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Sorry for the mass posting, but there's a discord server for CoTS now!
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@Majoras End Sorry for vanishing into the void for a while. I’ve sort of been distracted by some bad family issues and not really feeling up to much as a result, so I haven’t really been writing for much at all. If it’s still okay, I’m still working on a page or two. I’m really sorry, and it’s fine if it’s too late or anything.
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It's okay, it's okay! Life comes first! Just take your time on your character and all. And it's not too late, I just got the first IC post up.
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*Grabs popcorn and slushee, eagerly awaiting among these many talented writers receives a pigeon and who receives a raven*

Man, I've been waiting for this show!
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Where did you come from?! :O

Jk, glad to see you're hyped for this starting!
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@Majoras End Just been lurking. Don't mind me please. Just gonna be a bit of a positive peanut gallery, cheering everybody on. Or I'll go on mute and go away if you'd like.
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Their True Name-Blake Marshall

Their Stage Name-Ice King

Their Appearance

The Date they Joined the Circus-May 13th, 2017

The Act they perform when not on the combat team-Ice sculptor.

Compulsion-He can't have any part of his skin in direct sunlight.

Why they Joined the Circus-Blake felt that was where life was directing him to go.

Their Biography-Blake never was never a very masculine guy. Arts and literature were the most important things with sports not even on his radar. His parents didn't approve of the activities he found to be fun. So they tried to get him to try out for sports and nudge him away from what they didn't like. Nudging turned to pushing which then turned into one sided yelling. Coming to the conclusion that him and his parents would probably never see eye to eye Blake decided to head out on his own. After packing up some belongings and stealing some money Blake left to see where life would take him. After a few weeks of traveling Blake came across a traveling circus and while enjoying the festivities he was approached by the ringmaster.

Their Connections-Need to talk to others first.

Their Audition-I took my kid outside of the main tent after the wonderful display of feats by the main preformers. "Let's look around a little more but then we need to go back home." The kids tried to get their dad to stay longer but he didn't budge.

Near the edge of the carnivalcarnival stood a tent with a sigh that read "Ice Kings lair. Enter at your own pace.". The father lead his daughter to the tent and looked inside. In the tent was dozens of figurines made of ice on display with a single pale young man. "Please, come in and look around." The guy said while beckoning us in. I entered the tent with my little girl and started to look at the ice sculptures. The air inside the tent was only slightly cooler then outside but didn't seem to affect any of the sculptures.

Every ice figure I examined had incredible detail for their size. Each one was small enough to fit in the palm of my hand and none of them had any price tags or label on them. Suddenly I heard a voice right next to me. "If you're wondering how much they are they are not for sale. I will allow you to take one of your choosing. And no I didn't read your mind. It's just that that is most often what I get asked first."

Before I could respond I hear a gasp from my daughter and something hit the ground. I look over to see an ice horse broken on the dirt floor of the tent but before I could apologize the man just laughs and walks towards my daughter. She looks up to the stranger with tears starting to form. "I am sorry"

"It's OK. No need to cry little one." He picks up the pieces and holds them in his palm. "Watch this." He says. Placing his other hand over the broken horse, pressed his hands together and then lifted it to reveal the horse intact. My daughter clapped as I tried to figure out how he did that. He grabs a small plastic container and stand and puts the horse in it. "Take this as a token of change. Even if things seem dark and gloomy now they will change for the better. I'm sure of it"

I take the gift and look it over. "C'mon sweetie. Thank the man and let's go home." The girl said her goodbyes as well started to leave. "Don't forget it will only last a little over two hours before you have to freeze it again.
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Their True Name- Blake (No last name?)

Their Stage Name- Ice King

Their Appearance

The Date they Joined the Circus-May 13th, 2017

The Act they perform when not on the combat team-Ice creater/manipulater. (It's supposed to be their act, not their powers. I wouldn't have had to point this out if it was something like "Ice Sculptor", which it probably is according to Blake's audition.)

Compulsion-Ha can't have any part of his skin in direct sunlight.
(*He. Sorry, habit. Does he have an umbrella with him? Or anything to cover his skin? Cause this seems like an unfair compulsion if he doesn't.)

Why they Joined the Circus-To escape his overly controlling parents who thought they knew what was best for him.
(Kinda edgy. Really, this doesn't seem like a good reason to join the circus imo.)

Their Biography-Blake had a very normal life. He had good grades and a few close friends. Art was his favorite subject in school followed by literature. Blake and his parents often butted heads on where he was going in life and some current life choices. His parents wanted him to join the army and continue the family tradition of being in the military. One day Blake discovered his parents planed on sending him to a juvenile bootcamp. When his mom and dad left the house to go shopping Blake packed up some belongings and, with some stolen money left home to make a new life for his self. A few weeks later Blake came across a circus and was approached by the ringleader.
(So Blake decided to run away from home so he didn't have to go to military school? Again, kinda edgy.)

