would let him go to a boarding school.
Lastly, the problem of Oriental. Oriental means eastern, and is sometimes used as a slur to refer to people from east asia. Not only that, but although there are countries that resemble asian cultures in this world, you do not know where that are. They could be north, souther, east or west of Prydain. You are still world building here. Stop that.
In conclusion, your character needs to be almost entirely rewritten. Remove all world building, and make him from Prydain. Get rid of the offensive terminology. Specify his disability, and give him more upper body strength. We will review your CS when it’s re-written.
Also, your character was born a paraplegic. Merriam-Webster defines paraplegic as “partial or complete paralysis of the lower half of the body with involvement of both legs that is usually due to injury or disease of the spinal cord in the thoracic or lumbar region.” Specify on whether he has complete paralysis or not, because if it is complete, then he will not be able to use crutches. In addition, most mobile paraplegics and wheelchair bound people have developed immense upper body strength, due to their need to use their arms to move their chair. If that were the case, your character would not be thin and frail. Please correct this.
In addition, his frugality is never explained. Why? Give a reason for it. Also, give a reason why his overprotective parents would let him go to a boarding school.
Lastly, the problem of Oriental. Oriental means eastern, and is sometimes used as a slur to refer to people from east asia. Not only that, but although there are countries that resemble asian cultures in this world, you do not know where that are. They could be north, souther, east or west of Prydain. You are still world building here. Stop that.
In conclusion, your character needs to be almost entirely rewritten. Remove all world building, and make him from Prydain. Get rid of the offensive terminology. Specify his disability, and give him more upper body strength. We will review your CS when it’s re-written.
@onenote
This is the worst CS I’ve seen in my life. You suck. Get out of my RP. (JK, I love you~)
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While I'm not so sure he'd completely break Nathan's barriers, the desire to learn more could be common ground that they both have. Something that makes it to where Nathan doesn't mind his company but doesn't go out of his way to be in his company, if that makes sense.
While I'm not so sure he'd completely break Nathan's barriers, the desire to learn more could be common ground that they both have. Something that makes it to where Nathan doesn't mind his company but doesn't go out of his way to be in his company, if that makes sense.
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@onenoteThis is the worst CS I’ve seen in my life. You suck. Get out of my RP. (JK, I love you~)
Well, guys, the GM has spoken! *flies off into outer space*
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<Snipped quote by Invader Len>
Well, guys, the GM has spoken! *flies off into outer space*
*Lassos you back* Get your ass back here, I'm not running a 3-man show with 2 people.
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Wow, we didn't expect to get this many people! So far we have one mage spot and two familiar spots left. Also, the only unused mage power left is ice, so that will be for the next accepted mage. I'm looking forward to RPing with you all!
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Awesomesauce, thank you very much.
Can you give me some examples of how weather magic is used in different circumstances? (Combat, day to day use, professions etc.)
Can you give me some examples of how weather magic is used in different circumstances? (Combat, day to day use, professions etc.)
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The turn out is pretty amazing for this I gotta say. Great to see some of ya brainstorming with each other too.
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@General Scales thanks XD we've thought about this rp for awhile now and we're really glad its coming out well so far.
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Awesomesauce, thank you very much.
Can you give me some examples of how weather magic is used in different circumstances? (Combat, day to day use, professions etc.)
Sure! Starting off, the spells you can learn with weather are Summon, Enhance, Enchant, Alter and Grow. I’ll tell you what they all do.
Summon means you can summon a random change in weather. It doesn’t last very long, and the weather passes quickly. You can summon gusts of wind, light rain, clouds or sunshine, or even change the temperature. Summon begins a start in the change in weather, though it’s not very powerful and confined to a small area. You might even summon tiny rain clouds over a small, specific area, or summon a beam of sunlight.
The real power houses for weather come from Enhance, Enchant, Alter, and Grow. I’ll start with grow.
