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Added a description of his home base as well as a buff to his weapon if that's fine.
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I'll delay my character for a few hours, I'm going to sleep now, but I have most of it done. See ya later.
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I have an elderly man with an enslaved wizard in mind and everyone else is taking the dive into non-human creatures of nightmares... Might want more wizard slaves...
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Currently making a wizard that may or may not summon Eldritch monstrosities and may or may not be one themselves.

With a minor in destroying things with magic.
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that makes nine, which is like a cool, symbolic evil number.


Thrice to thine, and thrice to mine, and thrice again to make up nine.
The witches from Macbeth


Methinks it unfortunate that the story lacks an evil wizard. Methinks I shall endeavor to solve this problem.
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And here's my first shot.

Eira White - Thermal Thief

Magical Mass Murderer













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I had created this character for another roleplay (Looking at you there @Zendrelax).
I thought he might fit in a group of ne'er-do-wells.
I hope his is as vile and despicable as ever.

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Oh dear, it seems the children of Aton have been reincarnated.
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Okay. I'm ready. First round of CS reviews incoming. Before I go on, I should say this - don't fuss too much about power levels, guys. Some characters are going to be more powerful than others, but that's the way of these things; the Avengers has its heavy hitters and its Hawkeyes, but that doesn't mean Hawkeye is a worse character (okay, bad example.) Every character will have something to do and the ability to be useful, so don't fuss if you feel like yours couldn't hold up in a fistfight with the others. Don't get me wrong, all the characters should be powerful, but power doesn't have to mean being a big scary monster or having a big pile of spells: to quote everyone's favorite stick-figure lich Xykon, 'Power is power.' Power can be knowledge, or influence, or skill, or craftiness - you don't have to be a huge monster to catch the eye of Kil'threx, you just have to be very evil and very powerful; whatever that looks like.

@dragonmancer: Nidhoggr! May I say sir, you have excellent taste in Dark Souls bosses. I like what you've done with him - he feels both unique and a like a good old-fashioned 'Smaug' archetype. He's very powerful, of course, and I can easily see him being one of the heavier-hitting Harbingers, but I don't think he's too far over the top. Spelling and grammar a little rough in places, but I'm not a super hardass about that - just keep it readable and we're good. All in all, I'd say he's good to go - except one tiny problem preventing me from accepting him at this time, *cough* check the rules again *cough* validate me *cough*. All in all, pretty well done.

@TheWindel: Aesir, the Apotheosis of the Court! A very nicely executed Evil Overlord type, cool Myth, awesome lair, very well-written sample post. No real problems here, so. Accepted!

@MauveMarauder: Okay, while I don't hate the idea of a simple mass-murderer becoming powerful enough to gain the eye of the God of Evil, I've got a couple sort of big notes for this one. First and foremost, it doesn't totally jive with the 'fantasy theme' that we're going for here, and while y'all are encouraged to worldbuild, that's provided you stay within the genre, so... mentions of bike shorts, wet floor signs, warheads, glass trophy cases, that doesn't fit. Wizard academies do exist, but they're a lot more old-timey than a high school. Also the tone is sort of weird and stilted - she sort of seems like, without the occasional references to mass murder, she'd fit more in a teen slice of life story? If that makes sense? And her personality doesn't appear to jive with her being crazy evil at all - her pyschopathic tendencies should definitely be played up. All in all, while the concept of a teenage girl with way more power than sense and a deep mean streak isn't a bad one for a Harbinger, she currently doesn't seem like the type of person who'd turn the eye of the God of Evil when he's looking for lieutenants. Also, I'm going to have to veto the 'explodes with the power of a warhead' thing, just because a lot of the fun of this RP will be in big badass war sequences and any such detonations would probably solve a lot of problems a little too easily and quickly.

EDIT: Oh god, another one has appeared! I have accomplished nothing!
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Alright, thanks! I'll conjure up the god's message to his dragon (possibly child even), however after thinking about it more I was thinking of changing his poison fire to gold-black flames (nothing special about the fire other then its looks, you know how Kalameet breathed fire.) And keeping the toxic property to just a poisonous saliva to symbolize his corrupted greed and pride, that sound good?

Edit: And I included the message just now, thoughts?
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Oh dear, it seems the children of Aton have been reincarnated.


Quite, Indubitably, Indeed.

Perhaps this thread shall have a better drive force. That being said, the CS is incomplete for obvious reasons. I still have to think how one would go about contacting Zhystkrexas... As normally he contacts you...

Edit: I think a missive travelling to I'zhystana would do. I was originally thinking of having Zhystkrexas appearing due to someone's desire to meet him or something, but that would require me to drop the narrative form of the CS. And I'd hate to break the theme and have Zhystkrexas suddenly actively doing something.

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Annnd there we go. Do tell if there are problems~
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Alright, I'm gonna sink my teeth into the new ones and get back to y'all tomorrow - I think I'll just slam out my CS and then call it a night. I've skimmed them already, and I like what I see so far, so. Good job.

@TheWizardLizard

Alright, thanks! I'll conjure up the god's message to his dragon (possibly child even), however after thinking about it more I was thinking of changing his poison fire to gold-black flames (nothing special about the fire other then its looks, you know how Kalameet breathed fire.) And keeping the toxic property to just a poisonous saliva to symbolize his corrupted greed and pride, that sound good?

Edit: And I included the message just now, thoughts?


That'll serve quite well, thank you. Nidhogg is accepted.
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Here's my CS:


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Hmmm, i'm very tempted to make an orc warlord.
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Rewriting the character. When I'm done, should I make a new post or just edit the one I already made?
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Alright, next round of CS reviews is incoming!

@The Grey Dust Zhystkrexas, Lord of the Jaria. I am blown away, dude. The level of detail and the quality of the work here is really incredible. I have no real notes or problems, so just as soon as the contact with Kil'Threx is added, I'm happy to say that He Who Hungers is accepted.

@Username Khata Nyarlith, the Faceless One. Once again, well done - cool character with a well-written sheet. Accepted. Get in there and grant us some eyes.

@KoL Iona, Ahwaan's Ash. Call me a broken record, cus this is also a very well done sheet with little to complain about - I appreciate how she fits in with the established story of Kil'threx, and I think she'll be a very interesting character as a result. Her more merciful ways are also interesting - I'm looking forward to seeing how she deals with the more sadistic/barbaric Harbingers. Can't accept it yet because there's still the matter of how Kil'threx contacted her, which should be neat to see, but once you add that you're good.

Well done to everyone! Now that our roster is starting to fill out, I should mention that you should all feel free to PM each other and talk and discuss how or if any of these villains have met each other before, what they think of each other, and so forth. I also intend to make a 'Locations' section in the main page for all the places and stuff that are created, so if you guys wanna write anything to go in there, be my guest.

Oh, and editing the old one will be fine, @MauveMarauder.

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It's already there on her myth, right after I wrote about her imprisonment, she got a dream about Kil'hrex promising her freedom back, which was actualized in the form of Aesir finding her. Whenever I used a capitalized pronoun I was talking about Kil'threx, in the same way that one only uses them when referring to Yahweh.
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It's already there on her myth, right after I wrote about her imprisonment, she got a dream about Kil'hrex promising her freedom back, which was actualized in the form of Aesir finding her. Whenever I used a capitalized pronoun I was talking about Kil'threx, in the same way that one only uses them when referring to Yahweh.


Oh yeah, look at that. Woops. My bad, accepted!
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Oh yeah, look at that. Woops. My bad, accepted!


No worries, with all of this to review, missing minor details is normal.
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