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6’10? I know who I’m picking first in a pickup game.
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Sabinus be like



Also, he uses a bidet, because he's not a savage.

Or maybe turians poop tidy little cubes. Mysteries of the galaxy!


We all know that birds and bird people shit out fast-hardening greek yogurt.
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At last, I have done the thing.

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Wow check out this height comparison chart of everyone's characters. Sorry Scrivener, had to use the average batarian height in place of Von.



Anyway, how do they all toast their bread? Drink their coffee? Cream cheese or butter their bagels? Set their toilet paper over or under? Inquiring minds want to know.


No problem at all. After all, “all Batarians look alike”, RIGHT??? (Japes for days.)


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I’ll start reviews tonight in time for posting tomorrow.

I also need to do my sheet; and the first IC.... Busy meeeeee!
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Hi @Dervish

Really happy to see Sabinus on another outing again, and I appreciate how you've made some tweaks, changes, and updates. I think that's just indicative of how your writing has changed and improved since I last saw him.

I like how grounded he is. That he's stable, and also his empathy which I think will come along handy on this trip - it's a character quality that is always needed.

I like the history, and the attention to detail that you pay - flexing hard on your general ME knowledge. He's a very well fleshed out character, and I can see that you're excited to revisit him as well. I am interested to know what makes Sabinus tick - he's a very easy-going, down-to-earth character with an easy, level personality. I would like to see you push him past those limits of comfort, and hopefully we can get to a point in the RP where that can happen.

I'm excited to see how he grows this time around, the choices he'll make, the things he'll do, and the relationships he'll form.

Congrats, please move him to the character tab - Sabinus is accepted!
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Hi @The Ghost Note

I'll preface this by saying there's a lot to like about Maya.

She has some really interesting aspects to her personality. You haven't been afraid to really push those more negative traits that serve to make a character feel real and dimensional.

I like her history, I like that her skills only really stretch to humans. It's realistic and interesting for our setting.

A few things I've noticed, however. You mention in the appearance section that she is a cook - but it's not brought up again, and you switch to medic. Was this intentional?

Her goal is also very vague - I'd like to see something more specific to her. I think you can find that by just going over your sheet again, and thinking about the character some more.

I love the concept, and Maya is accepted - however, I'd like to see you just give the sheet another once over, to see if you can find an element that will elevate the character a little bit more - cross all of the t's and dot all of the i's.

I'm going to be making a Discord, so feel free to hop in there and we can brainstorm there as well :)
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Hello!

This is a fantastic sheet, imo.

I like how you've written in some of the political information on the Vorcha through your history - you've given a good, reasonable foundation to Iryk that makes him really easy to understand, and also to feel sympathy for - to the point I'm actually overlooking his violent nature a little, ha! Super clever, and nicely succinct as well.

I think he's a risky character, he's potentially volatile, in a situation which will absolutely get volatile for... Most of it. But he's not without his redeeming features, you didn't go overboard in one direction or the other.

I'm really happy for Iryk to get a place in the RP.
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Hi @Heat

*Wave*

I love this Drell.

I like that there's a lot of melancholy in this story, I like this character a lot, and it feels almost like a little bit different from what I've seen you do before. Everything in Satka's story makes sense, everything adds up and you've put a lot of time and effort into exploring his story. It's a different take on a Drell than what I usually see.

Is it Satka or Satko? There are a few discrepancies in the sheet so I'm not sure - before you post it, just make sure those are fixed ;)

My only other ntipick is choosing pacifism as a weakness. I'm not sure, I think you can find something else because that's almost something that can be both a strength and a weakness, actually. I might move his pacifism into his personality, and find a physical weakness to replace it since his 2nd weakness looks like depressive bouts.
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I've been tied up at my computer all day, and I'm probably not going to finish these reviews just now -- I kind of want to do something weekend-y with the last hours of my weekend; so everything will be finalised, my sheet will be done, and IC will be done tomorrow evening.

That gives a few of you some time to finish sheets as well :)
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A few things I've noticed, however. You mention in the appearance section that she is a cook - but it's not brought up again, and you switch to medic. Was this intentional?