Grow means that you can exacerbate the effects of the current weather conditions, whether they are natural or you summoned them. Hot summer day? Make it even hotter. Raining outside? It rains even more. Not sunny enough for you? Away, clouds! How much you change the effects of the weather depend on how much energy you put into it, but you can definitely ruin a fire mage’s day by making the rain worse!
Enhance and Enchant are higher levels spells having to do with tools and weapons. Enhance lets you channel your energy through a tool and thus enhance it. Have a copper pipe? You can use your weather magic to enhance it into a natural lightning rod. Maybe even direct that lightning out at other players. You can’t control if the lightning happens or not exactly when you want it to, but you can control where it goes and who gets zapped when it does happen. Then enhancements are only present, however, so long as you are channeling your magic into the item you’re enhancing.
Enchanting, on the other hand, is a very powerful spell that takes a lot of practice to learn. By enchanting objects to your element, you give them new uses, and they can be used by ANY mage, regardless of element. An umbrella that rains inside whenever it’s opened. A staff that zaps whoever it touches. A hat that ensures that a beam of sunshine will fall on the wearer whenever they’re out an about. Every enchantment is unique, and completely up to the caster.
Finally, Alter. A must-have spell for weather mages, Alter lets you change the current weather, but to whatever you want it to be. If you want it to snow in july, it will. Stop the rain? It’s gone. You decide what the weather will be like. However, the farther away the change in weather you want is from the current one, the harder it will be to summon, and the more energy it will take. In addition, the weather will eventually return to its natural state in a matter of hours after the spell is cast. No perpetual blizzards in summer, sorry.
While it doesn’t have many uses in close combat, weather magic gives a mage a huge advantage over those who rely on other elements. They can melt an ice mage’s structures, incapacitate a fire mage with rain, or dampen an earth mage’s spirits with mud. How you choose to use your magic, however, is up to you. :)
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I can appreciate the effort behind all this, and also just chatting with us for fun too.
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That's pretty awesome, thank you so much.
Bonus question, is it weakened or thwarted when inside?
Bonus question, is it weakened or thwarted when inside?
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That's pretty awesome, thank you so much.
Bonus question, is it weakened or thwarted when inside?
It would still happen, regardless of whether you’re inside or out. However, you might want to refrain from causing rainstorms inside class rooms, as that will probably get you detention.
@General Scales Of course! We’re players too, albeit ones with more power and responsibility within this RP. I am of the firm belief that it’s a GM’s duty to answer all their player’s questions and concerns, to take feedback, reward helpfulness, and encourage friendliness between the players and GM. Happy RP’s are successful RP’s, and I want things to be enjoyable for everyone involved. :D
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We have any kind of military school or academy?
This is an academy, not a military institution. It is a private boarding school for the elite, or anyone who can pay for it. It does have scholarships available for those who can't pay, but thy must have outstanding grades and no criminal record. Read the school rules and overview of Prydain for specific details.
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@Invader Len13org's question reminds me that another question that I asked before never got answered, though it wasn't directed at you and probably should've had some mentions attached to it to make it more visible. Anyway, I was wondering if there were any adventuring-focused electives that could be joined, such as one that focuses on Monster Hunting?
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𝔏𝔢𝔬 𝔍𝔬𝔥𝔫 𝔡𝔢 ℭ𝔬𝔢𝔲𝔯
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Short, wavy blonde hair and sharp, electric, blue eyes set in a near constant glare, with a heavy and masculine body that is evidence of his efforts to keep himself in shape, Leo is at first, second and third glance, true, blue nobility. It shows in the way he keeps himself upright, the relaxed but measured way he moves, and the sharp - and high quality - way he dresses himself. He stands at exactly 6'5''; he often wears a signet ring on his right had, which bears the seal of his family.
