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Sorry I haven't posted in awhile, I got a little busy. I'll hopefully be getting another post up later tonight.
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@Garden Gnome Not telling you how to write your post, but whenever a different person starts talking always start a new line or else it becomes a giant weird paragraph. lol


I have made the changes. Let me know if it is now acceptable?
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@ibecameinsane Which character is Vincent talking to? Jaden or Jack?
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I made an edit to Jasmine's last post - I changed a shadowy encounter to a phonecall because I think that'd make more sense.
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@ibecameinsane Which character is Vincent talking to? Jaden or Jack?


jack. sorry. forgot you had two males
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Again, I'm really sorry I haven't posted, I haven't been home these passed few days, but I'm back now and working on a post.
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Again, I'm really sorry I haven't posted, I haven't been home these passed few days, but I'm back now and working on a post.


It's all good, I should be the one posting. Which I will definitely do today. I will try to get in an Ashley post.
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Sorry my crappy post was crappy.
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Finally posted. It's not much but I wanted to get something up this weekend.
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Don't be so hard on yourselves, y'all. The posts are looking great!
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[@Surtr Inc]



Don't be too harsh with your review. >.>

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@Altered Tundra My first complaint is with all the headers/pictures/whatever at the top of the sheet are entirely unnecessary. I know you're trying to sell the character but in all honesty, it's redundant and you should do that through writing. But that's just me.

Other than that, I can't really bring up any major complaints with the character itself (other than the quotes you used Jesus Christ why). The power, on the other hand, I have a few problems. Putting a dent in metal (or fracturing bones) with air is very, very, nonsensical in concept even for this RP's standards. Because, as it's not a solid object because of how air works; it literally can't be focused that way at all. I'm going to overlook the obvious problem with air manipulation (and that is it requires an assload of force to do most of the stuff). I'm wondering how he's especially weak to electricity though? That section was a little vague to me and requires expansion.

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@Surtr Inc Removed most of the header (kept the collage, textual header, and theme songs).

As for the electricity bit, since most of Kai's capabilities are mid-range at most, I felt like that it was the obvious choice. Since Kai's movements will have him being mobile most of the time, he is suspect to electrocution. I could remove that part if you prefer and think of something different in its place.
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I think all of us are suspect to electrocution.

Actually, I think Kai would be less susceptible. Electricity wants to meet the ground.
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@Altered Tundra I still don't really see how he'd be more susceptible to electricity than anybody else in the RP. If I were to come up with a weakness on the fly, perhaps it comes with breathing problems with use? Like using it causes shortness of breath and overuse can cause him to blackout.
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will get a post up soon(more likely tonight) c:
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@Maxx gay

He still has my favorite idea for an elemental power. Accepted.
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@Altered Tundra I still don't really see how he'd be more susceptible to electricity than anybody else in the RP. If I were to come up with a weakness on the fly, perhaps it comes with breathing problems with use? Like using it causes shortness of breath and overuse can cause him to blackout.


Did away with the lightning/electricity weakness and added the shortness of breath bit that ties into the paralysis limit.
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@Altered Tundra I accepted the world's fuckiest fuckboy on the grounds that he makes everyone else look better.
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