No it wasn't. I just suck at proofreading.

Her goal is also very vague - I'd like to see something more specific to her. I think you can find that by just going over your sheet again, and thinking about the character some more.


I honestly couldn't really come up with a goal for her other than trying to survive in this crazy universe (and then failing at that and getting subsumed by reapers).
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@Stormflyx yeah it was super late when I did the entire sheet and the name slipped my mind a few times. It’s supposed to be Satka. I’ll change it and figure out a new weakness.
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I was planning to make my own RP but you seem to have beat me to the punch, room for one more?
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I was planning to make my own RP but you seem to have beat me to the punch, room for one more?


You will need to have finished your sheet in the next few hours for consideration.
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Alright, here we go. Hope it's alright.



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Hi @Hank

Delilah is a very interesting character that I can see you've put a lot of time and effort into. She feels very fleshed out, and I like this almost duality of her character - how she's living as she is, with who she was. I think that's too interesting of a concept to pass up on in a role play that will be dealing with a lot of horror themes, in scary situations.

I like that much of her story is grounded in just her, which adds a nice human element in a massively rich sci-fi world.

I'm.... concerned for her wellbeing throughout this roleplay.

She is accepted and can be moved to the character tab.
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I am very sorry that my previous comment was harsh. I was trying to be funny and the joke didn't land, it flew so far off the mark. I'm very sorry.

I like Shy; what I had intended to portray was a narrowing eye at this ball of personality and almost abrasive quirks that will rub people the wrong the way. I think that's how you intended her to be, I am sorry if I have misjudged that and then acted like a b-i-t-c-h.

She is annoying though.

"And yes, she comes across as remarkably entitled and lazy." <--- annoying 👺

That's not a bad thing, like I said - we always need conflict and Shy will be sure to add a level of it that is a little different than just outright aggression/passive aggression towards others/hatred. Emotions that are very strong. I think that making a character that doesn't really understand people, on the same hand makes her hard to understand with others too - and that's an interesting conflict to play with, that is different and nuanced.

She is accepted and I'm happy to have you here.

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Alright, here we go. Hope it's alright.



Hi @Nightbringer

First of all, finally - a Quarian!

I love Quarians and they're usually way more popular, how did we get to the last day of submissions without one?

Anyway, I love this character - but he still feels a little rough around the edges in areas. There's a lot to like about him. Something that I keep going back to that I really like is this little personality quirk; "He enjoys the company and conversation of his crewmates, but the lack of laughter might be what makes others think that Vaan doesn’t think so highly of them, when often the opposite is true."

I find it so endearingly odd, I think, that he doesn't laugh? I don't know why - I just really like that tidbit. That's the kind of information I always remember most from a sheet :>

I want to accept Vaan, but I think he just needs a little bit more working on the sheet. In particular, the history - I'd like to see a little bit about how he ended up on Omega to join the Caelestis mission and why - I feel like I know why from reading the history, but I would like that added in just to bring his story to the present.

I think there's further to go with him as well, there's more that can be done with his personality in particular. I'd love to see more of the quirks, I'd like to know what does make him tick.

So, it's a tentative yes for now Night, but maybe just polish up the sheet a little more first :)

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Hi @Scrivener!

I like what I see of Von, I like that you've taken a very military background - and I can see Von and Sabinus having some interesting conversations for sure. Xenophobia is not something I want to miss out on in the roleplay-- okay that sounds really wrong! What I mean to say is, I think there's a lot of potential for conflict with a character like Von, specifically in the cast that we do have, where everyone is vastly different and fills out a different role. There is opportunity for conflict, but also growth and that's what we're here for, right? :>

Also I know it's mean, but I'm tickled by his bad knee. (Sorry!)

There is absolutely a place for Von in this roleplay. That said, it's still lacking in details. You can't give him a dodgy knee and not write an appearance section where we get to visualise how he holds himself, whether he has a disgruntled expression, how he looks when he does a rare smile - this is flavour that's currently missing from the sheet that I think just gives us a bigger, brighter picture of the character, and also helps you in understanding him and translating that to us as well.

Tentative acceptance, pending some more work on the sheet :)
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