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16
Gender:
Male
Orientation:
Heterosexual
Mage or Familiar:
Mage
Magic Type:「 」
Known Spells:「 」
Partner: 「 」
Personality:
Unchildlike is the first way to describe him - at first glance, he's entirely too serious, uptight, and generally not much fun to be around. Once people get to know him better, however, they find that . . . he is entirely too serious and uptight most of the time; though around people he is comfortable with, he tends to relax more, and is even capable of making jokes, though those come rarely - they also find he is not above teasing people, when the opportunity presents itself.
Leo is simply put, Noblesse Oblige, personified; and he applies this mentality in a very broad sense. If you are in a position of power, you are obligated to help, if you aren't then you should strive to be - those are the core thoughts that embody his personality. Due to this, he tends to work hard in order to keep with the standards the he himself set. Unfortunately, he also has a tendency to hold others to this standard, which might come off as overbearing to most.
He is in general, a very calm and methodical person, and not quick to anger - once his anger has boiled over, however, it's extremely difficult to temper. A trait he's not gone around to fixing quite yet, much to his shame.
Strangely enough, Leo has little attachment to his family name or the honor that comes with it; he's more focused on the 'nobility' aspect that comes with it, and is the way he is because he believes that the word comes with its own importance, and that whatever family holds on to that title is merely an addition - in short words, 'noble' before 'family'.
He is a large believer in the power of an individuals choice, and that any difficulty can be surmounted, provided one is willing to work hard enough and endure the suffering that comes with it.
Leo is simply put, Noblesse Oblige, personified; and he applies this mentality in a very broad sense. If you are in a position of power, you are obligated to help, if you aren't then you should strive to be - those are the core thoughts that embody his personality. Due to this, he tends to work hard in order to keep with the standards the he himself set. Unfortunately, he also has a tendency to hold others to this standard, which might come off as overbearing to most.
He is in general, a very calm and methodical person, and not quick to anger - once his anger has boiled over, however, it's extremely difficult to temper. A trait he's not gone around to fixing quite yet, much to his shame.
Strangely enough, Leo has little attachment to his family name or the honor that comes with it; he's more focused on the 'nobility' aspect that comes with it, and is the way he is because he believes that the word comes with its own importance, and that whatever family holds on to that title is merely an addition - in short words, 'noble' before 'family'.
He is a large believer in the power of an individuals choice, and that any difficulty can be surmounted, provided one is willing to work hard enough and endure the suffering that comes with it.
Biography:
The eldest son and heir to the de Coeur family, a noble house that can trace its roots back centuries, and which boasts not only ludicrous wealth, but a strong political pull in the House of Lords, though none among their number is a currently seated. The de Coeur family has long held on to the reigns of nobility, and has long established itself as a family that demands attention and gets it.
Leo, as the eldest, was born with many expectations on his shoulders. He was the next head, the first son, and first child of the current head; most kids would have buckled under the pressure, and Leo was no exception. As a child he was a nervous and stuttering wreck, and an immense disappointment to his parents, who made no secret of it. He would run away from his lessons, cry when he was unable to understand something, and hide from his many tutors. Often times he would spend the whole day shut in his room.
The only ally he had during those times was his nana, who would read him a story to sleep every night. It was perhaps mostly due to her that he became the person he is today. His nanny, an old woman who had served the family for decades, was a calming and peaceful influence on his otherwise chaotic life. She constantly cheered him on, and with every story she read, he reminded him that more than what his parents wanted him to be, he should first strive to be himself, and aim for what he wanted.
While he understood the words, he didn't necessarily take them to heart, until the day she was retired.
It happened quickly, so quickly that he wasn't aware of it. The old maid's work preformance had been declining with age, and soon enough, it was necessary that she stopped working; the only problem was that she could not. She had a family to feed, three grandchildren and a daughter in law who could barely get by on her own salary. It was practically the old maids money that kept them afloat.
When Leo heard about this, for the first time in his life, he confronted his father in what basically amounted to a shouting match - of course, he was the only one shouting. His father simply stood at him and stared.