Their Connections-Need to talk to others first.

Their Audition-I took my kid outside of the main tent after the wonderful displays of feats by the main preformers. "Let's look around a little more but then we need to go back home." The kids tried to get their dad to stay longer but he didn't budge.

Near the edge of the carnivalcarnival stood a tent with a sigh that read "Ice Kings lair. Enter at your own pace.". The father lead his daughter to the tent and looked inside. In the tent was dozens of figurines made of ice on display with a single pale young man. "Please, come in and look around." The guy said while beckoning us in. I entered the tent with my little girl and started to look at the ice sculptures. The air inside the tent was only slightly cooler then outside but didn't seem to affect any of the sculptures.

Every ice figure I examined had incredible detail for their size. Each one was small enough to fit in the palm of my hand and none of them had any price tags or label on them. Suddenly I heard a voice right next to me. "If you're wondering how much they are they are not for sale. I will allow you to take one of your choosing. And no I didn't read your mind. It's just that that is most often what I get asked first."

Before I could respond I hear a gasp from my daughter and something hit the ground. I look over to see an ice horse broken on the dirt floor of the tent but before I could apologize the man just laughs and walks towards my daughter. She looks up to the stranger with tears starting to form. "I am sorry"

"It's OK. No need to cry little one." He picks up the pieces and holds them in his palm. "Watch this." He says. Placing his other hand over the broken horse, pressed his hands together and then lifted it to reveal the horse intact. My daughter clapped as I tried to figure out how he did that. He grabs a small plastic container and stand and puts the horse in it. "Take this as a token of change. Even if things seem dark and gloomy now they will change for the better. I'm sure of it"

I take the gift and look it over. "C'mon sweetie. Thank the man and let's go home." The girl said her goodbyes as well started to leave. "Don't forget it will only last a little over two hours before you have to freeze it again.


Other than the writing quality that seems to belong in the free section, my comments are in the quoted cs.
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I'll go over this again when I get off work to explain and clean it up. Sorry about that.
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The name: He has a last name he just doesn't tell anyone. He was a minor when he ran away and the less information out there hopefully means he will not be recognized.

The act: I just forgot to change it. My first audition matched this a lot more than my current one. A few paragraphs into my first audition it seemed to be less mysterious/how is he doing that and more like I'm pretty sure he's using magic. I was also trying convey that, assuming that his audition was his first, that he had or still has stage freight. Writing from a different perspective proved difficult after not RPing like this for a few years.

Compulsion: Yes he does have an umbrella and different clothes and such if he needs to walk around during daytime. Thinking about how powerful his power could be I thought the compulsion would need to have a major affect on him. Plus I really started to like it when witch suggested it.

Why they joined/biography: Blake joined because he felt like this was where life was taking him. I assumed that when the ringmaster approached someone he thought would be a good candidate for powers he would explain what they were getting into to some extent. While on the road or in the circus he can be himself. He can draw without his part saying that it's a waste of time or that he's not masculine enough. He left because he was tired of not being accepted for who he was and for not fitting into the mould his parents wanted him to be.

I hope that shines a bit more right on what I was trying to do with this character. In my opinion I think a character sheet is hard for me to do. I feel I do a better job bringing the character to life more in the IC than in the CS. If that makes any sense.
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Okay, could you edit the changes into the cs?
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@eclecticwitch@Sightseer Don't know if you've seen the Discord link, but here it is just in case: Link
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I got a new computer!
And also I finished a character page.
Before I send her in, though, I'd also like to mention that I'd like to make another character as well. Should I send in the first, or wait until I've made the second before sending them in together?
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I'd probably post the first one first.
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Sorry if stuff is too vague or if she seems kind of wonky as a character or anything- I kind of rushed, haha.
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Looks good on my end!
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@EchoicChamber Sorry it took a little bit to read, I was dealing with the madness of another RP. You're good on my end as well.
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@Majoras End@Vocab Great! Should I move her over when I get home? Also, is it okay for me to be joining the Discord, or no?
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(Jeez, between the shit show on the first page and the super edgy 13 yr. old, I'm glad that you have an approval process to weed out the "undesireables.")

Expressing EXTREME interest in this. I can start working on the CS now, but it might take some time. In the meantime, I have a few questions.

1) Is this placed in our current time of 2018? If not, when? If yes, what kind of protection(s) do we use to make sure that there aren't too many conspiracies or "prying eyes?"

2) What kind of powers and/or compulsion would be too fantastical? (Besides the above example from the "Edge Lord?")

3) How does the circus travel? Apparition, portal, standard, teleportation?, etc.

I think that is all for now, but I will not hesitate to ask more as I think of more questions. I look forward to submitting my CS and being reviewed.

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