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Just so you know I haven't disappeared! I'll write up a character soon.


Cool Beans!

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Revising my sheet to make my angel more warrior/combat focused since we will likely have a fair proportion of magic users.


Revise to your heart's content. Characters can grow. You can edit their character sheets at any time. Within reason of course.

i think i wrote too much for a casual rp. i just ended up having too much i wanted to put down. But Gerard is finally on the scene.

@black alice thank you. i have my moments


In my opinion, casual means, "a well thought out post, regardless of post length. long or short, as long as it has solid content."
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@Weed

I would like to give some feedback on your post, after giving it a good read.

1) It's very detailed; I love that!

2) There are a lot of run on sentences that make it a little tricky to read in places. Please, work on that in the future.

3) You need to title your post "Capitol City". It's easy to assume, at this point, that you are in Capitol City (as it is the only location created so far). BUT in the future, as more locations are added, this can get confusing.

4) Overall, I love your character, very interesting. I'm excited to see where things go from here.

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@Balthazar007Ah okay. Location. i'll add that. As to the run on sentences i'll keep an eye on those too. I get a little carried away when i write so my grammar and sometimes spelling takes the back seat. I apologize for the parts that are difficult to read. And it is an apology because I know it is a more enjoyable read, if it is easy to understand. A slight failure on my part. Long way to go before I'm a pro.

Thanks for the feed back
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You thought I was gone, but I was actually just looking for a picture now. Been puzzling over my char concept.
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Angel should be ready by tomorrow!
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Angel should be ready by tomorrow!


Awesome! I'm looking forward to it.

You thought I was gone, but I was actually just looking for a picture now. Been puzzling over my char concept.


Puzzle away. There is no pressure. I'm glad to hear you're still around though.

@Balthazar007Ah okay. Location. i'll add that. As to the run on sentences i'll keep an eye on those too. I get a little carried away when i write so my grammar and sometimes spelling takes the back seat. I apologize for the parts that are difficult to read. And it is an apology because I know it is a more enjoyable read, if it is easy to understand. A slight failure on my part. Long way to go before I'm a pro.

Thanks for the feed back


And thank you for being so understanding and not getting butt hurt over constructive criticism. I'm wondering when and how Gerard and Balthazar will meet. I'm thinking that you'll have to fight an army of demons soon. mwahaha! :)
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Well i don't mind an army of demons. It will expand Gerard's collection <chuckles>. But he only takes high quality specimens or those that have great potential.

As to running into each other. I think you should split Capitol City into regions. So that people can develop their characters before randomly bumping into each other. I was thinking of just having Northern, Southern, Eastern, Western. But maybe having SW NW SE and NE corners would help people navigate towards others. just appearing after a couple posts seems a bit like cheat (unless the person has a special mode of transportation.

Actually i wanted to ask about the streets. I assumed due to the chaos and the monsters the streets are more or less abandoned with normal people and even frightened supernatural individuals would be in hiding throughout the city. I hope i made the correct assumption.

Back to areas. If we go with different city areas. then creating key locations in each one would be great for meeting with people and plot development. I just got a thought as i typed it out. What about Capitol City's largest Hospital is one of the most heavily guarded locations in the city. Military as well as strong (popular and well known Supernaturals) the ward of attacks from the demons.

And in regards to angels ( this will probably help White Alice out) where the heck are they and what are they doing? Balthazar has an army in the city it seems. Shouldn't the Angels also have one? Are there more Demons than Angels? If a large force of angels is around then perhaps they are dedicating most of the resources to protect the humans, via magic and their personnel. If the Angels can't spare many perhaps several small groups of angels are conducting guerrilla warfare on the demon forces. Perhaps the demons out number but the Angels have a higher quality of warriors overall.

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Likewise, my Witch Queen should be done today or tomorrow, depending on how overboard I go with the bio stuff.
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@Weed

I like the amount of thought that you put into your questions. I will try to answer your questions and concerns as plainly as possible.