What happened next was a discussion between the two; at first, the discussion was about the possibility keeping the old maid in their service, and the potential risk to her health if she continued - Leo argued for the former and his father shot him down using the latter; then, it became a topic of providing her with a pension for her to live out on for the rest of her life - Leo proposed it, and his father quickly questioned him if it was worth it. Did he know how much money that would cost? Did he know what that money could be used for in the meantime? Did he even know what kind of effects his actions had? He did not, and because he did not, he couldn't answer.
The conversation between him and his father dragged on for hours, and by then end of it, he was worn down, and out of arguments. For the first time, he cursed himself for not being able to do anything, for being incapable - yes, he was a child, and yes, perhaps the expectations set on him were great, but in the end, it was his choice to give up. His young self thought that maybe, if he hand't given up, there might have been something he could have done, something to help. Instead, he was the same stuttering and useless wreck he always was. At that point, Leo desperately wished that he was somebody, a person who held all the answers, someone that was capable and not so damn useless. He regretted not having even tried to become that person.
Perhaps his father saw is inner turmoil, perhaps it was his own intuition, but for the first time, his father looked at him with something bordering on approval. To Leo's surprise, the patriarch of the de Coeur family granted his wish, and promised that the old maid would live on tidy pension; in the first place, that was what was originally planned - after all, what kind of noble family would they be if they failed to pay someone back after those long years of service?
Still, the fact that Leo did not know what worth her service was to them asides from his own personal stakes, hit him. His father explained, that, in the end, helping people like that was what it meant to be nobility - to hold a position means to assume the responsibilities that come with it, and though you might cast away the position, those responsibilities would not go away. It was a duty, and it was a curse.
And for the first time, Leo felt as though he might want to bear both.
His enrollment into St. Fortuna's years later was practically a given, and by that point, Leo was much changed. Now, Leo had a goal, and the determination to strive for it.
Leo, as the eldest, was born with many expectations on his shoulders. He was the next head, the first son, and first child of the current head; most kids would have buckled under the pressure, and Leo was no exception. As a child he was a nervous and stuttering wreck, and an immense disappointment to his parents, who made no secret of it. He would run away from his lessons, cry when he was unable to understand something, and hide from his many tutors. Often times he would spend the whole day shut in his room.
The only ally he had during those times was his nana, who would read him a story to sleep every night. It was perhaps mostly due to her that he became the person he is today. His nanny, an old woman who had served the family for decades, was a calming and peaceful influence on his otherwise chaotic life. She constantly cheered him on, and with every story she read, he reminded him that more than what his parents wanted him to be, he should first strive to be himself, and aim for what he wanted.
While he understood the words, he didn't necessarily take them to heart, until the day she was retired.
It happened quickly, so quickly that he wasn't aware of it. The old maid's work preformance had been declining with age, and soon enough, it was necessary that she stopped working; the only problem was that she could not. She had a family to feed, three grandchildren and a daughter in law who could barely get by on her own salary. It was practically the old maids money that kept them afloat.
When Leo heard about this, for the first time in his life, he confronted his father in what basically amounted to a shouting match - of course, he was the only one shouting. His father simply stood at him and stared.
What happened next was a discussion between the two; at first, the discussion was about the possibility keeping the old maid in their service, and the potential risk to her health if she continued - Leo argued for the former and his father shot him down using the latter; then, it became a topic of providing her with a pension for her to live out on for the rest of her life - Leo proposed it, and his father quickly questioned him if it was worth it. Did he know how much money that would cost? Did he know what that money could be used for in the meantime? Did he even know what kind of effects his actions had? He did not, and because he did not, he couldn't answer.
The conversation between him and his father dragged on for hours, and by then end of it, he was worn down, and out of arguments. For the first time, he cursed himself for not being able to do anything, for being incapable - yes, he was a child, and yes, perhaps the expectations set on him were great, but in the end, it was his choice to give up. His young self thought that maybe, if he hand't given up, there might have been something he could have done, something to help. Instead, he was the same stuttering and useless wreck he always was. At that point, Leo desperately wished that he was somebody, a person who held all the answers, someone that was capable and not so damn useless. He regretted not having even tried to become that person.
Perhaps his father saw is inner turmoil, perhaps it was his own intuition, but for the first time, his father looked at him with something bordering on approval. To Leo's surprise, the patriarch of the de Coeur family granted his wish, and promised that the old maid would live on tidy pension; in the first place, that was what was originally planned - after all, what kind of noble family would they be if they failed to pay someone back after those long years of service?
Still, the fact that Leo did not know what worth her service was to them asides from his own personal stakes, hit him. His father explained, that, in the end, helping people like that was what it meant to be nobility - to hold a position means to assume the responsibilities that come with it, and though you might cast away the position, those responsibilities would not go away. It was a duty, and it was a curse.
And for the first time, Leo felt as though he might want to bear both.
His enrollment into St. Fortuna's years later was practically a given, and by that point, Leo was much changed. Now, Leo had a goal, and the determination to strive for it.
Likes:
- Baking
- Reading
- Sports
- Winning
- Woodcraft
- Forests
- Hard workers
Dislikes:
- Laziness
- Hubris
- Vanity
- Quitters
- Lack of ambition
Points:
Proficiency: 「 2 」
Intelligence: 「 2 」
Athletics: 「 6 」
Misc.:
Sings in the shower. He has a pretty good voice.
Quiz Answers:
1. What is your character's dream career?
"My dream career may come as a surprise to most - I wish to be a baker. Anything else I take up is a responsibility."
2. Your character is caught telling a lie/cheating. How do they react?
"The only course of action left is to apologize, I suppose. The fact that I may have been doing it for some grand purpose does not change the fact that I was caught."
3. Your character finds out someone close to them has been lying to them. How do they react?
"Confront them, ask for answers. If they are hesitant to give it, then at least I want to ascertain to what degree I can trust them anymore."
4. If your character were given $50, what would they do with it?
"Well, since it was given, I suppose there's no harm in indulging myself for a moment. I would probably buy a few books, or perhaps some baking materials."
5. Someone close to your character gives them something very important and asks them to hold on to it until they come back. However, your character somehow loses it. What do they do?
"Look for it first; if I cannot find it, then I will confess, plain and simple, and afterwards ask for forgiveness and a chance to make amends. I sincerely hope this is a quiz and not a prediction of the future."
6. Your character is given the chance to perfect any one talent. What do they choose?
". . . Dancing . . ."
7. What is your character’s favourite book or movie genre? Why?
"Ah, this is simple - I am quite the fan of adventure novels and epics, particularly those in the fantasy genre."
8. Who does your character admire/look up to?
"My father and my old nanny. The first for his bearing, the second for her kindness."
"My dream career may come as a surprise to most - I wish to be a baker. Anything else I take up is a responsibility."
2. Your character is caught telling a lie/cheating. How do they react?
"The only course of action left is to apologize, I suppose. The fact that I may have been doing it for some grand purpose does not change the fact that I was caught."
3. Your character finds out someone close to them has been lying to them. How do they react?
"Confront them, ask for answers. If they are hesitant to give it, then at least I want to ascertain to what degree I can trust them anymore."
4. If your character were given $50, what would they do with it?
"Well, since it was given, I suppose there's no harm in indulging myself for a moment. I would probably buy a few books, or perhaps some baking materials."
5. Someone close to your character gives them something very important and asks them to hold on to it until they come back. However, your character somehow loses it. What do they do?
"Look for it first; if I cannot find it, then I will confess, plain and simple, and afterwards ask for forgiveness and a chance to make amends. I sincerely hope this is a quiz and not a prediction of the future."
6. Your character is given the chance to perfect any one talent. What do they choose?
". . . Dancing . . ."
7. What is your character’s favourite book or movie genre? Why?
"Ah, this is simple - I am quite the fan of adventure novels and epics, particularly those in the fantasy genre."