I have created Capitol City to be a broad location. In the future, I may create more sub-locations within it or even expand the area surrounding it. Whenever I have time and inspiration, I will do that. In the mean time, there is nothing stopping anyone from creating their own sub-locations within Capitol City or even building onto the area surrounding Capitol City. People can even create an area separate from Capitol City. We build this world together. Simply create a location sheet in the character sheet section, and I will add it into the first OOC post.

On that note, the next location that I want to build is "Downtown Capitol City". This will be the demon stronghold. This will be where Balthazar is at the moment. I don't have time to create that at the moment though. I will tonight or tomorrow.

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Not to overstep my bounds but I am thinking that you should make a special Location Tab if that is possible. because you put Downtown Capitol City info in the Characters tab.

Edit: Is there a certain time limit that is given in casual before one can post again? I'm not necessarily in a hurry because i'm not sure if anyone would randomly appear in my current scene. I was just thinking of the chance of pulling additional people into the Roleplay if they have something to read.
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First draft of my character is done~! Going to have her associated location, as well as the juicy details of her pact with a certain Angel up sometime this week.

You can probably see why I was amused at @Weed making a wizard, and a summoner at that, considering this character was already in the works at that point. Great minds think alike, and all that I suppose~
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Not to overstep my bounds but I am thinking that you should make a special Location Tab if that is possible. because you put Downtown Capitol City info in the Characters tab.

Edit: Is there a certain time limit that is given in casual before one can post again? I'm not necessarily in a hurry because i'm not sure if anyone would randomly appear in my current scene. I was just thinking of the chance of pulling additional people into the Roleplay if they have something to read.


If there is a way to create custom tabs, please let me know. I would definitely do that. I've been on this site for a while, and have seen no such feature. Until then, both characters and locations will have to be stored in the Characters tab.

I only ask that you wait for one other person to post after you. As an exception, if 5 days pass without another post, you may post again. I'll have something new up soon, if not tonight, definitely tomorrow.
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First draft of my character is done~! Going to have her associated location, as well as the juicy details of her pact with a certain Angel up sometime this week.

You can probably see why I was amused at @Weed making a wizard, and a summoner at that, considering this character was already in the works at that point. Great minds think alike, and all that I suppose~


Fantastic!
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First draft of my character is done~! Going to have her associated location, as well as the juicy details of her pact with a certain Angel up sometime this week.

You can probably see why I was amused at @Weed making a wizard, and a summoner at that, considering this character was already in the works at that point. Great minds think alike, and all that I suppose~


I just took the time to read your character sheet. I like it a lot! It is quite long however, so don't be upset if someone on down the line interacts with your character without remembering an "important detail". As more characters are added, it will be more practical for new users to skim over character profiles instead of reading every long one.
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Character is done~

Will maybe post soon then.
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Character is done~

Will maybe post soon then.


Yes I saw that! I've already linked your character into the first OOC post. Glad we have another on board!
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Hope my profile is fine, I'll make the adjustments if necessary.
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Hope my profile is fine, I'll make the adjustments if necessary.


Ahh! At last! A sworn enemy to the demon invasion! Your character is solidly built, and I can't wait to see your IC posts. That's a figure of speech of course, take all the time you need (I'd love for you to become inactive so that I may turn Achilles to the dark side.) Mwahaha! Seriously though, welcome!

I've already added you to the first OOC post.
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Sweetness. More people. I'll wait for another to post before continuing Gerard`s current happenings

@Balthazar007
Sadly I'm new so I don't know if one can make new tabs or not.

@Black Alice
I see why you were so amused by such coincidental similarities.

@GreenGoat @DragonoftheWest

Welcome to the party. Glad to you all here to join in this to adventure
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Sorry for the double post but I wanted to make sure this wasn't missed. I'm curious about death in this game. More accurately about the soul. What happens to the soul if a demon kills a human or angel. What happens when a demon dies? Since there is necromancer I'm curious because I intended on strengthening my summons by taking the souls of the fallen. But maybe that would only work for demons.
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