8. Who does your character admire/look up to?
"My father and my old nanny. The first for his bearing, the second for her kindness."
Password:
Black Pillar
Yeah, this is what happened to that first character after one too many edits. My mind works like a toddlers scribbles.
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Round two, Electric Boogaloo!
Anyway, tell me what you think
Name: Talia Nitro
Image or Description:
Age: 17 (Because she was held back a grade)
Gender: Female
Orientation: BiSexual
Mage or Familiar: Familiar
Ability:
Partner:
Personality:
Talia is very enthusiastic when it comes to most things. Everything from Hanging out with friends to doing solitary activities. She enjoys being in the company of others, but doesn’t mind a little solitude every now and then. She puts aside time for her gaming, even if it is her favorite thing to do, she knows too much is harmful. She’s a bit of a rebel but nothing too major, like she won’t start a rebellion against something trivial. She’s kind to almost everyone, and just wants to be friends with a lot of people.
Biography:
Talia Nitro was born into a rather wealthy family, them owning a string of gaming shops around various areas. Although her parents had to manage the game shops, they always did care for her and wanted the best for her. Growing up she lived a normal life overall, went to school, did her homework, hang around at the game shop with her uncle who ran the one nearest her house. She would usually just walk the short distance to her house when it was getting dark. She was taught from an early age how to swim, and it came in handy since her family did have a pool. She performed in a few school swim competitions and did decently, winning 2nd place in regionals one year. She balanced this with her school life and hanging around the game shop, since the latter was not too much of a commitment…yet. This routine of just going to school, seeing friends, hanging around the gameshop, recreationally swimming went on for a few years.
One day Around the age of 12 she finished up her homework at school and then went to hang at the gameshop. She was just minding her business playing a handheld device when she saw a group of people standing around some other kids playing on computers. She went to go see what was going on and she quickly made friends. As it turns out they were playing some sort of competitive game between them, and to her it looked fun. She asked to try it out, and she was amazed at the whole side of video games she had never seen before. She came after school a few more times after and played with them until she asked her uncle if she could get a computer of her own. So her uncle set her up with a small gaming laptop and she got that very same game and started to play it more. She always knew that school came first, so she balanced this newfound life of gaming with her schoolwork and swim practice.
She eventually learned that she could make modifications to the games she played and so she dabbled in a bit of code, she learned how computers worked and even built a few, but in reality she just loved playing the games. It was at one point that she started neglecting school work just to get more playtime in. She stopped going to practice and just gamed the days away whenever she got out of school. Her parents saw this and warned that if she didn’t put school first, bad things would happen. She should’ve listened. It got so bad to the point where she neglected all other areas of her life. Around the age of 14 she started to skip school, lying to her parents that she went, even going as far as faking homework. This eventually resulted in her having to repeat that grade, man were her parents pissed when they discovered of her subterfuge. They wanted the best for her and they gave her all the tools for success and she denied it, she pushed them away. They forbid her from the shop and games until her grades had effectively made up for the damage.
After repeating the grade her life got somewhat back on track, she started to get better grades and go to swim practice. She was getting back into the groove and hanging out with new friends, Living like a semi-normal teenager. But she always felt as if there was a void she couldn’t fill. Her affinity for playing video games could not be ignored, but this time she played in moderation, allotting time for gaming, finishing her schoolwork first. She did a few other side projects with gaming, like making a stream on her gaming, but nothing too significant, she still loves video games, but knows that there are times to play and times to work. After seeing that she had improved her parents transferred her to St. Fortuna’s to further her education.
Likes:
-Gaming, alot
-T-shirts, hoodies, and comfortable clothing
-Fiddling with tech
-Texting
-Coding
-Swimming
-Sleeping
-Soda
-Winning, but having fun
-Cats, kittens (she's not a cat lady)
-Foxes also
-Hot cocoa
Dislikes:
-Uniforms
-Bossy people
-losing
-Rude people
Points: 10
Proficiency: 3
Intelligence: 4
Athletics: 3
Misc.: Her online username in games is T-Nitr0; She’s a really good gamer; She has 120,239 followers on her stream; she’s agile in water;
Quiz Answers:
Password: The type of food depends on how I feel honestly.
*Edit: I see how the heart tattoo can be controversial, I can take that out if you want
Image or Description:
Age: 17 (Because she was held back a grade)
Gender: Female
Orientation: BiSexual
Mage or Familiar: Familiar
Ability:
Partner:
Personality:
Talia is very enthusiastic when it comes to most things. Everything from Hanging out with friends to doing solitary activities. She enjoys being in the company of others, but doesn’t mind a little solitude every now and then. She puts aside time for her gaming, even if it is her favorite thing to do, she knows too much is harmful. She’s a bit of a rebel but nothing too major, like she won’t start a rebellion against something trivial. She’s kind to almost everyone, and just wants to be friends with a lot of people.
Biography:
Talia Nitro was born into a rather wealthy family, them owning a string of gaming shops around various areas. Although her parents had to manage the game shops, they always did care for her and wanted the best for her. Growing up she lived a normal life overall, went to school, did her homework, hang around at the game shop with her uncle who ran the one nearest her house. She would usually just walk the short distance to her house when it was getting dark. She was taught from an early age how to swim, and it came in handy since her family did have a pool. She performed in a few school swim competitions and did decently, winning 2nd place in regionals one year. She balanced this with her school life and hanging around the game shop, since the latter was not too much of a commitment…yet. This routine of just going to school, seeing friends, hanging around the gameshop, recreationally swimming went on for a few years.
One day Around the age of 12 she finished up her homework at school and then went to hang at the gameshop. She was just minding her business playing a handheld device when she saw a group of people standing around some other kids playing on computers. She went to go see what was going on and she quickly made friends. As it turns out they were playing some sort of competitive game between them, and to her it looked fun. She asked to try it out, and she was amazed at the whole side of video games she had never seen before. She came after school a few more times after and played with them until she asked her uncle if she could get a computer of her own. So her uncle set her up with a small gaming laptop and she got that very same game and started to play it more. She always knew that school came first, so she balanced this newfound life of gaming with her schoolwork and swim practice.
She eventually learned that she could make modifications to the games she played and so she dabbled in a bit of code, she learned how computers worked and even built a few, but in reality she just loved playing the games. It was at one point that she started neglecting school work just to get more playtime in. She stopped going to practice and just gamed the days away whenever she got out of school. Her parents saw this and warned that if she didn’t put school first, bad things would happen. She should’ve listened. It got so bad to the point where she neglected all other areas of her life. Around the age of 14 she started to skip school, lying to her parents that she went, even going as far as faking homework. This eventually resulted in her having to repeat that grade, man were her parents pissed when they discovered of her subterfuge. They wanted the best for her and they gave her all the tools for success and she denied it, she pushed them away. They forbid her from the shop and games until her grades had effectively made up for the damage.
After repeating the grade her life got somewhat back on track, she started to get better grades and go to swim practice. She was getting back into the groove and hanging out with new friends, Living like a semi-normal teenager. But she always felt as if there was a void she couldn’t fill. Her affinity for playing video games could not be ignored, but this time she played in moderation, allotting time for gaming, finishing her schoolwork first. She did a few other side projects with gaming, like making a stream on her gaming, but nothing too significant, she still loves video games, but knows that there are times to play and times to work. After seeing that she had improved her parents transferred her to St. Fortuna’s to further her education.
Likes:
-Gaming, alot
-T-shirts, hoodies, and comfortable clothing
-Fiddling with tech
-Texting
-Coding
-Swimming
-Sleeping
-Soda
-Winning, but having fun
-Cats, kittens (she's not a cat lady)
-Foxes also
-Hot cocoa
Dislikes:
-Uniforms
-Bossy people
-losing
-Rude people
Points: 10
Proficiency: 3
Intelligence: 4
Athletics: 3
Misc.: Her online username in games is T-Nitr0; She’s a really good gamer; She has 120,239 followers on her stream; she’s agile in water;
Quiz Answers:
1. What is your character's greatest regret? Letting her obsessions consume her, ultimately resulting in her having to repeat a grade, and perhaps the subconscious fear that she let down her parents
2. Your character is home alone after watching a horror movie and they hear a strange sound. What do they do? Lock herself in her room until her parents returned home.
3. Two of your characters’ friends are fighting over something trivial, and they want them to stop. How do they go about this? She would first learn of the circumstances and then would suggest a compromise or tell them it's not worth it. She'd just want them to get along.
4. While your character is on their way to class, they realize they forgot something crucial. They’re already on the verge of running late. What do they do? If her roommate were still in the room she'd text them and ask if they could do her a solid and bring it to her, if not and it's a really crucial object to both her and the class she would hurry up and try to retrieve it.
5. If your character had the opportunity to turn into any animal, what would that animal be? A Dolphin
6. If your character’s house were on fire, and they only had time to save one thing from their room, what would it be? Her laptop, due to the fact that it has alot of irretrievable files and memories on it and she holds it very dear to her.
7. What season does your character like best and why? Winter, although she can't swim during this time she can snuggle up in winter clothing, enjoy hot cocoa, and play video games.
8. Vacation! You character gets to spend a week anywhere! Where is it and what do they do? In the summertime, she would go to a mountainside forest with a lake nearby and spend her days swimming and enjoying the scenery. During the wintertime she would enjoy a snowy log cabin on a mountain, so she could enjoy the vast view and drink some hot cocoa, and play in the snow perhaps.
2. Your character is home alone after watching a horror movie and they hear a strange sound. What do they do? Lock herself in her room until her parents returned home.
3. Two of your characters’ friends are fighting over something trivial, and they want them to stop. How do they go about this? She would first learn of the circumstances and then would suggest a compromise or tell them it's not worth it. She'd just want them to get along.
4. While your character is on their way to class, they realize they forgot something crucial. They’re already on the verge of running late. What do they do? If her roommate were still in the room she'd text them and ask if they could do her a solid and bring it to her, if not and it's a really crucial object to both her and the class she would hurry up and try to retrieve it.
5. If your character had the opportunity to turn into any animal, what would that animal be? A Dolphin
6. If your character’s house were on fire, and they only had time to save one thing from their room, what would it be? Her laptop, due to the fact that it has alot of irretrievable files and memories on it and she holds it very dear to her.
7. What season does your character like best and why? Winter, although she can't swim during this time she can snuggle up in winter clothing, enjoy hot cocoa, and play video games.
8. Vacation! You character gets to spend a week anywhere! Where is it and what do they do? In the summertime, she would go to a mountainside forest with a lake nearby and spend her days swimming and enjoying the scenery. During the wintertime she would enjoy a snowy log cabin on a mountain, so she could enjoy the vast view and drink some hot cocoa, and play in the snow perhaps.
Password: The type of food depends on how I feel honestly.
*Edit: I see how the heart tattoo can be controversial, I can take that out if you want
Anyway, tell me what you think
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Invader Len Your Friendly Neighborhood Megalomaniac
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@Invader Len13org's question reminds me that another question that I asked before never got answered, though it wasn't directed at you and probably should've had some mentions attached to it to make it more visible. Anyway, I was wondering if there were any adventuring-focused electives that could be joined, such as one that focuses on Monster Hunting?
If that is something you'd like to see, I'm sure I could make that an elective! If anyone has ideas that they'd like to see for classes, just tell me! If a lot of people have interest in an Intro to Monster Hunting class, I could definitely write that up! ^^
@TheHangedMan, @Redmarshmellow, we will begin reviewing your Cs's shortly.
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@onenote@Invader Len Where does a person get a password for their app? Tad confused on that bit, at least while i am trying to make a mage app at the moment...(T__T)
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